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Imhiriel · 13 July 2013 · Chapter 32: Moving On to Mithlond

Maglor and his relation to his music - both singing and playing instruments - are one of my favourite topics. I wrote a drabble years ago (and I was a bit shocked to realise how many years ago it's now been *g*), that perhaps you might enjoy: "The Parting Gift". I feel a rising sense of anticipation with regard to Maglor dealing - somehow - with the Silmaril, and this trip to the sea. Because although they're right, realistically they should count on having to live many, many years still waiting for the trees to grow and building a ship, looking over the titles of the remaining chapters, I can't but feel that the Silmaril and Maglor's reaction to it will result in the date for their Sailing will come much sooner.

Imhiriel · 12 July 2013 · Chapter 30: The Long Winter

I wonder if there is some link between the sabretooth beasts and the Silmaril. It seemed from your description of the attack where Maglor got hurt that they targeted him specifically. And now those dreams, almost as if they are sending him to make him more susceptible in - what? Bringing them the Silmaril? *hmmmmmmm....* Maglor, I do not consider myself to be among the Wise, certainly not by your standards or even Master Elrond’s In light of the discussion after this sentence, I think you meant "...much less Master Elrond's". But in that context, I have a more general language question which I keep encountering and keep getting wrong. “You are very wise, wiser than I, if not wiser than my foster son.” This means that Denethor is wiser than Maglor, but not as wise as Elrond, yes? But if the comma wasn't there before "if", it would mean that Denethor is wiser than Maglor, perhaps even wiser than Elrond, meaning the "order of wisdom" is reversed? I have found that oftentimes those sorts of sentence constructions seem so vague and depending on context, and easily misunderstood, which might make the sense of the comparison useless.

Imhiriel · 12 July 2013 · Chapter 28: A Desperate Run

“So you decided to join us.” He squinted, trying to see who had spoken. A dark figure approached, kneeling beside him, blocking his view of the fire. For a moment, I actually thought Maglor had died, and it was Námo who was speaking here; and my heart did an odd little jump. I'm truly glad they're on their way back home, because between the blizzard and those sabretooth beasts, and me getting hopelessly lost in the mapping, it's time to get back to somewhere familar and settled where they can rest and draw a deep breath for a while. Typo alert from way back in ch. 23 (I've been saving it so as not clutter your in-box with such minor details): but the closer they came to reaching their goal the more hopeful he became that he would not be the only one for whom no one was waiting. Perhaps his ammë…. - I think you meant to say that he hoped someone would be waiting for him.

Imhiriel · 12 July 2013 · Chapter 20: Hunkering Down

Eeeeeek! *incoherent spluttering* Now, that was a cliffhanger for the (ice-)ages ;-)... I don't have anything more sensible to add, other than that I continue to find the story very original and intriguing. And I am so curious how they are going to deal with that Pandora's box you just threw in their midst...

Imhiriel · 11 July 2013 · Chapter 7: Along Lake Nenuial

Neanderthals! I instinctively wanted to disagree with the Elves' speculation about the origin of their attackers, but it makes a certain amount of sense. And I guess if we want to claim a strand of the best "roots" via the union of Aragorn and Arwen, I guess we also cannot deny the possibility of unions of the "worst". But I just feel so sorry to think the poor Neanderthals had anything even remotely to do with orcs... The battle, short as it was, was very tense, and I could follow its progression and tactics well. Typo alert from back in ch. 5: you wrote "Erin Lasgalen" instead of "Eryn".

Imhiriel · 11 July 2013 · Chapter 4: The Road to Imladris

Perhaps a partial answer to my questions from my previous reviews. Maglor wants to die in Imladirs, although he doesn't know himself why he feels that way. Continued haunting, vivid descriptions of the changed landscapes. I think Denethor a quite well-chosen name. I have fond memories of the elf of that name from the SILM; and I somehow feel as if through this present character the Denethor from LotR can be redeemed. Little as that makes rational sense. But here we have one who has concsiously chosen hope, consciously taken it up again and champions it so beautifully, in contrast to that other one who let despair overwhelm him until his shocking, pitiful end.

Imhiriel · 11 July 2013 · Chapter 2: The Choice

I have a question, and I know this sounds callous and cold, and it makes me uncomforable myself, but: Why doesn't Maglor just... kill himself on the spot? Why go to all that trouble trying to die in the ice? Why not simply slit his wrists and be done with it? In all the who knows how many years of his wanderings, he must have had plenty of time, considering that the Valar needed someone or something to inspire him otherwise, and couldn't interfer directly and at a moment's notice. Does he have moral objections against a more "active" suicide? Does he use the arduousness of his journey to do penance? Or does not really want to do it, and keeps delaying it more or less unconsciously? When reading about the wise woman, of course the idea springs up that she might be more than she seems - a Maia or even Vala in disguise. But I really prefer the idea that she is "just" what she seems, "just" an "ordinary" wise woman. I had to smile when you said in another review "there are some, you know". Agreed. I like the thread of the plot of revisiting sites familiar to us through canon and how they have changed in the countless years since. And you describe it very visually.

