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| Unripened Fruit by Gwynnyd | 14 Review(s) |
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| curiouswombat | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 6/11/2010 |
| Not only the story with more Ingolds than any other ever written, but a wonderful tale of childhood and princedom - I really, really enjoyed it. | |
| Estel | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 6/11/2010 |
Wow! What a great story! I enjoyed it very much and Eldarion was just adorable. It's only a pity that your story is already complete:( Can't you perhaps add another chapter?? Perhaps his new-found friends can visit Eldarion in Minas-Tirith... The only things I noticed: one time you write "king" and then again "King". I would prefer the latter. That's better looking. And that goes as well for "prince" and "queen". With a capital letter it just looks better. And then there was one sentence from Eldarion, where he says: "My mother, the queen," Well, somehow it doesn't fit. Who else should his mother be? Of course, I know, how you mean it, but here, I would leave that out. But that is only my opinion:) Otherwise the story was truly great and like I said, another chapter would be wonderful:) | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 6/11/2010 |
| There are some really nice insights here. I particularly like the way Aragorn chides Eldarion for unkindness and then gently points out how people need to be able to trust him. Eldarion is a very believable 12-year-old boy, growing toward manhood but still clinging to the last wisp of childhood. | |
| FantasyFan | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 6/11/2010 |
| This is an absolutely delightful story. Prince Eldarion is wonderfully drawn, and his adventures are engaging and certainly ring true to this mother of two boys! I loved seeing glimpses of the king he will become in the little boy, as well as seeing glimpsed of the little Estel in the king who is now Aragorn. Aragorn's advice is good, and Eldarion looks like he has found (and made) some good friends. | |