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| A Spring of Joy by daw the minstrel | 37 Review(s) |
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| The Karenator | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 5/27/2005 |
| On my...this was such an intense chapter. Gollum is on his way back into the forest and the news of Dol Guldur isn't good. Really...not good. I was on the edge of my chair the entire time. Your descriptions of the south were just outstanding. I could visualize the area easily. The nervousness of Eilian and his party was also very intense. Combine what they found with Eilian's sense of the forest and he must have really been on pins and needles. The adults and Loriel were an interesting scene too. It was very well done as always, but the underlying current of discomfort was so strong that even I felt jumpy. Everyone, but Loriel, seemed to be fidgeting and trying quite hard to act normal. I'm not sure that she didn't sense something too, but that could just be me. So much for the chit-chat...Emmelin? Oh my...I was afraid this was going to happen. Loriel will be fine. Scared, but I knew with all the watchers she has...and her author...that she would be okay. If Annael's family is smart, they'll move as far away from you as possible. Perhaps, they'd like my Mirkwood better. I'm really stunned. I don't know what to say. This is really looking like bad news. This chapter was wonderful! It's so tight with tension it groans...despite Loriel's happy play. Oh daw, it's a terrific chapter. This story has been outstanding despite your misgivings that it might not turn out the way you wanted it. I can't say enough about how good it is. I might have more to say later when I'm not in shock any longer. I've got to think. But I wanted to tell you how good this is! Karen Author Reply: I'm pathetically grateful for the reassurance I'm getting here. I'm so sad! It was interesting to try to cut the sections together with things happening simultaneously. Oddly enough, one of the biggest problems was one of the those Tolkien things: Orcs come out at night so I needed it dark in the south, but Loriel would probably not be out in the forest at night. Anyway, this was a hard chapter to write for other reasons too. I know loss is real in Tolkien. Boromir and Theoden both die, as do many others. But it's hard for me to allow it into my world. | |
| Elvenesse | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 5/27/2005 |
| The changing scenes most definitely work! Is it too much to ask that Eilian and Sinnarn are left relatively unscathed? Author Reply: I'm glad the changing scenes worked. :-) | |
| Ithiliel | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 5/27/2005 |
| *puts on her glasses with shaking hands* Okay, I can think of three explanations for Emmelin's weeping. 1) Something has happened to both Celuwen and Loriel. This one is the least likely. 2) Something has happened to Loriel, and Celuwen is too intent to scream or cry. This one is not very likely, either. 3) She can't feel Sinnarn anymore. Unfortunately, this one is the most likely, since it corresponds both with the situation near Dol Guldur and Thranduil's dream. Lorellin's words seem hauntingly clear now. You just killed off Sinnarn, didn't you? I hope I'm wrong. I *really* hope I'm wrong. (But I must say: even if we did just lose Sinnarn, I still love this story. And now I'm nervous about Loriel, too.) I can't wait to see what happens next... I think... -Ithiliel Author Reply: Hm. I'm sitting here trying to think of how to answer this without giving away my plot even more than I usually do. I'm glad you're | |
| meckinock | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 5/27/2005 |
| Oh, Daw. I know some people who run a witness security program. I might be able to find a place for you. Author Reply: ROTFLMAO! I need that laugh too. This was upsetting to write, and I still have write about the outcome. For a wild moment, I considered abandoning the story without posting this chapter or writing the rest. | |
| Elvenesse | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 5/27/2005 |
| That has to be the most evil cliffhanger in existence! Leave Loriel alone, she's only a baby. Pleeease. I like the depiction of the Nazgūls presence and that they somehow manage to fight against it (after all Legolas shoots one down some 70, or so, years later (yay!)). You handled the tension in the chapter very nicely: I wanted to shriek by the end of it. Author Reply: I forgot to add a note saying that I'm leaving for San Antonio on Sunday. I think my hotel will have an internet connection and plane rides are normally good writing time for me, so I should be keeping up. Anyway, it was cool to try to decide how affected the elves would be. I thought about Legolas too, so presumably they were less affected than men like the ones at Sarn Ford. But still, fear was their weapon and it must have had some effect on elves. I moved the bits of this chapter around some too, trying to duplicate that feeling you get in movies when there are cuts from scene to scene. I guess it worked. | |
| Socket | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 5/27/2005 |
| Oh, Daw, I'm so behind on leaving you FB! Please forgive me. I *am* reading this story, and more importantly, I'm really enjoying it. Thranduil's dream left me with cold chills going down my spine. I thought I knew where you were going to take this, but -- once again -- you've surprised me. Keep it going, honey! Thank you. Author Reply: You were surprised? Good! And cold chills? Also good! But enjoying it? Best of all. :-) | |
| elliska | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 5/27/2005 |
| Well that was terrifying indeed. I am going to leave a quick review so I can go back through and re-read. Then I'll leave a better one. I had never read the LotR when the movies came out and my husband dragged me to see Fellowship (glad he did). The scene with the Balck Riders chasing Frodo was so scary to me the first time I saw it that I almost left the theater. I did cover my eyes and ears. I feel for Eilian. And Emmelin at the end has me very worried. There are two reasons I suppose that she could be in the state she's in and neither are good. I have to go read this more slowly and I'm at work, so I will leave a decent review later--just wanted to say: Holy cow that was scary, daw! Author Reply: I'm driving myself crazy by writing scary stuff. I need an elfling story about a treasure hunt or maybe one about Ithilden spilling tea on himself or Eilian bonding with Celuwen! I need a happy story! | |