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| Legolas's Begetting Day by daw the minstrel | 29 Review(s) |
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| Karri | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 7/27/2004 |
| Woo! Go, Green-y, Go! A very entertaining chapter, daw. :-) (One thing, is there a word missing here: “What are three doing in here? Where is Eilian?”) Author Reply: Thank you, Karri. :-) This is fun to write! Thanks for the heads up on the missing word. I fixed it and then went away wondering, yet again, how it's possible not to see stuff like that when I proofread. | |
| French Pony | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 7/27/2004 |
| I am officially coming down on the side of the kids here. Kissing is gross, especially on the mouth. And Amelith is the chirpy type who has the chutzpah to call sword-and-bow-wielding elflings "cute." Eilian can do waaaaay better than her. Good thing he convinces Celuwen in the end. She knows better than to call such helpful little elflings "cute." I suppose Legolas was a relatively fortunate baby. He did have a beautiful nana who loved him, but he didn't have her for very long. On the other hand, he had an ada who liked him, which is more than, say, Faramir had. Or Frodo, who lost both parents in one swell foop. I suppose it's all in how you look at it. "Be well and do what the midwife tells you?" Excuse me? Did Ithilden just say something so mind-bogglingly arrogant to his own mother while she was in labor? If I dared to tell my mother or my aunts anything like that in a similar situation, I'd count myself fortunate if they restricted themselves to laughing me out of the room. My mother and one of my aunts would probably scold my eyebrows off my face, my other aunt might even be motivated to take a swipe at me, and my grandmother would curse at me in Russian. That is truly a rude, presumptive thing to say to the woman who gave birth to you, especially if you're a boy. I can think of several good reasons to put raspberry jam into fur-lined boots. Aaaaaaaand enter the Three Stooges. Nyuk, nyuk, nyuk. . . Three little kids, one mouse, one rowdy dance, and the place looks like one of those old comedies that ends with someone throwing a pie. I love it! And now Legolas is inadvertently going to get Eilian in trouble. Payback for kissing people on the mouth. Author Reply: I think that Celuwen would be interested in the mice! She was cool when she was a kid and I'll bet she hasn't forgotten, or she wouldn't have loved Eilian. You're right about Legolas. He has a loving family. But I do think they all miss nana. You're making me laugh about Ithilden's comment. I means it to be teasing but it sounds as if in your family, he'd get his comeuppance! When I was writing the Great Hall scene, I looked up a comment you once sent me about what instruments there would be and then I looked up what those instruments looked like. I wound up not using the real names you gave me because I didn't think any one would know what they were (except you) but they were essentially a horn, a drum, and a stringed instrument. So the musicians are your contribution to this scene, FP! | |
| Duchess67 | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 7/27/2004 |
| LOLOLOL That was too funny, the whole crazy scene in the Hall was easy to picture from your descriptions. The fact that Thranduil was afraid to startle Legolas while he was so high up without himself below to catch the Elfling was very realistic of fatherhood. Been there myself with various nieces, nephews and friends' children. *chuckling* Thank you for more of the flashbacks, these are just darling and you're making such GOOD use of them! *vbg* Loved it and already want more, greedy gus that I am. *still chuckling* Well done!!! :):):) Author Reply: I'm glad other people are laughing at this chapter, because I laughed when I was writing it and it's lonely to be the only one laughing! Even the flashbacks were fairly light in this chapter. We have kiddy Eilian and Ithilden and no orcs. Thank you, Duchess. I'm still giggling too. | |
| Ms. Whatsit | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 7/27/2004 |
