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|More Dangerous and Less Wise by daw the minstrel||86 Review(s)|
|Fantasia||Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/12/2008|
|Daw, you are back! Thanks!!!. Love the first chapter, I can't wait to Maltanaur to tell...I liked all the details, the part when Legolas remember the dragon with a flash of fire in his memory was very good, it made me remember the whole dragon adventure and the death of the dwarf and his family, and all Legolas' anguish, well I don't need to say that you are great. Waiting for more... |
Author Reply: Sometimes it's tricky to write for people who have read the other stories and so will remember the dragon, but also in a way that's comprehensible for new readers too (if there are any). So I'm glad the flash of memory pleased you.
Thanks for the review, Fantasia.
|LOTRFaith||Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/12/2008|
|OoOOoO!!! I am excited!!! =D Yay for more stories!!! |
Author Reply: LOL. This won't be a long story because I have other fish to fry, but I'm enjoying these guys too. Thanks for the review, Faith.
|Agape4Gondor||Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/12/2008|
|Ah! Very nice indeed. I am intrigued by Meltanaur's comment about Beliond. I truly think that Legolas must learn a little respect for his guardian! |
Author Reply: If I were Legolas, Beliond would drive me crazy, but he truly does care for his charge and he's sacrificed a much more exciting life to babysit, so Legolas probably does need to see him as more than his keeper. Maltanaur is going to make the effort. :-)
Thanks for the review, Agape.
|Elflingimp||Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/12/2008|
|Oh! This is gonna be good, I always wanted to hear the goods about Beliond! LOL! Very good story Daw and it was more than one little slip now wasn't it?? Hugs The Imp|
Author Reply: I'd say a lot of slipping was going on there! LOL. We'll see what I can dig up about Beliond, and Maltanaur and Thranduil too. You can't possibly want to hear this more than Legolas does. :-)
Thanks for the review. Hugs.
|nessie6||Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/12/2008|
|Oh God, I missed these guys. |
Some parts I particularly liked (loved):
"There were days when Legolas suspected Beliond of being the re-embodiment of a bossy, little Noldor lady whose family had finally had enough and shuffled her off to see Namo during the kin slaying."
--THAT is...Legolas has quite a creative imagination! :)
"Can you really climb?" Legolas asked.
"I am a Wood-Elf," Eilian said, which would have been more reassuring if he had not just fllen out of a tree.
"Beliond was already sliding down the rope, saying words in combinations wholly new to Legolas."
--and that is saying something, seeing as Beliond has been his keeper for about 50 years!!
I thought the chapter was shorter than usual, but it's just so good seeing these guys that I don't care! Of course I love Beliond as always, and I always wanted to read the brothers finding out about some of Ada's youthful antics!
Too bad Ithilden's going to be missing out! (or WILL he?)
And while Maltanaur is sharing stories with Legolas, maybe Beliond will be forced (or not so forced) to spill some to Eilian? XD
Ahh, can't wait until the next chapter!!! Update asap!
Author Reply: Thanks, Nessie. I missed these guys myself. This chapter is about the minimal length I like to get to, but it seemed a good place to break the story because the set up is done, more or less. I guess I have a little more to do with Eilian and Beliond. But then we get to the fun stuff. :-)
No Ithilden, I'm sorry to say.
I'll try to keep the chapters coming. The story's all outlined. I'm just slow these days.
I love seeing those parts you love!
|Nilmandra||Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/12/2008|
|I am so pleased you're back! Ok, my favorite line is: "I am a Wood-Elf," Eilian said, which would have been more reassuring if he had not just fallen out of a tree.|
But the things I like most about this, as I mentioned already, are the use of voice and POV. You are very much in Legolas's head. The POV is tight and the opening is fast moving and engaging. I want Maltanaur to tell, too. I am very curious to know what happens next, so I guess you'll have to set aside your current manuscript and entertain us for a while instead. :>)
Author Reply: You don't know how good it makes me feel to have you comment on voice and POV. Maybe I've learned something after all.
I hope the rest of this goes well. I have a general idea of what I want to do but somehow the story on the page never lives up to the one in my head.