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| FirstBorn by Lindelea | 2 Review(s) |
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| FantasyFan | Reviewed Chapter: 8 on 9/2/2003 |
| Oh my goodness, this is more than a hobbit fishing party. Fun is good, and pranks are often harmless, but these are consequences of the most serious kind here. They didn't learn a thing from being buried in a cave. And as happens all too often, not only those who start the trouble end up bearing those consequences. We know Ferdi will survive to see his child, but you've left everyone at home a whole chapter to grieve. (and not much more - I can't believe this is almost over!) I am very sorry for Adelgrim's parents. Even if he was a troublemaker, no fourteen year old deserves to die for his sins, and it could have just as easily been any of them, including Faramir. If this doesn't wake up Farry, then there's no hope for him at all. I think (hope) it will have the side benefit of waking up Pippin as well to his son's problems. Those two really need an intermediary to make sure one knows what the other one is thinking. Frodo would have been very good at that, but in his absence perhaps Merry could make a try - he's been very good in the past at making sure Pippin sees what's in front of his nose. Ferdi could do it, but he's a bit too deferential to the Thain as his employer to speak plainly, and some very plain speech looks necessary here. I don't think Pip understands at all that Faramir knows the severity of his health issues, and thinks he is dying. What a terrible burden to put on a youngster, especially since for all that anyone knows at that time, it's perfectly true, so there's no way to sugarcoat the facts. I'm a bit worried about those Tooks and their long-held grudges. They didn't forgive Ferdi for decades for the tragedy of the barn fire. Will this death be held against Faramir in the same way? No, he wasn't solely responsible, but he's the most visible of the group, and the Tooks don't always do things in a purely logical way (I can see Poppy passing the blame to Farry). The escort is already smarting from water-rations over the last trick, and to have Ferdi pay for the boys' foolishness is a heavy burden. Pip was right - Ferdi is worth ten hobbits, and everyone knows it. The reaction you wrote for them at the end of the chapter was perfect. Can't wait to see how you wrap this up in one more chapter. Guess I'm glad Pip made Ferdi learn to swim. | |
| Miriel | Reviewed Chapter: 8 on 9/2/2003 |
| Oh no...the poor family of the hobbit who died. How sad to think that Ferdi might never see his child. I can hardly wait to see how this all turns out in the next chapter. Cheers! | |