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| The Seeds of Time by daw the minstrel | 28 Review(s) |
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| White Wolf | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/14/2007 |
| I always smile when I see a story with your name on it. I know it will be a treat involving this wonderful elven family you've created. I love little Legolas stories, especially when he's this young. I particularly like this one, because it not only includes Lorellin but is from her POV. It's so obvious why her family loves her so deeply and vice versa. I'm looking forward to more. Author Reply: People think writing about kids is easy but I find it tricky. It's so tempting to sentimentalize, and it's hard to get the language patterns right. Of course, I guess elflings learned to talk early so they may have mastered things like complex sentences early too. But I've made so much of how he suffered at his mother's death that I wanted to show how, for him, the world revolves around her. To a lesser extent, it does for the rest of them too. Glad you liked it. | |
| pipinheart | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/13/2007 |
| Lovely... Its nice to see a story with Lorellin in it. You can see how everyone adored her, and you see a different Thranduil in it one who very much loves his wife. Of course, as a mother she is worried about her children and would protect them. You can tell she tries to calm the waters between Elian and his father. And little Legolas is adorable here, and his nana wants to protect him from all harm. Loved the comparision of her looking at the pictures done of each of her sons and how different in personality they were. great read...please update soon... Author Reply: If Nana had lived, I think this family's future would have been easier. Shadow would still have spread, but home would have been a less tense place sometimes for all of them. I've been trying to figure Nana out and one thing I decided was that her family was central to her, so she's protective and thinks about them a lot. | |
| Jess | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/13/2007 |
| Fantastic. I think I am not the only one that was thrilled to see that "TBC" at the end of this chapter. Lorellin's POV is proving to be very fascinating so far, she definately provides some intriguing insights into the other characters that we haven't really experienced yet. By the way, would you happen to know offhand which story of yours contained a flashback to the few days immediately following Lorellin's death? I hope I am not imagining this, but I seem to remember a scene with Eilian returning home after from patrol after hearing of his mother's demise only to find Thranduil and Ithilden have already left to hunt down the orc behind the attack. I think he stopped for a momenent with Legolas also, before taking off after his father and brother. I have been skimming through your other works but can't seen to find the scene I am thinking of. Author Reply: Thanks, Jess. I haven't written a multi-chapter story in a while. Not that this will be terribly long, but then my stories almost never are. That scene is well hidden. It's in chapter 4 of "See the Stars," the first story I ever wrote. Not too long ago, I looked at that story and let my finger hover over the delete key for a while before deciding not to do it. I think I've learned some stuff about writing since then! | |
| Gwynhyffar | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/13/2007 |
| Awwwwww, I'm so glad you decided to write this. As sad as coming events may be, it's so nice to see Thranduil et al together and appreciating each other - even with poetic nonsense... or rather, especially with poetic nonsense. I really enjoyed the interaction between Thranduil and Lorellin. They fit each other well and she is a good balance to him - and he to her. I like her glaring at Thranduil. I like her suggesting that he needs to listen and not talk. Maybe he needs to talk with and not at. hmmm. I also liked the reference to the drawings of her with each of the boys when they were small. It's always nice to see links to other stories. Author Reply: From reading some of the reviews, it's only just occurred to me how different Thranduil looks when he's with her. He's not spouting poetic nonsense at the boys! And they keep their glares to themselves, if they know what's good for them. This part of him disappeared when she died. I like linking to other stories too. They all feel like one big story to me. | |
| meckinock | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/13/2007 |
| I can't decide which was my favorite line - Lorellin telling Ithilden to chill out or telling Thranduil he had a gift for spouting poetic nonsense. It's cool that you're writing in her POV. Author Reply: I love POV. It's a means by which I can surprise myself. I'm still working on Lorellin's though she feels familiar from the way her family remembered her. When I write about the sons, they don't get to see Adar's poetic nonsense side. :-) | |
| vaske | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/13/2007 |
| Yay, another story with your wonderful charcters! My favourite part was seeing Lorellin interacting with her sons. My second favourite part was the story's 'in progress' status... Author Reply: I'm excited about writing from Lorellin's point of view because I haven't done it before. To me, she and Eilian are alike, and she sometimes finds Ithilden as maddening as Thranduil finds Eilian. I hope you like it. | |
| Manderly | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/13/2007 |
| What a wonderful surprise to see a new story from you, Daw, though I guess I shouldn't be as I remember you mentioning that you were working on a new storyline a while back. All the same, my heart did a little happy flip when I saw this. Baby Legolas and his nana, all in the same story. This can't get any better! Other than a few brief glimpses, we've never had this double treat before and I am looking forward to reading every word of this story. Author Reply: A couple of years back, I was moaning about how I couldn't write from Nana's POV because I needed Legolas in the story (that was back when I wouldn't do an all OC story--good times), and JastaElf suggested I write about this time frame. It seemed so obvious when she said it! Anyway, I put it on my list of possible stories and here it is. It's fun trying to figure out how Nana would think and react to Thranduil, her children, the situation of the Realm. I hope you enjoy it. | |
| Agape4Gondor | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/13/2007 |
| Great start as always, Daw.... I particularly liked the two sides of being the King's wife... Author Reply: Thanks, Agape. I think the House of Oropher ruled by serving the Woodland Realm and were probably about as far from modern royalty as you can get. That's my theory, anyway, and I'm sticking to it. :-) | |
| Lianna | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/13/2007 |
| I read this about an hour ago, and I found myself thinking, "Yes, that sounds like Lorellin." I couldn't understand why I felt that way, though, since you've only written about her from a distance. Then I realized what happened. You didn't write about her, but Bodkin did, in her Valinor story using your characters. Lorellin's voice and perspective here seem very consistent with the Lorellin we met in Valinor. It's nice to be able to pay another visit to your Mirkwood. I didn't know whether you would be writing multichapter stories about this world anymore. Author Reply: I actually had to go look to be sure, but Bodkin didn't write from Lorellin's POV either. So far as I know, she's untouched territory. :-) However, I have to say I'm pleased you sort of recognized her from the glimpses we've had of her in her family's memories. I'm feeling my way along with her, because she's a new POV for me. I wasn't sure I'd be writing multichapter fanfic stories anymore either, but I have time right now, and I really do enjoy it. It's such a terrific chance to experiment and see how readers react to various things. | |
| Jay of Lasgalen | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/13/2007 |
| It's great to see another story of the Thranduilionath! There are some lovely glimpses into Eilian's character here: 'When he was being a warrior, he almost never argued.' I like the 'almost'!! And: "If you want to help Eilian, you will listen to him, not talk to him." Lorellin had a profound insight into her middle son, but I don't think Thranduil ever quite saw him the same way. I like this line as well: 'Rogue never talked to Legolas the way he did to Eilian, but he listened, and Legolas hoped someday he might decide to talk while Legolas was there.'That says a lot about Legolas, and Eilian, and the relationship between them. A great story, and I can't wait to see more! Author Reply: I do think Lorellin understood Eilian in a way Thranduil never did, but then she had trouble understanding Ithilden, love him though she did. Legolas trusts Eilian absolutely. If Eilian says Rogue talked, he did! Thanks, Jay. | |