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| Therefore, I Have Hope by Emily | 35 Review(s) |
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| Lamiel | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 8/19/2004 |
| Ooh, puns in Elvish! Now this has to be good. The formatting of this story threw me a little bit - if you put asterisks to signal the transition/flashback to Legolas' POV they didn't show up in the posted story. It might have been smoother to work the transitions between Estel and Legolas POV while still keeping a linear timeline. But the tale itself more than makes up for that bit of roughness. I was grinning at the slow revelation of all the rounds the Legolas and Glorfindel fought - bow, wrestling, swords, battle axe, horsemanship... and all before lunch! My goodness! Of course I expected Legolas to win the archery contest - you might have had a small riot on your hands if he'd lost - but I wonder if he'd really be able to pin Glorfindel. I guess I just visualize Glorfindel as being bigger and stronger than Legolas in my mind. The guy wrestled a Balrog, after all. Now having Elrond pressure Legolas to save Arwen is a twist - it seems that he realized what was going on with her and Aragorn even before they themselves did. Coupled with the responsibility put on Arwen to give hope to Mirkwood (perhaps a small stretch of imagination required there - I just can't picture Thranduil asking for that kind of help, myself) it makes for a plausible triangle, and lots of good tension between Legolas and Aragorn. Excellent. I laughed at Aragorn visualizing each of the archery targets as Legolas' head - even after seeing that demonstration with Glorfindel, perhaps sheer testosterone poisoning will drive him to challenge the leaflet. I still like that nickname, though I guess it ought not to be overused. Oh, and I am glad that you explained where the Twins are, and mentioned Gilraen as well. I was wondering about them. Nicely done. I hope that RL allows you to update regularly - I'm enjoying this a great deal. Author Reply: I'm going to work on the timeline and see if it can't be smoothed out. I'm not sure that I'm convinced Glorfindel of Imladris is the same as Glorfindel of Gondolin. I myself see him as a warrior (as we are told in Appendix A) and an advisor of Elrond. Therefore, he'd be as strong as any Elf. Legolas, on the other hand, is a Wood-elf and an archer. He's been climbing trees and firing that bow of his for years. His upper body strength must be something awesome. So glad you still like it! | |
| Lianna | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 8/19/2004 |
| I absolutely loved your description of the competition between Glorfindel and Legolas. I felt as though I were there, watching them beat the stuffing out of each other. Wow! The rest of the chapter confused me a bit, though. I found the timeline hard to follow, and I'm still not quite sure what happpened before what. Author Reply: Glad you liked Glorfindel and Legolas! I'm sorry about the timeline. I went back and fixed the spacing so that different sections are obvious. I'll definitely go over the part again and see if I can't smooth it all over. | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 8/19/2004 |
| Watching the contests was a lot of fun! I can't believe Glorfindel broke Legolas's nose. And I was amused when Elrond refused to let them in the house. He didn't even trouble to be too polite about it. He'd seen this before, you could tell! I have to say I'm so glad you've let poor Gilraen appear. She seems to have vanished from most fanfic. I also like the way you use the canon fact that Elrond saw Aragorn's love of Arwen even before he told about it. But Elrond is so manipulative! Author Reply: One of my pet peeves if leaving Gilraen out of stories. I like sticking to canon as much as possible. Elrond might be sneaking (and fibbing) a bit, but he loves his daughter! And maybe in his heart of hearts he knows that Arwen and Aragorn are fated for each other. He's delaying the inevitable, perhaps. | |
| LOTRFaith | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 8/19/2004 |
| What! That isn't how it is supposed to happen!! Hmm... A couple of different points of view:-P Aragorn thinks Legolas is mad at him, Legolas thinks Aragorn is mad at him, Legolas thinks Arwen is going to die, and Elrond sees a secret in Aragorn's heart... Hmm.. Poor Aragorn:-S Please post soon! I am looking forward to seeing why Arwen and Legolas are now 'betrothed':-) Author Reply: Everyone's all mixed up. Nobody's very happy right now, and things aren't going to get better immediately. | |
| Lera | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 8/18/2004 |
| Oh, wow I really like this. At first I found the table dialogue, especially Legolas's, a bit stiff, but in the room, it was splendid. Can't wait to read more. Author Reply: I'm happy that it picked up for you. I hope you enjoy the rest of the story! | |
| Galimeril | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 8/18/2004 |
