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| My Brother's Keeper by daw the minstrel | 25 Review(s) |
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| Manderly | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 8/15/2004 |
| Hmm, so have I been wrong to be so worried about Eilian and his 'possible addiction'? Sounds like some kind of sting operation going on here, or am I totally off course? I was really anticipating the worst until Maltanaur showed up and then I felt this ridiculous relief. You really do get us involved with your characters. The scene at Alfirin's cottage was hilarius - an elvish take on Meet the Inlaws, no less. How will Ithilden live it down? But I suppose love conquers all. And Legolas outsmarting Thranduil - took much sadistic delight from that. Author Reply: I'm glad you were relieved when Maltanaur turned up. I like it that you respond to my characters this way. The whole scene with Alfirin's family made me laugh as I wrote it, particularly when her mother asked if he was burned and offered to "take a look." Shoot. I'm laughing now. Legolas is a clever kid and Thranduil left himself wide open. | |
| esamen | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 8/15/2004 |
| Legolas looked at Ithilden. “Could you go out at night when you were my age, Ithilden?” “I cannot remember,” answered Ithilden promptly, and when both Thranduil and Legolas glared at him, he threw up his hands and laughed. “Really, I cannot, but if you will excuse me Adar, I think I will go to work and let you two finish this discussion without me.” This is great. So real for all of us . . . caught between loyalties . . . I am loving Ithilden more and more. For some reason, his character is really developing to me. I can hardly believe what a great story this is. ************************************ He seized her wrist. “Do not trouble yourself,” he said, sounding as if he was struggling for air. “I am fine.” She stared at the area to which she had been ministering and felt as if her face had gone up in flames. Alfirin’s healer mother was plainly concerned. “Are you burnt, my lord? Let me take a look.” Oh, TOO funny! I was reading this at work today (I had to come in for a while on Sunday, it's that time of year) and I just laughed my head off. Good thing no one else was around. The whole scene was hilarious, but this is completely over the top. ******************************************** Eilian turned the packet of dangwath over and over in his hand, remembering the rush of relief he had experienced the first time the healers gave it to him. He had been lost in darkness and had feared he would never see light again, and then the sun had broken through. Hmm . . . I have some experience with this kind of thing myself . . . this is a very insightful and compassionate sentence and a very, very interesting story line. I think you are dropping some clues here? Eilian and Maltanaur are more interested in the elf than in the fact that Eilian procured the leaves, eh? And they are being compassionate, of course, but something must be done? The plot thickens. I can't believe how fast you write. You are amazing. Thanks for all your hard work. I just love these stories. Esamen Author Reply: Ithilden has taken a while to develop in my head too, which one of the reasons I wrote "Paths Taken." I wanted a chance to think about him a little more. And he's coming across as a guy with a little more humor and sympathy, which I like. Now the scene with Alfirin's family made me laugh out loud while I wrote it and reading the lines you quoted made me laugh again. I am so pathetic. If only everyone else enjoyed my stories as much as I do! I was depressed after my son was born and I never want to be there again. My sympathies are with Eilian. | |
| Ms. Whatsit | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 8/15/2004 |
| Uh-oh...the ME equivalent of a drug dealer! Yikes, Eilian. But Thranduil knows about this? So is Eilian being a mole of some kind, after having been addicted for a bit? Hmm. I think in this story we're really seeing the difference between Annael's parents and Thranduil, and how that difference is disadvantaging Legolas. Thranduil's babying of Legolas means that Legolas knows less about what's going on with Eilian than Annael does, which of course makes him more curious because he can tell that something is being kept from him. Trying to keep kids blissfully ignorant never really works. When Annael said he had to go home, he was lying, right? He wanted to get Legolas away from Eilian and Maltanaur? But that seems a bit too deceptive for Annael. I laughed out loud at the Alfirin/Ithilden bit. Poor Tonduil--little does he know that the troop commander's going to be his brother-in-law! Author Reply: You're so right about the parents. I doubt that Annael's parents tell him everything about this dangerous world they live in, but I expect he has been told something about what his father thinks is bothering Eilian. And I think that his father would urge compassion. But Thranduil just wants his baby away from all that. In my head, Annael really did have to go home, although I think he would be sad for Legolas because he knows how much Eilian means to his friend. Tonduil is just horrified that his family has disgraced itself. LOL | |
| Nilmandra | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 8/15/2004 |
| I did find Alfirin and Ithilden very funny. I can only imagine Alfirin's horror as she realized where she was patting.....and then her mind took her places she hadn't intended on going :D Legolas is very concerned for his brother, and rightly so. I'm nost sure Tranduil convinced him that he and Ithilden and Maltanaur are looking after him adequately. Author Reply: I like the growing physical awareness of one another that you see in Ithilden and Alfirin. I think it's elfy to believe that that deepens as love does. And Legolas is very worried. As always, he's loyal to those he loves. | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 8/15/2004 |
This is a brilliant story - with the darkness touching poor Eilian in a rather different way. Thranduil and Ithilden must be absolutely worried sick. I'm not at all sure that Maltanaur is going about this in the right way, although I can see the 'he's going to do it anyway; so better if he's under my eye' reasoning. Trying to keep Legolas out of it is possibly not the best way, either - Eilian is more likely to fight to protect his little brother than to look after himself. Very clever manoeuvring of Legolas to take advantage of Thranduil's momentary slip, although he had better work hard to keep within the boundaries set or he'll be some years older before winning any more freedom. Poor Ithilden!! Why didn't he just ask her out for a walk - surely it would be less intimidating than sitting down to drink tea with the family. That wretched cat - Ithilden was almost managing to behave normally. Still, if Alfirin is not sure whether he will be back, her parents have definitely caught on that he will. It's rather lovely to see the troop commander courting in such a naively awkward way - well, real sincerity is harder than flirtation. Even Eilian is clumsier with Celuwen than with any of his passing fancies. Turgon is an idiot. I'm surprised he doesn't irritate Annael and Legolas more than he does. I have just been affected by a passing suspicion that there is More To The Situation than Eilian being a druggie. Is he acting as an undercover elf to expose the dealers? Going undercover is definitely a situation that would appeal to him. Now I'm going to have to wait days to find out what happens next. “When Eilian as my age, you let him go out after dark,” Legolas argued. Tiny typo. Author Reply: Maltanaur is going to stick by Eilian through thick and thin. And if there was one thing that would make Eilian frantic, it's the idea that Legolas might come to some harm, especially if it were through Eilian's doing. Legolas is sharp though. He jumps on Thranduil's suggestion that he have fun and he sees what's happening with Eilian, even if he doesn't quite understand it. I have to admit that I laughed out loud while writing about poor Ithilden. For two fairly reserved, dignified people, he and Alfirin certainly managed to completely embarrass themselves! Thank you for pointing out the typo. I fixed it. I can never understand how I miss those things. | |