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| The Seeds of Time by daw the minstrel | 19 Review(s) |
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| lwarren | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 4/5/2007 |
| *gulps and breathes a sigh of relief* Wow, daw! That was some rescue! I loved heroic Eilian and Lorellin...they are SO much alike (I think I now understand Thranduil's frustration in other situations when he would think to himself how much like his naneth Eilian was...and how much that frightened him). And Turgon...what a delightful little rascal he is...I have been sad to read his sweet, maddening comments (and ideas) in this story and remember where these little quirks (coping skills?) of personality will lead him later. I love this story, daw...I need to go back and comment on earlier chapters if possible...they've all been so very vivid and tense and exciting and...well, you get the point! :-) I'm sorry to see it end. Linda Author Reply: Thanks, Linda. Writing about Lorellin has been interesting. She turned out a little different than I thought she would and Thranduil is quite different in her company. Turgon is such a sweetie. Poor baby. I made some notes for the final chapter, but we're flying to my in-laws early tomorrow and not back until Sunday night, so it's likely to be a while until I get to it. | |
| Idhreniel | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 4/5/2007 |
| Wow... this chapter was so adventurous!!! We all know they were not going to die, but that does not mean they cannot get hurt!!! Favorite part: Laurellin calling Eillian's attention! Aahhaha Very cute the three of them in bed. Thranduil in her vision is just... divine. Author Reply: It's hard to write exciting stuff when we know they all survive, but it was fun to have people reveal their personalities anyway, and to show how they thought about themselves and one another. Isn't it odd how Thranduil seems different with her there? I'm still surprised by that. | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 4/5/2007 |
| PS "You must be more careful, sweetling. I could not do without you." Irony! Irony, irony, irony. Ada said, "I love you too, Nana, and I think you must take care as well." "Yes." Legolas put his arm around Nana's waist. "Take care, Nana." Heartrending. Author Reply: I know. Poor ones all. Thank goodness some author went and wrote about them reunited in Valinor! | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 4/5/2007 |
| Wonderful determined Lorellin yomping to the rescue of her baby! Thranduil had no chance of holding her back - especially once he had to admit (to himself at least) that her Olympic-gold-medal style canoeing skills were the most likely to pull off this rescue. And I love Eilian being forced to accept that someone else was going to do the business (and his silent appeal to his adar to keep Lorellin safe). Mind you, he had already performed his heroic act! Swimming that river - and struggling out to attract Cook's attention ... not to mention his desperate and most athletic twist through that trap door! Eilian's good qualities are very, very good! And I can see why this might well relieve the stress he's under. He does seem to need increasing doses of action to soothe his earlier distress. From Turgon's first encouraging "Swim hard, friend Eilian!" right through to the end, I loved it. So tense, so fast-moving - so frightening! The moment the elflings nearly leapt into the canoe in their enthusiasm to get to Lorellin! And Turgon is such a brave kid ... probably because this is not the first time he has found himself deep in danger ... and I just love him more and more! I wonder if he would have been better raised if Lorellin hadn't died when she did - she is the person who would have been in the best position to insist on a bit of change in Mirdaniel's household - and would have been the most likely person to include Turgon in the more disciplined royal household and see he benefited from some of Legolas's training. I love the finish! Both Eilian's reaction to his mother's words - he has a point - and the lovely Nana/Ada/little Legolas heap at the end. What better way for a child to feel secure than in the arms of his parents? "Come, little bird. I need you in the nest for a while." Beautiful words. Amid lovely tree images (- and water and star images, too). Delicious story. Author Reply: I had a lot of fun writing about Heroic!Nana. I thought readers might not see that coming any more than Lorellin's menfolk did. Poor Eilian. He's reduced to appealing for help from his father to thwart his mother's orders. No chance, kid. It's interesting to speculate how all their lives might have been different had she lived, because she's at the center of a lot of stuff, and it all kind of slides apart after she dies. For a kid as little as Legolas, Ada and Nana are the sun and the moon, and when he's with them, all's right with his world. Poor little thing. | |
| Gwynhyffar | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 4/5/2007 |
