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| He Loses Us Both by lilpippin | 20 Review(s) |
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| anna | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 12/12/2004 |
| what do you mean by"never tried to save him"? Author Reply: If Elladan is waiting for Elrohir to go with him and he doesn't show up that is a form of betrayal, at least I would think so. Elladan is waiting for Elrohir to die from his sickness. However he doesn't die from his sickness. If Elladan doesn't feel Elrohir trying to bring him back,he will die form the loss of hope. The last bit "hes too far gone" shows that Elrohir and Elrond don't *know* what to do to save him. In that, we know that 1) Elrohir is not going to die 2) Elladan is waiting for him and 3)If Elladan dies it is because he has lost hope of leaving with his brother. Does that make sense to you. Maybe it will make sense in the next chapter. But if it doesn't then let me know and I will try to word it a bit differently. Thanx for the review! | |
| learwen | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 12/12/2004 |
| If this is the end,you're killind me,Elladan cant die ,let elrohirs tears bring him back,let 'dan feel Elrohirs tears and his spirit and realise elrohir is getting him better,let him feel the strength in elrohirs spirit and awake,twins with such a connected spirit cannot live long without each other,I know,i am a twin, no one can tell Eldarwen* and I apart and we need each other, sadly, she is the younger,weaker twin.Bring them both back to good health, but yet,you have your own ideas, a wonderful story,heart wrenching.Can't wait for more! Author Reply: Trust me its not the end. What you said with Elrohir's tears... thats a bit typical, I wanted to do something a bit differently. (Whether that be klling them or finding a somewhat different way of bringing them back I will never tell) I am so glad you could relate to this story. I hope you enjoy the future chapters. Thanx for reviewing! | |
| Learwen | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 12/12/2004 |
| Dont make me cry more! Author Reply: Oh! Sorry. But it all turns out well later. | |
| DeepBlueSomething | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 12/10/2004 |
| Oh no! Now that Elrohir is getting better, Elladan is the one in trouble. Maybe Elrohir has regained enough strength to be able to reach into his bond with his brother and convince him to come back. However, I imagine this would be very dangerous with Elrohir still weak from his illness. I'm sure that Elrond knows this too. Can't wait to find out what happens next. This is really great! By the way, sorry I didn't review last chapter. I was really bogged down with school. Consider this a review for both chapters. Author Reply: no problem! We all have other obligations, thought it would be awesome if our *only* obligation would be to read and write fanfiction. That would be awesome! Anyway, thanks for reviewing. You are right, poor poor Ellie! *huggles Elladan* I can't keep you nearly dead for *too* long. I am either going to have to kill you soon or save you... And *trust me* Elrohir *will* try everything to save his brother. *sigh* The bond of the twins. | |
| MaidenofValinor | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 11/29/2004 |
| EEP! WonderfuL! Thanks, you made my day. I was about to give up hope of finding anything decent to read. Author Reply: I am glad you consider this decent. Thanks for the support! | |
| MaidenofValinor | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 11/29/2004 |
| Beautiful! My favorite song! I'm listening to it now, in fact, and it's much more touching with the music playing. Author Reply: LOL... that worked out nice then. Anyway, thank you very much for reviewing. I suppose beautiful is referring to the story...*wink* Thank you a lot for reviewing, I really appreciate it! | |
| MaidenofValinor | Reviewed Chapter: Prologue on 11/29/2004 |
| Wow! Being a twin myself, that was very touching. I love the last line! Author Reply: I'm glad you liked it! Took me only like 2 milliseconds to create that line. Thanks for reviewing! | |
| DeepBlueSomething | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 10/31/2004 |
| Sounds like this is shaping up to be a very angsty story. Maybe Elladan's close presence will help Elrohir to recover. This is a really great story and I can't wait for more. Author Reply: First thanks for you wonderful comments. This is my first try at angst, so I am glad you say that it is fulfilling its purpose! I am sure Elladan will help Elrohir! They are, afterall, twins! Thanks for reviewing.-lilpippin | |
| Jay of Lasgalen | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 10/30/2004 |
| Yes, put the twins together - I'm surprised Elrond didn't think of that before, or that Elladan isn't at his twin's side in the first place. Tell Elladan he can't give up, Elrohir needs him! I think this is the first story I've read where the twins' human blood makes them vulnerable to illness - it makes a refreshing change. Thanks for updating! Jay Author Reply: *tells Elladan* He says he wont! He promises. I have tried to change the outlook on how the twins react when they are hurt. This implies that Elrohir and Elladan have never really experienced any life-threatening events. If it was me, I would not know how ro act in this situation. I would probably try to blame someone and get angry. I kept the usual, Elladan gets angry at himself thing, but I have changed how most people portray him into one with more of a confused role. Does this make any sense? I also figured that since, they have not made their "choice" they would not be considered either of the races. I figure that if they have human blood, they can get sick. I imagine Elrond could still get sick if it was bad enough. Keep in mind I have nothing to prove this, it is merely and observation/ assumption that I made. I am also sure Elrond, would not want Elladan to spend all his time in Elrohir's room. I am sure he would want to protect his sons from death as much as he could. Elrond is also not all-knowing, he may be wise, but everyone is subject to mistakes. Thanks again for reviewing!-lilpippin | |
| Jay of Lasgalen | Reviewed Chapter: Prologue on 10/28/2004 |
| That was very powerful - Elladan's anger was scary! Poor Elrohir, I hope he'll be all right - Elladan is right, he too would die if Elrohir did. Please write more! Jay Author Reply: This is coming from Jay of Lasgalen..... the Jay of Lasgalen? Yeah, I am a fan or as people say, a lurker. (lol) Anyway, yea Elladan's anger was scary. I was afraid myself. When I was writing it, it started off as a one-shot, but I was persuaded to write more. That is the reason why the chapter sounded a little bit like a conclusion....I also have never been one for cliff-hangers. So that is chapter 1. Chapter 2 coming soon. Anyway, thanks for reviewing, I relaly appreciate it... a lot more than you know! | |