| Please write more soon!!! I like this story's beginning a lot! One thing though, Youspelled Orc as orch, lose the h please. Other than that this piece is phenomenal!! keep up the good work!!! Galimeril Author Reply: Thanks for the tip! I'm so glad you like it! | |
| Lamiel | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 8/18/2004 |
| Now this looks very promising. You mentioned that this is your first fanfic in the LOTR universe, in which case I say welcome, and thank you for joining us! A good writer is always welcome, and a good writer who is also a Legolas-Aragorn fan is all the more so, in my opinion. Your writing is clear and easy to read, with a nice eye for detail and perfect ear for dialogue. I was grinning all through Legolas' discussion with his companions - especially the way he was sprawled over the bed like that. Hee! And I am so looking forward to his spar with Glorfindel on the morrow. That should be something to see - though I think that I would be a little more hesitant than Legolas seems to be, were I to go up against the Balrog-slayer. The wrinkle with this match between Legolas and Arwen is an interesting side-line. I expect that this takes place just after Aragorn saw Arwen in the forest, when she had returned from Lothlorien, but he hasn't yet approached her. H'm. Poor lad - tough enough to be in love with an Elf maiden, much less the daughter of Elrond, but then to be competing against Legolas Thranduilion as well! Oh my. It's a darn good thing Legolas isn't interested in Arwen, or vice versa - though I wonder why that is. I'm glad, though. Romance stories do not interest me, and there are few ways more sure to incur the fandom's wrath than writing a Legomance, whoever the pairing is. I am eager to see how Legolas and Aragorn start interacting - they didn't talk much during the dinner. Now I wonder, why wasn't Legolas introduced properly as Thranduil's son? A minor point, but "Greenleaf Greenleaf" doesn't seem much of an introduction. Oh, but I did love them calling him "leaflet." Ha! Oh, that is wonderful! There were some minor quibbles here and there that could be polished a little - words like "input" and "nth time" seem a bit anachronistic, being as they are associated with the computer age. But on the whole this seems a well written, interesting, and extremely promising tale. I wonder if Legolas and Aragorn will spar together, after Glorfindel finishes with him? You've already proven yourself very gifted in writing quick and witty dialogue, and I'm looking forward to seeing how they interact. Thank you for this, and I am eagerly awaiting more! Author Reply: Thanks so much for the lovely, long review! Reviews are all treasured and saved, but a long review...I'm sure you know what I mean. :) You're right about when it takes place. I practically have "The Tale of Aragorn and Arwen" memorized after reading it so much. It doesn't say how much time passed between Aragorn's meeting Arwen and his going out into the Wild, only that Elrond spoke to him before the fall of the year. I figured that gave me plenty of time. I'm not a romance person. In fact, I can safely say that I will never write romance. I like it enough when it's well done, but I don't have it in me to write it. About Legolas's introduction: I don't know really. Maybe Aragorn should have payed better attention to his lessions as a child. Who knows? It's not a main point and doesn't change the story. I might go back and change it. As for 'leaflet,' I was looking up a word in the dictionary one day and it caught my eye. I knew it was a keeper! Thanks for pointing out those words. I'll keep my eyes open for things like that. | |
| Shaan Lien | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 8/18/2004 |
| I hope this review doesn't go through twice, but if it does, it only stresses that I enjoyed this chapter and hope that you write more. Slightly different perspective on Legolas and Aragorn's meeting, on that I appreciate, one of them isn't in dire danger. Please continue. Author Reply: I'm so glad you're enjoying it! I'm not sure that Aragorn likes the story so far, but he'll come around eventually. :) | |
| Tinnuial | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 8/18/2004 |
| What a wonderful start...I'm eagerly awaiting more...you've portrayed Legolas so well. I love how Legolas is so comfortable with his warriors and the inhabitants of Imladris alike...hope to see more of that. I'm also looking forward to Legolas and Estel getting to know each other. Thank you for sharing this with us!! :) Author Reply: Thanks so much for reviewing! I'm afraid Legolas and Aragorn won't have much interaction at all in the next chapter, but they'll come around soon after that. =) | |
| LOTRFaith | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 8/17/2004 |
| Hello! I am most intrigued by this story and it certainly has my attention:-) I hope you please continue as I am eagerly looking forward to reading more:-D Author Reply: I'm glad you like it! Part two should go up tomorrow. | |