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| The Warrior by daw the minstrel | 15 Review(s) |
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| Jay of Lasgalen | Reviewed Chapter: 9 on 12/24/2003 |
| That was a fast update! Thank you for resolving the cliffie so quickly - I can relax now. Thank heavens Eilian and his patrol arrived when they did, I think things would have been a lot worse if they hadn't. So we are finding out a little more about Beliond - I guessed that Lalorn was his son just before Maltanaur said. And it's interesting to see that Legolas decides it is rather nice to have Eilian fussing over him sometimes. Jay Author Reply: I had part of this chapter written because I originally thought it and the last chapter would all be one piece, but it just got too long. I guess when you've been wounded for the first time, a fussy brother doesn't seem so bad! | |
| Tapetum Lucidum | Reviewed Chapter: 9 on 12/24/2003 |
| Eilian has way too much fun tracking orcs. It seems to be his favorite pastime. He was truly meant to be a warrior, wasn't he? The bonding continues with Galelas. I think a blond elf might be a little jealous. Talk about timing - they showed up at the right time and place didn't they? Eilian looks out for Legolas and Legolas protects... Beliond? He was watching his back. Galelas protects Tinar too?! I wish I had been there, safely up in a tree, but I be the look on Tinar's face was priceless. Ow, sliced in the arm. I believe he wouldn't have noticed it with his adrenaline flowing like it was. Poor protective Eilian must have been having a heart attack. Between Eilian and Beliond, Legolas couldn't be in safer hands. I think Galorion even felt a little sorry for his newest comerade. When Legolas referred to his keeper as Nana and Eilian thought he had a head wound I was laughing out loud. That was hilarious! Eilian is so stressed out he can't recognize sarcasm. "Thranduil already knows that word" was one of my favorite lines as well. What a super scene! I was wondering if Lalorn was a typo or if Beliond was having a flashback. I thought we might find out a little history about a previous charge. Ouch! A dressing down in front of everyone else, that has to smart. Add that to being upstaged by your younger brother and out shot by the new recruit. Tinar's pride has been more than a little hurt. Another rune of protection? I saw that one coming. I am glad Legolas recogized he is much better off with Eilian as a brother than Tinar. I hope he appreciates his concern and respect a little bit more. Very touching scene between the keepers. They both have very difficult jobs. Legolas may not be as impulsive as Eilian but he is certainly more accident prone. Of course, that's what makes fan fiction so fun. Great job and Merry Christmas! Tapetum Author Reply: You were really good at anticipating Legolas's jealousy! Even I wasn't sure that would make it into the story until there was a good place for it. Galorion felt sorry for Legolas, but he also was hoping he wasn't going to have to tell the king that he let his baby get broken too badly. I've been working up to this scene with Beliond for a while now and was pleased by the way it came off. And I liked the surprise of the brothers that their father could swear when he wanted to. I needed to kick Tinar around a little. He was annoying me. And I also liked taking on Maltanaur's point of view. He's been in my stories since the very first one and it's the first time I've ever done that. Merry Christmas, Tapetum. Thank you for all your wonderful reviews this year. | |
| LOTRFaith | Reviewed Chapter: 9 on 12/24/2003 |
| Well, I was certainly glad to see that you didn't leave us off for a long while;-) I was glad to see Eilian 'rescue' Legolas and in turn Legolas save Eilian. I see that some of Beliond's past is coming back, unfortunatly for him right? And I laughed when Legolas gave Eilian another rune. How many does he have now? At least four, lol. I also laughed at Legolas' cheeky remark about 'Nana' though poor Eilian was a little lost. lol. I also enjoyed the two guardians sitting down and discussing their charges. Oh! And Legolas spitting out the curse word lol! I loved that part. Merry Christmas! Namaarie~ LOTRFaith Author Reply: I had fun working some humor into this chapter, with the runes, and Nana, and the cursing. Beliond and Maltanaur would understand one another's problems in way that no one else would, so I thought they needed to talk. Merry Christmas, Faith. | |
| tigerlily713 | Reviewed Chapter: 9 on 12/24/2003 |
| Oh! That was beautiful. The interaction between brothers was very well written with not too much anxiety, but not too much fluff either. And the part about Beliond's son was heart-wrenching. Legolas really has been a bit sheltered, but at the same time, he's more vulnerable than anyone else. Well done, I eagerly await your next chapter! Lily Author Reply: Thank you, Lily. When you tell me that my story is not too angsty and not too fluffy, I am very flattered. I have kind of been building up to this for Beliond, so I'm glad you liked that too. And Legolas is trying his wings and finding that he can fly but that it's a little scary outside of the nest. | |
| Nilmandra | Reviewed Chapter: 9 on 12/24/2003 |
| As I mentioned, this is my favorite chapter so far. The battle and aftermath are well done, but what draws me in is the relationship among the warriors. Eilian's love for his brother is so clear here - enough to make him forget momentarily his job as captain. I loved that he wanted to defend his brother, and his concern over Legolas's injuries was touching. Equally touching, though, was Beliond and Legolas together. Legolas trusts Beliond - enough to sew up his wound and make decisions. And I rather gathered Beliond wouldn't have trusted Legolas's care to anyone else at that point - not even his own brother! Nana indeed - that was great! It is wonderful to see Galelas fitting in, and shows again what a good captain Eilian is. Tinar is hopeless, I am afraid. He has no insight into himself. Beliond calling Legolas by his son's name, and the conversation between Maltanaur and Beliond was wonderful. Thranduil is a wily olf elf. He has found a good protector for his youngest son, and perhaps forced Beliond to get past a hard time in his life that has tripped him up for some time. And thank goodness Beliond was not assigned to Eilian! Thranduil picked wisely. Author Reply: Eilian will have to gain some faith in Legolas before he can serve as his brother's captain. He still sees Legolas as his baby brother. Actually, every single thing you say in this review makes me feel great! I love these relationships. To me, they are the most fascinating part of writing. People are flawed but they try to get better; they annoy one another but they also love one another; they rejoice and they suffer. And Thranduil is, as always, the good king. | |