Imhiriel · 11 July 2013 · Chapter 0: A Conversation Among the Valar

Fiondil, a few comments in reviews mention a short story of yours that inspired this one. Could you please tell me the name; I don't believe I have read it before and now I'm naturally curious. I'm even more curious where you are going with this story. The setting and time frame are so completely new. But after I was so bowled over by the grandeur of Wars of the Valar, my expectations are high by the idea of you exploring a brand new landscape (landscape in more than the literal sense). I'm pretty sure I know which Elf they are talking about in the beginning, but I haven't the faintest idea who those others will be.

someone · 6 July 2013 · Chapter 43: Epilogue: Another Conversation Among the Valar

I'm glad that the newcomers have settled in Valinor (or are about to). They will still have hard time, especially the children, but they will be happier among other elves than alone in Mithlond. What suprised (and impressed) me was that elves can forgive, even with their perfect memories. It must have been strange moment for Maglor when Earendil and Elwing thanked him instead of wanting him dead. Some elves who will remain in Middle-earth? Now who might those be... perhaps a certain golden-haired elf among them? Interesting idea that the elves did not refuse to go to Valinor but were inspired to stay. Thank you for writing this story, Fiondil. And now that new story with a very interesting name...

obsidianj · 6 July 2013 · Chapter 43: Epilogue: Another Conversation Among the Valar

And so they are finally home and the story is over. I'm sad to see it close, but it is a good place to stop. On the other hand there are still more stories to tell about these people. Loved the conversation among the Valar at the end and the hints to the Elf Academy series. The Valar are not done with ME, even if they think there is nothing 'exciting' to do. It will get exciting again. I loved the comment about the 'bored' Maia.

Freyalyn · 5 July 2013 · Chapter 43: Epilogue: Another Conversation Among the Valar

And this is a splendid story - thank you for sharing it. And that little chink of light at the end, that some Firstborn still remain with us....

obsidianj · 5 July 2013 · Chapter 42: Máhanaxar

Finally, the happy reunion. Having Earendil and Elrond speak for Maglor was perfect. I like the idea of the Harthadrim going to Lorien for some much needed time of tutoring and learning and getting accustomed to Aman. Having Finrod as tutor was the best choice. I'm sorry to see this story come to an end.

obsidianj · 5 July 2013 · Chapter 41: The Halls of Oromë

Finally, Maglor can move on. The last remnants of his past are dealt with. The "official" ceremony is just for everyone else. The really important stuff is done. I loved it how his family rallied around him. Although, Estel was ready to dismiss the whole affair and go back to ME. That boy needs a task and soon.

Siiw · 4 July 2013 · Chapter 43: Epilogue: Another Conversation Among the Valar

I'll leave more lengthy reviews when I get time in front of a computer again, just popping in now to say how much I have enjoyed reading this story. It covers a long period of time, and still fits together perfectly and makes sense. It was so good to see some familiar faces again in the last chapters. I have become so used to seeing them in earlier stories, that it was easy to share the feeling of coming home. Will the next story be the one about how my favourite OC got his job? :D

Tari · 3 July 2013 · Chapter 43: Epilogue: Another Conversation Among the Valar

What an adventure this was; a marvelous one at that. Maglor is finally home and at peace. Could this perhaps be the prequel to Elf Academy? It certainly fits.

Ellynn · 3 July 2013 · Chapter 43: Epilogue: Another Conversation Among the Valar

Thanks for the great journey.

Morn · 2 July 2013 · Chapter 43: Epilogue: Another Conversation Among the Valar

Well, I've been really bad at reviewing this. I started reading when you were quite a way through so there is my excuse. It was great to see Maglor get a happy ending and seeing a depth to his character that goes further than "Feanor's son" or to do with the silmarils and misery. I'm glad they've finally made it, and found forgiveness and happiness at the end. Great story with a lovely happy ending.

