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| The Seeds of Time by daw the minstrel | 28 Review(s) |
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| French Pony | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/13/2007 |
| Hmmm. Is this the first time we've been inside Lorellin's head? What a great opportunity to learn about what makes this legendary woman tick. Ithilden is probably right that Lorellin would have made an excellent troop commander. She has charisma by the bucketful, and she seems to be more of a natural leader than her husband is. Thranduil leads by shining example and intimidation, but Lorellin's skills are more subtle than that. She doesn't tell people what to do, she makes them want to do it to please her. She could have been a major power in the Woodland Realm if she had lived. Author Reply: I think it is the first time I've written from her POV. I might have forgotten something, but I believe I've mostly written flashbacks that use her family's memories of her, so they can't go inside her head. What a great discipline and useful tool POV is. | |
| obsidianj | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/13/2007 |
| Oh, another longer story in your special Woodland realm. Finally, I get to know Lorellin. I have heard much about her in later stories, but here she shows up herself. You describe little!Legolas so well, him racing ahead and skipping along the adults seeing everything without quite understanding what is going on. And Eilian and Ithilden make an appearance, too. All I need from a story from you Author Reply: Thanks, Obsidianj. It's interesting to try to write from a kid's POV, not sentimentalize him, show how things would look to him, and yet convey stuff he doesn't understand to the reader. | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/13/2007 |
| Heavenly. Lorellin's menfolk are in hog's heaven and don't realise it. I'll get back to you soon when I have enough time to be coherent. But three of the best letters in the world. TBC. Wonderful Author Reply: The future does loom on the horizon, doesn't it? | |
| Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/13/2007 | |
| YAY! Author Reply: LOLOL. Well, that's short but very sweet. Thank you. | |
| sofia | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/13/2007 |
| Yay, another story! Looks to be a great one. I love Legolas at this age, its too cute. I also find Lorellin a bit... I don't know, a mystery? I guess I've read so much about Ithilden and Eilian and Legolas that I feel like I know them and love them, but Lorellin is still kind of new and foreign (because of her death) so I don't feel the same love for her as I do for your other characters. Though this story, no doubt, will focus on her so I can't wait to read more! Author Reply: I don't know Lorellin as well either! I've never written from her POV before, only from the POV of her family remembering her, so one of the things I wrote down for this story is the explore her a little bit. She was obviously very important to them all. You can tell that by the gigantic hole her death leaves. So I'm still figuring her out. Which is the fun part. :-) | |
| erunyauve | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/13/2007 |
| >>At the sharpness in her voice, his brows drew together. "I do not mean hardened to it. You know I do not." >>She did know. She had seen that brief closing of the eyes, so like what Legolas did when he wanted to deny the existence of some unpleasant reality, the beets on his plate or the broken vase that had tumbled off a table. This is such a perfect little bit of 'showing'. >>From a nearby table, she plucked the little chalk drawing of her holding Legolas. It had turned out well, she thought. The artist had captured the wide-eyed curiosity that made Legolas's explorations of the world such a joy to watch. She set the picture next to those of Ithilden and Eilian, drawn when they were the same age, Ithilden holding a ball he had chosen after serious deliberation and Eilian trying to fling himself off her lap. I love these descriptions! This is all the sadder knowing that Legolas' Nana will be one the next deaths in the Woodland Realm. I don't know how you do it, but every time you write these characters, you find something new to say about them. Author Reply: What's making a difference for me in those passages is that I've never used Nana's POV before. Always before, I've had my characters remembering her in flashbacks, so I could never go into her head. Now I'm feeling my way toward characterizing her from inside her head, and I thought her family would be one really important thing to her, so she often sees things in terms of them. POV is such a fascinating tool to play with. I'm glad you liked it, Erunyauve. | |
| rikki | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/13/2007 |
| Oh, oh, oh, Lorellin and all the family together. I was excited to see a new story here when I peeked in during my lunch time. The small details you have added with the things that show up in your later stories (the pictures of Ithilden, Eilian and Legolas that the artist did especially) and Lorellin's POV really makes the family look different from a Nana's touch. It also is a little like looking at a scene through a veil, Lorellin has a very wood elvish way of approaching life and that affected her life and her influence on her family. Great start! Author Reply: Thanks, Rikki. I think this is the first time I've used Nana's POV and I'm really enjoying it. As you say, she's a wood elf. What would it have been like for her to marry the king and have to take up the burdens of a ruling family that serves those it rules? And how would her sons and husband have been different for her presence? I love thinking about stuff like that, even when I don't feel I've quite got the right answer. | |
| Alison H | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/13/2007 |
| That was a very bittersweet chapter, Daw.Lorellin is so loved by everyone that it breaks my heart to know that she will soon be gone from the side of her adoring husband and beloved sons.The loss is almost unbearable to think about and that is a testament to your incredible characters, that we care about them so much. I really enjoyed Legolas' POV in this chapter;he is just learning to read the signs to when his brothers are angry or upset and he was quick to comfort Eilian by holding his hand.His observations were adorable. Ithilden's voice sounded like fur? My, I would love to hear that!! I wonder how Legolas will deal with his first funeral? I hope that the event won't be too much for him.Lorellin's objections were sound but he is the son of the King above all else.Thranduil will keep his eyes on his youngest, I think. I'm glad you're posting again, Daw.As usual, your stories are always wonderful to read.I've been reading a few of your older stories lately and I missed your regular updates.I look forward to the next chapter. Ali. Author Reply: Thanks, Ali. This is the first time I've been in Lorellin's POV, I think. I've had to stop and try to work out how all this would look to her, how she would think, what would be important to her, and it's interesting for me. Legolas is a sweetie. At first, I didn't have him going to the funeral, but my beta pointed out that I was writing about the duties of the king's sons, and this would probably be one of them even at this age. I have a draft of a second original novel done and am letting it sit for a while, and it's Spring Break! So it's fanfic time. | |