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| The River by Indigo Bunting | 24 Review(s) |
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| Jay of Lasgalen | Reviewed Chapter: 12 on 2/28/2006 |
| Great to see an update! This whole story has been wonderfully tense, and this chapter is no exception. The race along the river, discovering Sam and reviving him was very well done - and I loved the nuances of Frodo's reaction to the mention of Faramir's near drowning. Very subtly done. You do a lovely job of not quite explaining what Aragorn is doing to remove the arrow from Legolas's back, while leaving vivid pictures in the imagination. Yes, I know Legolas will recover (and soon) but this is still full of suspense. Jay Author Reply: Ah, thanks, Jay. With regard to the “surgery”, what you said was just what I was trying to do – let the reader know what was going on without really saying it. I have extremely limited knowledge of the details of arrow removal, but I can guess at the basics. Who needs more than that, anyway? The thing’s got to be pulled out. I did spend some time mulling over the tools that Aragorn might have with him, though. | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 12 on 2/28/2006 |
| Oh excellent - more information on this nerve-wracking story! I'm so glad Sam made it from the river and it's a very good thing that Merry is a Brandybuck and knows what to do in the case of apparent drownings. I love the Boromir point of view - and his flashbacks to Faramir's near death experience. Aragorn must be made of iron to pursue Legolas like that - and he is still alive to be brought back and operated on. That is one tough elf. Good bit of Gandalf magic too - just when it's needed. Of course, getting them back together and attempting to stitch them back together is a bit too hopeful and there must be disasters to come - but I am relieved to have Legolas and Sam on the right side of the river and back in a group. Looking forward to more. Author Reply: Thanks, Bodkin! I’m happy to have Sam and Legolas out of the river as well, even if they’re a bit worse for wear. It is a good thing for Sam that Merry knew what to do. Glad you liked Boromir’s POV. I don’t think he comes across as a very sympathetic character in the books; I actually thought that the films did a more thorough portrayal of him. The origin of the Faramir-nearly-drowning story seems to have two halves. One involves the fact that the river itself is such a strong “character” in the story. Not only has it been the driving force behind the fates of Sam and Legolas, but many of the characters have links to rivers as well. Frodo’s parents drowned, Merry, Legolas, and Boromir live near rivers, and we can’t forget Sam’s fear of swimming. The Faramir story also originated from my belief that he and Boromir were close. I think that Boromir would have thought of his brother often – of how he was faring, of how their father was treating him, of the shoes he would have to fill should Boromir never return. It’s interesting how love can make someone strong and vulnerable at the same time. | |
| shirebound | Reviewed Chapter: 12 on 2/28/2006 |
| What a wonderfully thrilling chapter. Merry threw Sam’s back against the ground. “Breathe!” he fairly shrieked. Pippin bent down and reached for Sam’s nose. Sam’s body suddenly convulsed, and the unexpected movement so surprised Pippin that he squeaked and nearly fell over backwards. Merry scrambled off Sam’s legs and knelt at his side. “That’s it!” he cried. “Come on, Sam!” Yay Merry, and yay for everyone who toiled so wearily and unceasingly to forge this group into a true Fellowship. And good heavens, Frodo, you're allowed to let Sam know how worried you were about him! Author Reply: Thanks for the lovely comments, shirebound. So glad you think the Fellowship is behaving as a team. As for Frodo… well, a lot of things were going through his head after Sam was revived. His own parents drowned, after all. You seem to be thinking of the moment when Frodo kept reaching for Sam’s hand and withdrawing again. He was afraid for Sam, afraid that he was still hanging in the balance, afraid to disturb that balance. Never fear, though; he’ll let Sam know just how much he was missed. | |
| Lyn | Reviewed Chapter: 12 on 2/28/2006 |
| Ah...a favorite bird and a favorite author! Excellent writing! Just one suggestion: “Get my pack off of Bill, if you please. I believe the correct expression is, "Get my pack off Bill, if you please." "off of" is a colloquial expression (I use it also, but try to avoid it when writing). If I haven't mentioned it before, please consider this a request should he occasion rise; that is, use the proper form of the verb to sneak rather than the currently popular one: sneak, sneaked, has/have sneaked. Thank you again for sharing your wonderful talent with others! Author Reply: Thanks, Lyn. I don’t know if I’ll take your suggestion or not, but I’m glad you brought it up. I do want this story to be the best it can be. I’m glad you’re continuing to enjoy the story! | |