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| Shadows of a Nameless Fear by Budgielover | 19 Review(s) |
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| Elemmírë | Reviewed Chapter: 11 on 8/12/2006 |
| I guessed right as to Frodo's injuries! A tension hemo-pneumothorax. As a healthcare professional who deals entirely with lungs and breathing, I am quite interested to see how you go about treating this in Middle-earth fashion. :D (It's a good thing both Elrond and Aragorn are present, as I think Frodo will need both their skills) Will he have to suffer from smoke inhalation too? He was trapped in there an awfully long time with such an intense fire. He checked the hobbit’s head, then his neck, then felt down his backbone. Elrond did the same along Frodo’s lower body... When he pressed over Frodo’s ribs, the hobbit moaned and pain etched his face. Sam echoed his master’s cry as a bubble of blood formed on Frodo’s lips and ran down from his mouth. “The breaks are in the curved portion of the outer part of the rib cage. ” “Is there costochondral separation?” “I cannot tell if the cartilage has torn from the breastbone. The ground is too uneven.” Aragorn’s face darkened as Frodo coughed and blood ran from his nose. Elrond leaned closer. “His breaths are shallow and fast. He is blue around the nose and mouth.” Placing an arm on each side of the hobbit, he sank down and put his ear against Frodo’s chest. I absolutely LOVE your descriptions of how Frodo's injuries were assessed by Aragorn and Elrond. It was highly accurate even down to the terminology used. I also liked how you had Elrond use a medical word or two and then Aragoen explain the definition in layman's terms in his answers. Very effective for those who don't understand medical speak. It's funny how basic first aid techniques haven't really changed much over the course of history. The blood seeping out of Frodo's nose and mouth, the blue lips, etc. were also very accurate details given the type of injury you chose. Ah, Sam's dismantling of the sedan chair had a far greater purpose. Sam is always so very practicle. Flames billowed around the tall figure, flames gone from red to yellow to white with heat. They seemed to curl around the wizard, dancing through his hair, licking at his robes, but they did not burn him and they did not touch the small, still figure in his arms. That is such an awesome and vivid desription of Gandalf's powers, Budgie! I hope poor, courageous Pippin gets rescued or thwarts the orcs soon! Thank goodness his actions saved Frodo from what could have been some very serious burns. Looking forward to more, Budgie! (Especially the comfort and healing) Author Reply: Elemmírë, your review quite overwhelmed me. Not its length as much (though I was impressed and grateful for that), but for your enthusiasm. You are the third healthcare professional to comment on the accuracy of the medical details - I hope I do not disappoint. I did extensive research on Frodo's symptoms, but do not have first-hand knowledge of his injuries (thank God) as I do have first-hand knowledge of tracking, hunting, and fishing. Anyway, we are drawing closer to the comfort and healing part - and a surprise. Thank you for going to such an effort! | |
| Andrea | Reviewed Chapter: 11 on 8/11/2006 |
| Oh my! That was one of those moments when I would have liked to jump directly into the story to tell a certain King that Frodo was very much aware of what was going on, and only wanted to tell him that he should look for Pippin - immediately! Stupid man, but the discovery of Gimli and Gandalf's comment should have made him alert. I'm really glad that Frodo now is in the care of the two best healers of ME, and Sam is by his side. But what about Pippin? The soldier was so close. Maybe someone will find his message on the wall. I really hope so! Each stride forward was a stride away from Frodo. Tears of grief and terror merged in his eyes and ran down his upside-face, lodging in his hair like little pricks of ice. For Frodo, he thought as his face bumped against the creature’s stinking back. For Frodo. For Frodo - I will never forget that scene in the movie! Brave Pippin! There has to be someone to find that note. And where is Merry? Author Reply: I loved that scene, too, Andrea. And your indignation over Aragorn's failing to understand what Frodo was trying to tell him. How typical of Men. I am delighted you are so involved in the story, and assure you your question on Merry's whereabouts will be answered in the next chapter. | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 11 on 8/11/2006 |
