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| Spring Awakenings by daw the minstrel | 22 Review(s) |
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| Nilmandra | Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 3/31/2004 |
| I think Legolas did very well in his first diplomatic situation. I am proud of him, and I am sure his father will be as well. Part of me completely agrees with Anyr - it would be very hard to watch anyone go hungry - and to share what you have and then share in the consequences, be they good or bad, is very neighborly. But, I can see where diplomatically he will need to remember that the elves near the palace have given from their need and there is nothing more to give. I demand the next chapter, I've heard rumors about it.... Author Reply: I worked on the next chapter last night and finished the Legolas part. Now on to the Eilian part! :-) I was out tonight. Sorry. I was remiss, I know. Legolas's poise in the diplomatic situation was all the more impressive because there was no easy solution. Anyr is both right and wrong. | |
| dr_seuss_is_cool | Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 3/31/2004 |
| hello I really feel terrible that Legolas had to go through all that It was mind compelling just reading it I feel badly for Thranduil Legolas did wonderfully and I myself am proud of him I can just picture Tinar's reaction to the news that Annael is bringing him eek...well awesome chapter thank you for writing Au revoir Author Reply: Legolas is right that diplomacy is right, I think. You have to try to please so many people with competing agendas. And then there's Tinar. I will think up something bad to happen to him, but I haven't decided what yet. | |
| LKK | Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 3/31/2004 |
| I think Legolas did an excellent job with his pop-quiz-like diplomacy test. He handled a difficult situation which had no easy answers with a great deal of thought and intelligence. Kudos to him! Kudos also to Anneal who quietly proved yet again what a wonderful friend and support he is to Legolas. Galivion should also be commended for providing sound advice to his young charge but allowing the prince to make the final decisions as is proper. But what in the name of Arda are we going to do with that stick in the mud, Tinar?? Finally, if you'll allow me to provide a little advice to Legolas for when he returns and gives his report to the king. He should probably tell the king about his decision BEFORE Thranduil hears about the illegal trading. Once Thranduil hears that, everything that he hears afterwards will probably receive a negative reception. It would be a shame if Legolas' good efforts go unappreciated because extremely bad news preceeded them in the telling. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Hopefully, we'll find out about the reactions of the two maidens to our two elves! Author Reply: Legolas did very well. He really is the young lord, living up to what he's been taught. But he does have good help in Annael and even Galivion, who did his best to help Legolas even though he disagreed. Legolas may not have complete control over Thranduil's mood. There is another son out there running around. And the next chapter should indeed show us something about the two romances. ;-) | |
| naneth | Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 3/31/2004 |
| I have to tell you that Anyr drives me bonkers. He's the type person that drives me to distraction! I'm just imagining him tilting his head, shrugging his shoulders, and saying "whatever...". Poor Legolas! I train my teachers to use the "sandwich" approach to delivering bad news; give good news, then bad news, then end with good news. Legolas used that approach very nicely; your children can eat when they're here, you adults will have to do without as much, but when you're *really* hungry-we will help out. Well done! Indeed, you can tell that Legolas is Thranduil's son. And Thranduil has done a fine job raising his youngest son! Author Reply: I am modeling Anyr on hippies I used to know, and 'whatever' is indeed what they would say! In the meantime, Legolas has been raised to be responsible (and didn't Thranduil do a good job?) and finds this guy to be completely impossible to deal with. But Legolas did well. At least I think so. I haven't decided yet what Thranduil will think. ;-) | |
| tigerlily713 | Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 3/31/2004 |
| That is a tough situation. I like the complexity that you have given this chapter. It really gives an insight into each characters personality and role. Great job! Lily Author Reply: I'm so glad you thought the situation was complex. I meant it to be one of those problems that can't be cleanly solved. I think Legolas did about as well as anyone could have done, though. Thank you, Lily. | |
| Ms. Whatsit | Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 3/31/2004 |
| Awww. Legolas is doing all his fangirls proud. Anyr is completely oblivious, isn't he? Demanding that the Men be let in on their counsels, saying "Arda will provide" and telling Legolas that he's making a fuss over nothing! I would certainly not be as patient as Legolas is. Good for him. Good for Annael, too. It seems like it's quite a relief to have someone along who'll just support him, without telling him what to do like Galivion (though he's quite useful too) or making a fool of himself (a certain other Elf who shall remain nameless...) I rather like Crydus. And this: >>Crydus gave him a long, level look. “You are Thranduil’s son,” he said dryly. “No one could doubt it.” Legolas blinked. The comment seemed slightly insulting to his mother but was evidently intended as a compliment. He did not always understand Men very well. Heh. That was amusing. As was Galivion teasing Legolas about the maiden. Was our Elf really that transparent? I bet. Ah, well. Author Reply: Anyr is kind of fun to write about. He's not very reasonable but he reminds me of hippies that I knew in the long ago. Legolas is indeed doing very well. We'll see if Thranduil thinks that too. I love Annael. Actually I love his whole family and I am so sorry I killed his adar. I suspect that Legolas was indeed that transparent because he's kind of thunderstruck by his reactions to the maiden. | |
| jebb | Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 3/31/2004 |