| --“We are not ‘sweet,’” Turgon scowled. “We have archery lessons and sword lessons.” -- Yes, you are, Turgon! You're such a cute little boy, yes, you are! And Legolas and Annael, too! And don't even think about throwing things at me because I'm better at that sort of game than you are, I promise. So who did Eilian mean to be the "chattering pest"? The squirrel--or was it a subtle if inaccurate jab at Thranduil? Stop fretting, Thranduil. Your son's a wood-elf. He can climb a damn pillar. Poor Green-y. Not only does he have an awful name but he almost got trampled. --To Legolas, kissing on the mouth looked like a really embarrassing thing to do. -- LOL. I remember when I thought like that. You write little kids so well. Author Reply: The squirrel! He meant the squirrel! He's not insane. He would never call Thranduil that! I thought Legolas would be able to get up and down a carved pillar, but Thranduil is such an ada. And hey! Annael likes Green-y's name! Turgon is over here spitting at my screen, Ms. Whatsit. Can you feel it from there? | |
| Elena Tiriel | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 7/27/2004 |
| Oh, Daw! I am laughing so hard! Really, Eilian has no sense of propriety whatsoever! *Big loud guffaw* - Barbara Author Reply: :-) I have to admit to giggling while I wrote this. The flashbacks are more serious, of course, although in this chapter even they were pretty light. Eilian has no sense of propriety, very true. The chattering pest knows it! | |
| sofia | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 7/27/2004 |
| that was hilarious. I would like to read about Eilian and the pot of raspberry jam. -sofia Author Reply: Glad you liked it, Sofia. I made myself laugh writing it. But I think that's all you're going to get about the jam. I modeled the incident after a friend's kid who put raspberry yogurt in his own boots. Reason? Unknown. | |
| nessie | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 7/27/2004 |
| Yay! I was actually just finishing 'Heart's Ease' when the author's alert telling me you updated came! Yay for Legolas for figuring it out! I don't like Amelith either...Legolas is right, she does smile too much. They're not some eleven year old elflings you know! Geeze...Celuwen is so much better. I think I said that before though. Oh well. I loved the Great Hall scene. Poor elf carrying the goblets of wine! The riddle in this one was harder. So obviously I didn't figure it out. *Sighs* Well anyways...Oh yeah! And I loved the flashback again too. I could just imagine Eilian putting jam in the boots and Ithilden stealing a horse! And it shows just how much Thranduil loved Lorellin. Awww! Update asap! ~nessie~ Author Reply: I don't know that Legolas figured things out so much as he kind of fell into it. But at least he recognized the 'treasure' when he saw it. Amelith really doesn't give a fig for the elflings and they know it and, more important, Eilian knows it. He's really just passing the time until Celuwen comes to her sense. :-) I'm glad you liked the glimpses of little Eilian and little Ithilden. I'm enjoying the chance to write about Lorellin a little bit. | |
| Jay of Lasgalen | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 7/27/2004 |
| Really Daw! Do you have to write such stories? This made me laugh out loud, which *always* gets me funny looks! Thranduil's memories were bittersweet, especially the realisation that Eilian was overdue. Poor Eilian did do his best to be fair - 'if you found the treasure then of course you come back' - although he was very obviously interrupted. The scene in the hall was wonderful, pure chaos, and I loved the reference to Thranduil's crown on the head of a chattering pest. I thought he would explode. Jay Author Reply: :-) I have to admit, I'm getting into this fluffy funny stuff. I laughed while I was writing it, sitting all by myself in my house. I am glad to have the flashbacks though, because they feel a little more substantive. Eilian is really a pretty attentive big brother, but this situation must be a tempting one. So I take it you wouldn't call Thranduil a "chattering pest"? LOL | |
| Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 7/27/2004 | |
| Best lines ever: “He made a treasure hunt for us,” Turgon said, “and we were looking for flowers and these are the right flowers because Eilian said they were on the head of a chattering pest.” He took Thranduil’s crown from Legolas and held it up. Thranduil narrowed his eyes at the child. “It was the squirrel, Ada,” Legolas put in, pointing at the carving, and Thranduil relaxed a little. That is tooo funny. Author Reply: Thank you. I have to admit this was a part that made me giggle even when I was writing it. A chattering pest! LOL | |