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| marinus stiria by bryn | 59 Review(s) |
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| Imrahoil | Reviewed Chapter: 14 on 10/29/2003 |
| I wouldn't mind your attention span but only if I got your creativity as well and then I would use your creativity to punish you for every single cliffhanger. Would you like to swap? | |
| The Karenator | Reviewed Chapter: 16 on 10/28/2003 |
| bryn, Bergil is back. Batty is having a cryptic moment and Aragorn is scratching his head over why in all of Arda would Gimli leave his axe behind. I loved Aragorn's reply to Bergil when Bergil voiced his hope that the woman would ride the horse off a cliff. “Nay—the horse is too smart.” I agree with Bergil; that is a bit of the old Aragorn. I have not quite gotten a handle on Hadeem yet. He's mysterious to some degree, but I can't tell which side his bread is buttered on. I wish Eowyn had a better translator, too. Little mistakes..like calling one's prize stallion a cow... can really disrupt negotiations. Men are so funny about stuff like that. You could probably call his wife...or wives, maybe, in his case...a sway-backed bovine fly catcher and that would be fine, but his horse! Oh, what dangerous ground we tread. This is moving along well. You're juggling a lot of characters and keeping them in the fray. I'm ready now for the next chapter. :>)Karen | |
| The Karenator | Reviewed Chapter: 15 on 10/28/2003 |
| SO..just why did Aragorn send Eomer away? I can guess that he didn't want Eomer to interrupt his little quest, but...I'll just have to wait and see. At least we got to see cute little Elfwine. Ahh.h.h And then Eomer rode of into the night...to Faramir? Or did he? Well...a fine mess Gimli found himself in. Personally, when Mortsdil asked how many Elves, I would have told him that such numbers had not been seen Dagorlad. But no...Gimli is honest. Meanwhile..back at the sea....Legolas is caught in the undertow and sucked into the depths of the tumbling swirling water. We can get a metaphor out this one and it's a dang good one. Poor elf...he's drowning all over the place. Another good chapter...I'm off to the next one....Karen | |
| The Karenator | Reviewed Chapter: 14 on 10/28/2003 |
| bryn, Your descriptions of the Void were so well done. Mortsdil thoughts and welling panic at the nothingness, but yet, the confines of the dark space were eery. He's such a slug. Not that his companion is a little ray of sunshine. You give them such a dangerous, despicable,well...evil visage. Their dialogue has this sort of sly, infected (I do mean, infected...like a plague!) word play that fairly drips of malice. Morgoth is so happily evil! Poor Legolas. His subborn Elven pride just will not let him admit to Gimli or to himself that he can't fight the sea longing with a well placed arrow. Gimli handles this well. The strength of this friendship is easy to see. I like the way you write their interaction. Good show. I'm reading on.....see ya next chapter. Karen | |
| The Karenator | Reviewed Chapter: 13 on 10/26/2003 |
| bryn This was another good chapter....actually all the newly posted ones are. I'm condensing into just this one so I won't bore you too badly. You have continued to keep your characters moving...and thus the story...and remain true to the conflict. There is humor and good dialogue. I loved the scenes between Gimli and Legolas. "Death of elf by axe"! Loved it! Bergil is such a fun fellow...reminds me of Halbarad from Aragorn's memories. I guess Bergil kind of reminds Aragorn of his old friend, too. It was a sad moment for Aragorn to recall Halbarad and sense his loss. The set up of the pirates and their allies was quite good. We're seeing everything sort of begin to gel....taking us along to the next chapter. Your pace is good and the flow is smooth. I'm looking forward to reading more. Karen | |
| Jay of Lasgalen | Reviewed Chapter: 13 on 10/24/2003 |
| I think I've reviewed this chapter before, on ff.net, but I'm a writer, so I know how important reviews are. Legolas' unease and embarrassment was wonderfully written when Gimli revealed his desires. And Legolas' repeated excuse 'but Ris had a beard' was marvellous! I like this story, and hope you will post all of it here soon. I can no longer review on ff.net, so only review here or by e-mail. An update would be greatly appreciated! Jay | |
