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| To Give Hope by Peredhil lover | 34 Review(s) |
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| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/12/2007 |
| I think you're right to show Gilraen on edge and angry in her sorrow. An enormously bad thing just happened to her, her son, the Dunedain, and it's not surprising she'd resent the elves who rode out with Arathorn or those who live in such peace. Author Reply: Thanks, daw. I'm glad that you find my depiction of Gilraen at this very traumatic point in her life to be believable. peredhil lover | |
| Agape4Gondor | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/12/2007 |
| I liked this line very much - it even caused me, at the twin's expense, to laugh a little in the midst of the pain. 'As if somehow sensing the angry look directed at his back, the son of Elrond seemed to grow even more rigid.' I love the good manners and the kindness... 'He conceded with a bow of his head. “Permit me to lead your horse then.”' I have one little concern. I am a widow myself and have spoken with a gazillion widows since becoming one. None of us can speak of our husbands without tears falling - unbidden - and this after 15 years for myself and many more for other widows. I would not write this if it was only my experience. Therefore, though I know she would do everything possible to not cry in front of Aragorn - and also in front of Elrond. But while riding on the horse in the rain, the tears would have, IMHO, been unstoppable, large and heavy. Really great beginning - I've enjoyed reading this. Author Reply: Thank-you so much for sharing your experience and that of many other widows. I agree completely that Gilraen's reaction is not that of a typical new widow, but that is part of what I was trying to show here--nothing about Gilraen's current situation is the least bit typical. She has had no opportunity to grieve, she did not even get to bury her husband, and now she has been immediately uprooted and removed from everything she has ever known. There is a point beyond tears, a point at which you so desperately want to cry, for at least it would relieve the pain in your heart if just a little, but you simply can not. I would say that is the point that Gilraen is at in the beginning of the story. Thanks for reviewing Agape4Gondor. I'm glad that you are enjoying it so far and I hope you continue to. peredhil lover | |
| Jay of Lasgalen | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/12/2007 |
| I like this already. Gilraen's slight distrust of Elladan and Elrohir is interesting - who can fault her for blaming them, at least a little, for Arathorn's death? Despite the fact that she cannot tell them apart, I really like the way you have drawn the differences between them, so that *we* know which is Elladan and which is Elrohir - that's a nice touch, especially as neither of them is named throughout thir journey. I'm looking forward to more as Gilraen settles into life in Imladris. Author Reply: I've always thought that at this point, with her husband's death so recent, she would feel a fair amount of anger and resentment towards the twins, whether it's justified or not. I have ideas, starting in this story, but mainly in future ones, to look at how her relationships with the two evolve over time. It's funny, but the more I write them, the more Elladan and Elrohir are starting to feel like family to me, and they are such different people in my mind that I find it no effort at all to distinguish between them even if I don't name them. I'm glad that you picked up on that. I thought that you might, since you, more than most, seem to share my *appreciation* of the twins. Thanks for reviewing, Jay. peredhil lover | |
| Envinyatar | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/12/2007 |
| This was lovely. I think you captured Gilraen's grief and distance very well, and the slow pace suited the mood. Nice contrast with the wriggling toddler eager to get down and trash the place! Author Reply: Thanks for reviewing, Envinyatar. I'm glad you enjoyed it and found Gilraen's reactions to be believable. peredhil lover | |