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| Aleglain by Redheredh | 26 Review(s) |
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| Agape4Gondor | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 6/6/2008 |
| Excellent chapter. I can just sit back in amazement. Wonderful reunions... but what a cliff-hanger. Great job.... Author Reply: Thank you very much! I really appreciate you reviewing. I wish I was faster at updating. But, I am afraid that you will have to be patient for the next chapter. | |
| Agape4Gondor | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 6/6/2008 |
| I don't know how you keep them all in their places.... but you do an excellent job of it. What a glorious story this is and the chapter was quite good! Author Reply: Thank you for saying that! And, thank you for saying that, too!! | |
| Agape4Gondor | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 6/6/2008 |
| I'm not a reader of Elves too often.... and get confused with names and such... but I am totally enjoying this tale. I loved the healer... and that the Princes were surprised by his 'talents' and the brothers reunion was terrific... I was so very glad both survived... and now that I know who is who :-) Great chapter! Author Reply: Oh, you are not the only one who struggles with my cast of characters. But, I am very glad that you are enjoying the story. The healer was an homage, if you can guess who. Ha! Happy that now that you know has not deterred you from reading on. Thanks for the reviews! | |
| Agape4Gondor | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 6/6/2008 |
| Very good chapter. I particularly loved the scene of the boat hitting the reef. I've lived on boats a long time ago, and the impact of anything against a boat is quite 'spectacular' - you caught that moment very, very well. Author Reply: Thank you! I am glad you like this chapter. | |
| perelleth | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 6/1/2008 |
| You let me leaning towards the screen, as if I could peek inside the chest to see what it contained! Tools? Maps? both? As always, I love the way you interweave details, signs and sights and gestures pointing at the relationships, while developing lively scenes. Orongil gained a few points here, being a true diplomat, if not the brightest of observers!:-) But he took it graciously and was soon ready to resume his role, and that is commendable in a leader! But, best of all, I loved this: Telpë’s enthusiasm simply overrode any obedience to Isil’s express order. “You are no longer the Forsaken!” he proclaimed AS you may guess, I cannot help but finding smiliarities between RL and these well-intentioned, intelligent Calaquendi coming from distant shores to bring help that was not on the first place requested... :-) And I like Isil more and more. Author Reply: *G* Very happy that worked! I wanted to get into Cirdan's head after dealing with the brothers. Of course, we already know what is in the chest, but the Shipwright does not. And he is toting his own baggage to the game. ;) I see Orongil as a foreboding of his cousins. The kind of Sindar lords they might become by following the same examples that he has and is showing them now. lol! I think only you could have caught that particular nuance! Do not presume that different means benighted. 'Tis the missionary's worst folly... which brought us the equally foolish zero-tolerance Prime Directive. ;) Yep, a real prince of a guy. :) Orongil is sorta the model of a Sindar prince for him and Telpe to emulate, if they decide for some reason to stay in Beleriand. But, what could ever be that reason? ];} Thank you so much for the review! I really appreciate it! | |
| autumnfallaise | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 5/31/2008 |
| Hey Redheredh! Wow! What a cliff-hanger ending! I laughed when Cirdan told them that they're happy in Middle-earth! I hope the brothers take good note of that statement. :) However, I was a bit confused as to all the OCs were and their relationships to each other - it took a bit of rereading and frequent scrolling down to the Author's Notes to work it out, which slowed and interrupted my enjoyment of the story a bit. Maybe you can elucidate the Elmoi family tree (and their relaitonship with Cirdan and Thingol) in the prologue, so people have some idea of what's happening before they read the story and need the Author's Notes just to remind them of who's who, rather than trying to find a new character's relationship with others in the AN as one encounters them? On a good note, you managed to present the complex political setting without detracting from the story. It's very skillfully interwoven! I'm looking forward to reading more! Author Reply: Autumn...Autumn...Autumn... hmmm... ];} After your recent experience, you sound like just the right person to elucidate a who's-who page to include on my user profile page! *g* Who would know better what information a reader needs to be told upfront? But really, I am flattered that you persevered. More than glad that you find this story interesting and entertaining enough to want to read on! Thank you very much for the review! I love knowing you got that dig about being happy where they were. :) | |
| merimas | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 5/11/2008 |
