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| Shadow by fael bain | 52 Review(s) |
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| Elvenesse | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 9/5/2003 |
| Wow! Another chapter already, and a nice introduction to the evil entity. Could you just clarify who it was that knew the game was up, Legolas or (I'm assuming) one of his friends? Author Reply: Hehhee, you've gotta read somemore if you want to find out! ;) Thanks again for the review! | |
| Elvenesse | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 9/5/2003 |
| I have a few small quibbles, in the prologue I think you said Second Age, when you *probably* meant Third and at one stage, you referred to Legolas as the fair prince, it just jars somehow. Also, I don't know whether his friends would stalk him, trying to hit him. I know it's improbable, but there is a chance that they could kill their Crown Prince. Apart from that I think that this is a promising story, I like seeing how they would deal with the encroaching evil and describing Legolas’ relationship with is father as distant is fine. Author Reply: Oops thanks for correcting the errors, Elvenesse! I'm glad you like it! | |