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| Shadow by fael bain | 52 Review(s) |
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| Chathol-linn | Reviewed Chapter: 52 on 9/13/2004 |
| I liked the brisk pace of the dialog and action. Fael Bain (great name by the way), you've portrayed the characters with feeling and economy. Nice job. This is the first time I've seen your closing song. I like it better than the one you quoted; no offense intended toward it. It's just that I knew your original work would suit your story better. Best regards - Chathol-linn Author Reply: Hi Chathol-linn! Thanks for making me believe that I could do it! I agree with you that it was a lot more appropriate for the purposes of the chapter, and of course there was the sense of accomplishment in that it was actually mine! =) I'm very glad you like my name and the story! =) x | |
| Elf messenger | Reviewed Chapter: 52 on 9/12/2004 |
| Recociliation. That was a very good chapter. Legolas and Thranduil are finaly acting like a family. I can't wait for your next up date!! Namarie. Elf messenger Author Reply: Thanks for the encouragment, as always! It's good that Legolas finally has his father on his side! Perhaps now it's everything is going to be better, but I wouldn't count on it, of course! ;) x | |
| Elf messenger | Reviewed Chapter: 50 on 9/8/2004 |
| Aww, I feel so sad for Thranduil. I hope they can make ammends. I can't wait until your next chapter! Namarie. Elf messenger Author Reply: Hi there! Yep, Thranduil is in quite a state, isn't he? Well, I hope i can only do everything justice in the next chapter, which I promise should be a good one, with lots of bittersweet angst! | |
| L( | Reviewed Chapter: 12 on 9/2/2004 |
| ok, need a little gripe time. I love this plot, but for god's sake, they're elves, not Yoda!! Learn to control your sentences - fragments abound and pull the story out of whack. use commas and conjunctions (and but or nor for yet so) instead of choppy, one word adjective sentences. Also, elves mature slowly, taking 50 or 100 years - and they "fall in love" when two halves of the soul meet. crushes and disappointment don't happen, and the "romance" is totally unrealistic. Flaming criticism aside, I do love your plot, and the tiny adduendums you insert to change your version of Middle Earth from others'. Find yourself a solid BETA and keep it up. Author Reply: Hello and thanks for your review! =) I agree completely with you that my earlier chapters were absolutely atrocious and horrendous, but in my defence I wrote them about 2 years ago now, and if you carry on reading (and manage to get pass the irritatingness!), I promise that it gets a lot better. I know it's riddled with mistakes, but I've yet to find a beta who is willing to plough through 58 chapters in total, and I'm a hopeless editor myself! About romance and crushes, I like to take the view that it is open for interpretation. Sure, when they fall in love, it is for life, but I am sure there is attraction and such that will happen, because I feel that otherwise it would be too 'perfect'! It's probably stepping slightly out of Tolkien's original intent, but I'd hoped that others could accept it! I appreciate your honesty, and hope that you find the future paragraphs a lot better..=) | |
| Elf messenger | Reviewed Chapter: 44 on 8/25/2004 |
| Uh-oh, Legolas is in it this time. Boy is El angry! Can't wait for your next chapter! Namarie. Elf messenger Author Reply: Yep indeed Elrohir is NOT impressed! Stay tuned for the next chapter, to be posted SOON! x | |
| Jay of Lasgalen | Reviewed Chapter: 44 on 8/24/2004 |
| Oh dear. Whose bright idea was that? I'm not surprised Elrohir is angry, it seems a rather cruel way to get his attention. What is it with him and Legolas, anyway? Jay Author Reply: Hi Jay! Nice to see you around! I agree that it wasn't a nice thing to do to Elrohir, and hence his reaction! Perhaps the young ones got a little too carried away! Elrohir and Legolas share a very special relationship, that will hopefully be explained in future chapters, and no, this story does not have any slash, if that's what you're thinking! ;) x | |
| Elf messenger | Reviewed Chapter: 49 on 8/17/2004 |
| Ooo, warning bells are ringing. I wonder what is ailing Elrohir? I can't wait for your next chapter! Namarie. Elf messenger Author Reply: It'll be up soon, I'm just polishing up a few things..unfortunately, I doubt they'll be any explanation of what's wrong with Elrohir at any point soon, so you'd just have to read some more! x | |
| Elf messenger | Reviewed Chapter: 48 on 8/6/2004 |
| Ooo, the plot thickens( how many times have I said that?). At first I had no idea who the two travelers were until you said their names. I can't wait for your next chapter! Namarie. Elf messenger Author Reply: I think it might be fair to say instead that the plot is running out of control! lol! Stay tuned for the next chapter, which should be ready to be published this weekend! x | |
| Elf messenger | Reviewed Chapter: 47 on 7/3/2004 |
| Good chapter. Esendri reminds me of an innocent little kid, they try something you are doing and they do it better. I hope Legolas gets it! Until your next chapter, Namarie. Elf messenger Author Reply: I think it's easy to forget that Esendri (and Legolas) are both very young still for Elves, being barely 200! Sorry about the delay, I promise to update in the next few days! | |
| songfire | Reviewed Chapter: 22 on 6/5/2004 |
| I love the story - you have a gift to capture Tolkien's characters. I just wish they'd talk less like yoda... ;) Author Reply: Heehee, whoops, sorry about that, I promise it'll get better, I don't know why I started that silly thing in the first place! ;) Thanks anyway for the review! xx | |