| If Gandalf is looking for a new job now that Sauron has fallen, he could do worse than the Fire Service... I'm glad Frodo is in the hands of the healers - and that they have learned enough to worry about Pippin. But someone needs to track him down quickly - before anything worse happens. By the way - I love Sam's acceptance of being carried by Legolas ... and his comment. Author Reply: 'before anything worse happens' - er...funny you should mention that... *cough* *grins* | |
| Lindelea | Reviewed Chapter: 11 on 8/10/2006 |
| Read it again, and was particularly struck by this: Pippin grit his teeth, determined not to hinder the orc carrying him like a sack of grain over its shoulder. Each stride forward was a stride away from Frodo. Tears of grief and terror merged in his eyes and ran down his upside-face, lodging in his hair like little pricks of ice. For Frodo, he thought as his face bumped against the creature’s stinking back. For Frodo. Yes, a true sacrifice, a step taken with his eyes fully open, knowing the consequences to himself, yet setting all thoughts of self-preservation aside. Very noble. I do hope you will rescue him soon, relatively intact, and deal with those orcs as they deserve. Might, perhaps, a sharp-eyed Elf or Half-elven eyes see the inscription? (O my. Just the thought of Elladan and Elrohir, and their mother, and now Pippin is in the hands of Orcs...) Author Reply: Thank you, Lindelea, for remarking on that passage - I worked on it very hard for I felt it was important. And I'm so glad you haven't forgotten Elladan and Elrohir... *grins* | |
| GamgeeFest | Reviewed Chapter: 11 on 8/10/2006 |
| Stairs? Sam will be lucky if he gets to set foot on *any* surface for the next few weeks. Aragorn should command that he has to be carried everywhere just to prove his point, and then find him a wheelchair once Sam learns his lesson. ;D *resists urge to smack Aragorn* Frodo isn't asking where Pippin is. He's saying Pippin's in danger! Surely someone has to notice that he's wearing Pippin's clothes! I guess they are assuming that Pippin was the one to kill the Men. You'd think they would then wonder why Pippin left Frodo there to burn or why he didn't show up once they arrived. Poor Pippin! He was so close to be rescued. His half-hearted 'help' in the stone wall dust was so sad. He's pretty much resigned himself to the fact that he might never be found. If those orcs get him out of the city, he won't be! Can't wait for more!! Author Reply: GamgeeFest, thank you for being indignant for Frodo's sake! Aragorn, being a typical Man, didn't listen to Frodo with his heart as well as his ears. Can you imagine the look on the King of the West's face if you did slap him upside the head? I loved your idea of ordering Sam to be carried everywhere - but I think Sam wouldn't obey. *grins* I remember in one of my short stories, Elrond asks Aragorn, "Cannot you manage one little hobbit?" (meaning Frodo) Aragorn looks at his boots and thinks, "No. And how shall I manage four of them?" He probably made the Shire independent just to spare himself the grief. | |
| Elflingimp | Reviewed Chapter: 11 on 8/10/2006 |
| Poor Pippen what a sorry mess he is in,how could you leave him with that creepy orc? Cruel cliffhanger! again! I really love the angst in this story and I wish I didnt have to stop reading it but I have to wait for you to post the next chapter so hurry up now(just kidding) Author Reply: Elflingimp, if you are enjoying the Pippin/orcs plot line, you will enjoy the next chapter very much. Well ... maybe 'enjoy' isn't quite the right word. Upon consideration, it probably isn't the right word at all. Er... (Now that I have tormented you, I will say 'thank you!') | |
| Lindelea | Reviewed Chapter: 11 on 8/10/2006 |
| O drat. I'm right there with Pippin. You certainly have a way of pulling the reader into the story! Author Reply: 'Praise from the praiseworthy.' Thank you! | |
| Fiondil | Reviewed Chapter: 11 on 8/10/2006 |
| Have been enjoying this story very much. Discovered it just before leaving for China, where I will be living for the next year, so I didn't get a chance to review it and have only just caught myself up on the story. I love the way you have portrayed such people as Aragorn and Elrond, Faramir and the hobbits. And your sense of timing is great as are the descriptions of the city. Almost makes me think I am really there seeing it all. Keep up the good work and I look forward to reading more. Author Reply: Hello, Fiondil, and thank you for your kind words. China? I lived in Taipei for three years, and loved it. I assume you have Internet access there from your words? Thank you for your compliments and your review, and hope you enjoy the rest of the story as much. | |
| Lotrgirl1415 | Reviewed Chapter: 11 on 8/10/2006 |
| YAY and update...the chapters keep getting better and better! i g2g 4 now cuz it's a school night but the next time I'm on I'll leave a better review!!xoxoxo ~Katie Author Reply: You mean all the angst isn't killing you, Katie? I shall have to try harder! *grins* | |