| I think I missed reviewing the last chapter. Sorry about that! It was nice to wake up to this :D and I had to comment before I left for work. I LOVE that Lorellin is the only person in the world that can get away will telling Thranduil "don't tell me no." Do not come between a mama and her baby! One would think he would know that by now. I love little Turgon!!!! You should do more early stories with him. 'Swim otter friends' 'We are sailors' He is the kid that you hate to love because every idea in his head is bad. But then when the natural bad results of his ideas come to fruition, he is the one who holds everything together. He's adorable in this story. I loved Lorellin telling Eilian to stop doing stupid things at the end too. Eilian, of course, has a snappy come back, but I don't think she found it all that funny really. Poor Annael. He seems to get pulled into these things. Of course he could say no, but when both of your friends are doing it, it's so hard to say no!!! Legolas is a bit of an enabler. Annael would (and eventually does) say no to Turgon's ideas, but he can't stand by it all the time because Legolas seems to find himself going along with the latest scheme. This is definitely the beginning of a strong but tragic friendship. You can see the seeds of later disasters already. 'Swim otter friends,' indeed. I love this story and am pretty sure you need about 10 more chapters - really long ones! :) Gwyn Author Reply: I think Lorellin pretty much did what she liked, and I suspect that's one reason Thranduil loved her. He's a person who recognizes and respects strength. And it's interesting to have her channel that strength into her family rather than into more standard "heroic" actions. Also this was a good chance to show how alike she and Eilian are, something I've claimed in other stories. The title of the story is from "Macbeth," something how you never know what seeds are going to grow later. I should put it at the end of the story. You can imagine the whole shape of the otter-friends joint lives from what you see here, I think. I'm laughing about the 10 more chapters thing. The longest story I ever wrote was 17 chapters. I just can't imagine having enough to say to go on longer than that. | |
| Manderly | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 4/4/2007 |
| Well, that was quite the adventure - white water rafting, Middle Earth style! And of course Lorellin should be the one to rescue the elflings. Thranduil may be the king, but Lorellin is the one wearing the leggings, at least in this chapter. If I were one of the elflings rescued, I'd be mightily impressed with her heroics. But then Eilian was pretty heroic too, braving frigid water and scrapes and bruises ending with that daring acrobatic feat into Cook's arms. Good thing he has had plenty of practice in that department. This mother and son make a very formidable team. Turgon might be a holy terror, but he certainly has a good heart. Foolishly brave, but good nonetheless. Just one more chapter to go? I will be sad when this story is over. It has been such a treat! Author Reply: Thanks, Manderly. I loved the chance to show the similarities between Lorellin and Eilian. But also Lorellin's family means everything to her, and she's not leaving her baby for someone else when he needs her. Turgon is a sweetie. Poor thing. This has been fun to write, but I think I'm ready to revise my current book some more too. So many stories, so little time. | |
| Blaise821 | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 4/4/2007 |
| I loved this chapter. First it shows Eilian at his reckless and heroic best, which you come to expect from him, but I loved it more for the second reason...Lorellin. To truly see an excerpt of how Eilian and his naneth are alike as is frequently stated was a joy to read. Lorellin was brave and stubborn and a tad reckless but you can see how her recklessness had matured; much like Eilian's in later stories. Her love for her children was such a vital part of her; it is a wonder they all survived her death. You have to imagine what their lives might have been like if she had lived and been there to guide them throughout. Though you can also argue that many of the hardships and miscommunications caused by her death also shaped them into the elves they became. Thanks for writing such wonderful works. Author Reply: Yes, yes, yes! Imagine me jumping up and down, pumping my fist, and then beaming at you, Blaise. Eilian and Lorellin are alike. This is the elf woman who eventually rode out to her death because she was too impatient to wait for the guards. She's totally devoted to her children, but she couldn't see that she needed to keep herself safe for their sake. And no wonder Thranduil worries about Eilian. | |
| sofia | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 4/4/2007 |
| Go Lorellin! Saving the day. I liked the end, when they get rescued and their all happy. But its sad too, reading about how the want Nana to take care! That pulls at the heart strings, Daw! Author Reply: I so seldom write about heroic action by a woman. This was fun to do. Glad you liked it, Sofia. | |
| elliska | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 4/4/2007 |
| I'm just laughing a little at Eilian and Thranduil. I am really not sure who I feel sorrier for. Thranduil is so used to being in command and he just had absolutely no hope of winning that one. And Eilian! I can just see him trying to figure out what to do. Poor things. Lorellin really is heroic here. That would be a really scary thing to do (water in caves really scares me). But she is exactly what was needed since she was smaller and she was exactly who the children needed. I was so relieved when she came out safely. And I loved the reunion with all the children and their families. Poor little Turgon's courage was about spent at that point--even he needed his mum. Very dear! And I just love the picture of all of them together snuggled in bed at the end. I am glad you gave us that because it is something they will have for only a short while longer, so it is nice to see. Ada said, "I love you too, Nana, and I think you must take care as well." Again, poor Thranduil. This was a tense adventure, so I am glad to get to the happy ending! :-) Author Reply: It felt very bizarre to put Eilian in the position of appealing to Thranduil to overrule Lorellin. I don't imagine that happened too often. But poor Thranduil indeed. He has to let the older two go into dangerous situations, but he probably feels he can and should protect Lorellin and Legolas. It made me sad to show Legolas so secure because, as you say, not for much longer. | |