| Oh, now that's just teasing. I was hoping for more of the Cirdan/Celeborn/Galathil meeting than the three of them just looking at each other, but you've successfully sustained my interest. Kudos on giving a fairly detailed picture of Falas politics in a fairly short chapter, without resorting to too many author's notes. It certianly explains how Celeborn and Galathil's return could be seen as a problem by their long-sundered kin. One question: If Elmo's descendants are ruling in the Falas, is it safe to assume that Elmo himself is dead by this time? Or will we run into him in Doriath? Speaking of kin, all the names in this chapter made for some confusion, though re-reading after reading the author's note cleared a few things up. I look forward to seeing where you go next with this. Cheers! Merimas Author Reply: *g* Maybe a little... I am very pleased you are inclined to read on. And there is a second part to this where they do talk to eachother and not just stare. ;) As to the question: Cirdan is, just as Orongil and Glinnor show and say, their liege lord. He rules. They part of the nobility that governs under him. Recall that Elmo stayed with Thingol, and I think, held things together until his brother returned with Melian. It is his children that have branched out during Thingol's absence. Sorry 'bout that, I do realized with the large gaps between postings that a previous chapter's details, such as a character that was barely introduced, will have been forgotten. I also assume that the reader shares my viewpoint that few people get important things done all on their own. To me, that aspect of life is even truer than passionate love and individual heroism. So, in my stories, I cannot help myself but create and credit the ones who preserve civilization along with the lovers and warriors. Next chapter is the second half of this meeting. And some more confusing politics... My thanks for reading and reviewing! | |
| perelleth | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 5/11/2008 |
| Beautiful! The bickering of the opening scene brilliantly brings in loads of underlying background concealed in sights and words and gestures...masterful. And I really like the way Glinnor and Orongil manage to be mean to each other and also caring and good friends of the Shipwright. It was worth waiting for this little bunny to blossom, for the whole premise is so intersting and the characters on both sides come alive so beautifully, both in the epic and in the personal side of it. I always prefer the trick of writing about an important character from another's pov, and Cirdan's appraisal of Celeborn was definite: young Elmo, on the hunt and ready to leap. And also the sadness and longing of departures, those left behind with no news, the lack of Internet made life so different, and leaps into the unknown braver for those leaving and those remaining. The depth of sentiment in Cirdan as he hoped to meet long lost relatives, and the unexpected overwhelming joy in Glinnor and his child are both deeply moving. Author Reply: Gosh, you make me blush, but thank you for the kind encouragement! Yeah, it took a few years at that, didn't it? I am trying to keep things just a bit lighter than the drama reality would be. However, frivolous adventure is not that easy for me. Maybe that is why I am not much of a POTC fan... And besides, Cirdan is a very interesting character! He is on a par with Imrahil in earlier ages, very heroic - if people would just notice! One does have to respect his wise opinions. So of course, I enjoyed using his pov in "Daeredair" and here. :) In today's world, I think it is hard to understand real separation. Even upon death. Technology has allowed us to create complete facsimiles people; our own brand of ghost. But, remembrances were not so completely convincing in previous centuries. People sailed away and for forever sometimes. One could only hope for word of their kin. Perhaps, in a way, this circumstance made rejoining long-gone loved ones like to being in Heaven. Thank you for the review. Your comments are always much appreciated. | |
| Nilmandra | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 5/10/2008 |
| I rejoice with Cirdan, for I think I understand now what is happening! So these two have managed to escape from Aman and travel back to Middle-earth, and they bring secrets with them.. secrets that will benefit all of the elves. LOL, how brave of them! Somehow I think Ulmo was on their side. Interesting that the idea of an heir superseding one of them is their concern. Poor Cirdan! Author Reply: *g* Of course! But, Osse was not on their side! They need what is in the chest as much as anyone else, if they are to get back home! Yep, mean ol' politics rearing its gory head. Perhaps most Eglath are indeed like the Avari and Nandor when it come to facing danger or living the life they already have. Thingol has returned with Melian; civilization has been secured in Beleriand. And by their own hands, with their blood and sweat and tears. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 3/30/2008 |
| Isil should let his brains settle a bit before he starts trying to plan the future. The poet might have more foresight than the mathematician - but both of them seem to be rather more romantic than practical. And the pair of them are a little patronising when it comes to their eastern kin! I hope they find out that coming from Aman doesn't make them wiser, cleverer, or more beautiful. Good thing that Isil and Telpe survived, though. Sounds as if they were in the minority. And a useful recap of what actually sent them both off on this rather reckless quest. I like the admiring maiden. And if she knew who Telpe had left behind, she would be much more cautious! Author Reply: Indeed, Isil needs to rest and recuperate. He'll be better for it by the time they get to Elgarest. But, I doubt their 'romantic' notions will wane much. :) Give them some time to get to realize that the Amanyar haven't much to brag about. They were propelled into dire circumstances. Now what I don't entirely get is their continued youthful optimism in the face of that and seeing most of their plans go awry. I suppose as long as they stay on their feet, they just keep running. Shelly actually is a sweet girl, and Telpe has reformed - according to his brother. If Nerwen were about, she would be in... little... danger. Thank you! The review is much appreciated. | |