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Runaway  by Lindelea 2 Review(s)
FantasyFanReviewed Chapter: 5 on 9/22/2003
Hi Lindelea, glad to see you back and able to write again. Sorry I missed a few days of reviewing your stories; I had a momster project at work that was keeping me from everything. Fortunately, it's done now and the bonus was, I got to read several chapters at once.

Hally is clearly not fooled by Ferdi's tricks. Rosemary I think pretends not to know who Faramir is. Otherwise, I doubt she'd have bothered to bring up rank when discussing sleeping arrangements. But unlike Hally, she's willing not to quesiton openly. I think she's got an underlying trust in Ferdi's methods and doesn't need to understand all the details.

Quite uncomfortable for Ferdi to have to hear the tale of the Fox told to his sister's children. He's also uncomfortable about his plan it seems. I think Ferdi's flying by the seat of his pants this time. I hope nothing bites him (but then, maybe it would make a better story if somethng did). The weak point seems to me to be the children. Chldren are hard to fool, and don't keep secrets well.

Farry's learning a couple of interesting lessons. He's learning how to wash up and dry dishes. He's maybe learned a few things about Ferdi, though he seemed to respect him even before. Clearly, he's learning to hold his temper and his tongue - a hard lesson for even many adults. He's going to learn what it feels like to sleep on the floor, as a hobbit of no status. Tomorrow's lessons may be harder. Wonder what Pip will learn?

Author Reply: Have I told you how much I appreciate your thoughtful reviews? I always learn something about the plot or characters that was not obvious to me when I was writing, but makes perfect sense to me when you mention it.

There is lots of learning going on in later chapters. My intention is for all the characters to grow through this experience. At the moment, in the chapters currently under construction/revision, that growth process is rather painful. Sure glad the ending is already written and I can look forward to joining the middle up to it eventually.

Thanks for the encouragement.

p.s. I changed "silks" in the race chapter of Flames to say "colours", after much thought. Thanks for bringing that point up in a review!

MirielReviewed Chapter: 5 on 9/22/2003
Hooray! I missed your updates last week, I guess that you spoil us, updating so quickly. :)

Hmm...I can see where Ferdi is going. (I think.) Must be rather hard for Farry, being treated "normal", when all his life he has had the finest of everything.

I hope the THain doesn't worry too much. (And I hope that he doesn't kill Ferdi when he gets back, either!)

It's great to have you back, and I am eagerly awaiting the next update.

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