| Miriel | Reviewed Chapter: 9 on 10/20/2003 |
| The use of the storm in this is magnificent...the sea is truly out of balance, is it not? Wow...what Legolas saw in the Silmaril...I'm speechless. That was so well written! The calling of the sea..it has many meanings. *Screams* No! UPdate, update, update!!! Once again, I love your use of the weather. The seas' calling...if Legolas is to go to the sea, what will happen to him? Cheers, and update soon! Author Reply: Legolas + Sea + Silmaril = Not A Good Combination Righty, I'm off to update! Thank you for the many wonderful reviews, Miriel!!! :) | |
| Miriel | Reviewed Chapter: 8 on 10/20/2003 |
| Melkor is very impatient. Also a bit crazed. Oo. *Winces* Lovely man, that Mortsdil. Oh, how sad. They killed Terigon...his poor wife. (Although she's not in much better shape.) Hopefully Iluvatar will have mercy on him. Oh, yes, Melkor is in SUCH a position to offer rewards...or will the Silmaril enable him to return to ME? *Gasp* As a little old lady? :) The letters on the Ring WERE a form of Tengwar. Author Reply: I suppose being chained in a Void for eternity does have its drawbacks. Like insanity. I wonder if he talks to himself. Tegiron was a good guy, overall. He's probably at peace with little Muriel. Poor Bitaliel! Yes, yes, the Silmaril is the key! Mortsdil is the tool (though he doesn't quite know it yet, does he?) *snicker* You know in 'The Emperor's New Groove' when Eezma is transformed into the cat? I'm having visions of Melkor as a little old lady... "Muwahaha--is that... is that MY voice?" I thought the Ring letters were Tengwar of some sort.... | |
| Miriel | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 10/20/2003 |
| Interesting how Legolas sees Minas Tirith as a prison. Interesting as well how even his horse is skittish of the city. Does Arwen feel the same at times, I wonder? LOL at Vargon. I do that sometimes... Haha. Legolas just aimlessly wanders off into the city. Aragorn showing off the jewel reminds me of Frodo in the movies. ("No! Put that thing away, someones going to take it! Wait...no, leave it out...pretty ring...") Balnce of the Sea, Earth, and Sky. Just like the Rings...very well put. He wants to lock it up! like Feanor! And Thingol! No...we KNOW what happened to them... Thank goodness that the elves will take counsel together. Author Reply: I did some researching on the significance of 3, because Tolkien seems to use a lot of it. Not only can it represent eternity, but it can represent balance as well. And the 3 elements. I found it interesting that one stone was taken into the sky and became a star of sorts (the element of Air), one was tossed into the sea (I believe that was my buddy Maedhros, poor guy. There we have the element of Water), and one got tossed into a crack in the earth (*grimace* grasping at straws, can't quite remember who was responsible for that one, but there is the element of Fire). Again, I repeat: BAD ARAGORN! ;) | |
| Miriel | Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 10/20/2003 |
| Ouch. Bergil's poor head. I enjoy Legolas' respones to the curiousity of mortals. Glowing Legolas...Shh! Not so loud! The fangirls will hear! Where did Bitaliel get the box? From her home? At first I thought that it was the box the Silmaril came in, but then I realized that it had washed up boxless. What did I miss? *Groans* Why did Aragorn look at it in Bitaliel's prescense? Stupid, stupid, man. At least exercise the proper self control and WAIT until later. Has he no brains? (Sorry for ranting.) Ew. Gross. Why would she do that? Pain yes, but...ugh. Stone for the Elfstone...*shivers* Does she not wish to see the stone? Is that it? I loved the visual of Arwen running down the hall. I want to look like that at night, instead of something that makes others shriek. :) Author Reply: Yes, BAD ARAGORN! BAD! Seeing as Bitaliel's insane (um, no pun intended there), I suppose in an odd crazy sort of way it would make sense for her to gouge her eyes out. You're right--she doesn't want to see the stone. And she thinks the only way to avoid doing so is to get rid of her eyes. That way she won't see it even by accident. My Arwen impersonation would probably consist of me tripping over said flowing nightgown and tumbling down several flights of stairs... Curse those Elves and their light-footedness. :) | |