| So diplomatic missions are suddenly not so good? Poor Legolas caught between his own wish to help and the knowledge of what his father will expect what a way to spend his precious leave time. Galivion continues to be very supportive and I get the feeling it is going to be needed when they return home and explain what has happened a lovely update it made my day Author Reply: "It made my day." Now that is a nice thing to read about something I wrote! I write a lot of stuff as part of my job and no one says that here. Galivion has his own beliefs but he is supportive of Legolas and I think that helps him when he's torn in so many directions. | |
| Esamen | Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 3/31/2004 |
| “We will feed the children when they are here,” Legolas went on, “and if your adults are in great need, you need only to ask us for help. Ethau took food you can have tonight. And once you have some sort of agreement on what will happen when your fields are flourishing again, other plans can be made, I am sure.” Crydus gave him a long, level look. “You are Thranduil’s son,” he said dryly. “No one could doubt it.” Thanks for updating so quickly! I have my Legolas cravings met for a while now. Nice work on building such a tense, dramatic scene. This is just as good as an battle (almost--I like battles because someone almost always gets hurt and needs some comfort afterwards--got to have that too sometimes!). Wonderful job building the picture of the different agendas and worries. And the common drive of all people to meet children's needs is an inspired way to bind these different folks' aims together. Marvelous, marvelous. Esamen bows with hand over heart! I really love the moments, like the one above, when Legolas turns up the intimidation-factor heat and imitates his father when it suits his purposes. We wouldn't want him to be a child forever. Those flashes of steely leadership plus his vulnerable romantic reactions make him absolutely charming to me. Just love that Elf! Thanks for writing him! Author Reply: Thank you for such kind words. Legolas felt a bunch of different pulls here, I think, and he couldn't satisfy them all. He managed to look steely when he had to, but he's still stewing over events, I think. I suspect he's been a young person who wants to please and now he needs to give that up a little and learn that you have to satisfy your own values first. I'm planning for the next chapter to have both Legolas and Eilian in it, so hopefully, I can satisfy everyone's cravings. | |
| French Pony | Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 3/31/2004 |
| These settlers! They're almost as shortsighted as the ones who think that building towns on Palestinian land is a Really Good Idea. They're lucky that they are under the rule of Thranduil and not Ariel Sharon. So they want to move to the trees entirely, huh? Think they'll be safest there? I would guess that they have thought of some sort of contingency plan for if another flood comes and the trees with their house-flets come crashing down like their supply-flet did, but then I remember who these Elves are and that they haven't got the good sense that God gave Congress. Their intentions are noble, I suppose, but they're just so everloving dumb! "As Legolas moved to follow him, Galivion touched his arm. “The king will not be pleased if Anyr and his people give his gift away to Men as if it had no value,” he warned in a low voice." Thank you, Captain Obvious. It strikes me that Tínar would have a grand time living in the settlement. He's just as self-centered as they are. Hmmm. Now there's a punishment. . . whether it's punishment for Tínar or for the settlers is anyone's guess. Sorry this is so short, but I really must trot my little self off to work now. Catch you later! Author Reply: Gee, FP, why don't you say what you really think about the settlers? I think Thranduil is lucky you are not negotiating for him! LOL Tinar needs some comeuppance but I'm not sure when and where to do it. He is truly a pain in the backside. I am responding on my lunch hour. In my opinion, both of our bosses ought to get some priorities here and send us off to read, write, and review fan fiction! | |
| Tapetum Lucidum | Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 3/31/2004 |
| I am so glad I am not a politician. Sounds like you have some negotiating experience. Legolas is doing very well - I like how he has some self-doubt regarding the whole thing. It is very appropriate for his first "mission." Interrupting Anyr was a small error but one easily made when the leader is rambling on about future plans. It is hard to plan for the distant future when the river is about to rise and swallow you again. Tinar - tactful as always - stuck his foot in it this time. Somehow I don't think he gently stopped Ethau and the two children. He can always make a bad situation worse. Giving the men the elves meager supplies? That is not a good thing. At least everyone agreed with feeding the children. Poor Legolas is trying to handle a very difficult situation and he keeps getting distracted by a pretty girl. I guess he has been on patrol a little too long. The conversation with Legolas, Anyr and Crydus was excellent. The young prince handled himself well and did little to compromise his father. Everyone seemed fairly satisfied with the results. You did a good job fitting a lot into a short conversation - solved the food problems, set up future trade, made plans for shelters and worked in a reprimand for Anyr. Your negotiating skills are very good. Sending Annael to give Tinar the bad news was great. It made Annael happy and kept Legolas from having to talk to him again. I imagine it is much easier to battle orcs but keeping company with Eilian isn't the same as a wild haired maiden. Great chapter! Author Reply: I do no negotiating myself if I can help it because I hate conflict, but I teach students to write persuasive and so-called "bad news" letters and reports, so I know the formulae anyway. Legolas, however, has grown up in court. I assume he's seen it all at some time or other. I haven't actually made up my mind yet how Thranduil is going to react to all this. I have to see. It may depend on what kind of mood he's in because of factors that are beyond Legolas's control. Poor Tinar. Everyone enjoys giving him bad news. It be must be awful to be him (but worse to be his wife). Thanks for the review, TL. | |