Twoflower2 · 2 July 2013 · Chapter 43: Epilogue: Another Conversation Among the Valar

Thank you for this story. I feel a bit sad it's over, though am very happy for Maglor and family, of course. Would have loved a glimpse of the Feanorians with all darkness purged out of them (something rather difficult to imagine), so can't help but harbor hope there might be a sequel. And the children have so much potential! I am looking forward to reading your next tale on Friday.

bookworm · 1 July 2013 · Chapter 43: Epilogue: Another Conversation Among the Valar

*cheers* Everyone is home & safe and can start to heal. Also Namo rocks, I love how he reminds them all that they still have responsibilities on Middle Earth. Loved how Earendil came to say thanks (he really was the most absent parent ever...) and Elwing too, and dawww Elrond. Really liked the awkwardness of the children, and their almost-resentment too, having to follow their parents to a place they have no concept of. Just a random question, seeing as how Maglor marries Gloredhel here (yay!), what was your idea in regards to the sweetheart he supposedly left behind in Aman?

Laer · 1 July 2013 · Chapter 43: Epilogue: Another Conversation Among the Valar

I knew this was going to be a fantastic update when I had to fight with email to get in. Yes, it was a fantastic update, and sadly the last to this magnificent story. Great job as always, and I can not wait for you next story. :)

Fadesintothewest · 1 July 2013 · Chapter 43: Epilogue: Another Conversation Among the Valar

Lovely, lovely story Fiondil. I am truly sad to see it come to an end as I looked forward to reading Maglor's journey, but love the way it ended. Thanks for sharing your vision with us. So much of Maglor is caught up in sadness that for once, I was happy to see him be gifted forgiveness!

Fadesintothewest · 1 July 2013 · Chapter 42: Máhanaxar

That chapter was very moving. The reunion between Maglor and Elrond was touching and had me teary eyed. Arthalion's reunion with his brother, was the best part of the chapter for me, though I loved it all! I am sad to see the story coming to an end. I do hope you take up aspects of this story in some future story.

curiouswombat · 1 July 2013 · Chapter 43: Epilogue: Another Conversation Among the Valar

And just the right ending - completing the circle. Such a satisfying tale all round; I have enjoyed every step of the journey - which is probably more than can be said of many of the participants in it! I can imagine there may still be tales to tell of the Harthadrim - but I accept that they are for another day.

Sunny · 1 July 2013 · Chapter 43: Epilogue: Another Conversation Among the Valar

Oh well - yes, I suppose this was a natural stopping place - I would have loved seeing Maglor meeting his naneth and his brothers again, though. But hopefully your Muse will see the potential of seeing those young and, ahem, high-spirited young Harthadrim meet the staid Valinorean society. I can just imagine it! And the Valar and the Maiar themselves would probably be sitting back, enjoying the show and sipping Margaritas. Russandol especially sounds as if he is a new Glorfindel in the making, and that even though he hasn't gone through Mandos, though I'd guess all the children are probably real handfuls. So Míriel - and her ships - makes the redoubtable Círdan want to leave the seashore and go pick her brain? Sounds as if he is fuming at not having her _right there_ to go over every millimeter of both those ships with him! I've noticed your placeholder for a new story - has your Muse been channeling Ian Fleming? ;)

Kevana · 1 July 2013 · Chapter 43: Epilogue: Another Conversation Among the Valar

What a perfect way to bring us full circle! Even though we didn't get to see Maglor's reunion with his other family members, given their status as Reborn I'm sure they welcomed him with open arms, and it's good to know they had backup waiting in the wings just in case. And maybe they did eventually get a proper tea with the Valar, after everything settled down, haha. Now I'm curious about Estë's lake and what's so dangerous about it, other than the lady herself. Well, I guess I just answered my own question, there. *grin* Cirdan trying to sail on it, pfft, that's a priceless image in any case. It's great, too, you left it open-ended in that some Elves could still be wandering around in the developing world. I really liked the reference to the war you mentioned in other short stories that led to the Flood. Do you have any idea of when that took place in regards to this story - long before, shortly before, during it? I had to laugh at Námo's line about closing up shop and going home. And the poor bored Maiar. *giggle* I so enjoyed how you showed this little family coming together, growing, and persevering over so much. Such a satisfying conclusion, Fiondil. Great job, great story, kept me on the cliff's edge quite a few times and broke my heart a few times too. I'm so thankful for all the hard work you put into this, and thankful to Sunny as well for encouraging you to write this in the first place after you did the short story! I hope Maglor went on to write many more songs that became "modern classics" to the Elves. I wonder if he ever put together the tale of the Harthadrim? I'm sure there were many in Aman who wanted to hear such a thing! It's amazing. It's like if William Shakespeare happened to saunter up and began writing more plays after being gone for centuries (well, if the Bard was immortal and had also happened to have just been forgiven for kinslaying..) I wonder if he eventually had a lot of young wannabes banging on his door and wanting to apprentice with him! LOL. Congratulations on another completed story and thanks for taking us on the journey. It was worth it! You have a glorious week and a fantastic Fourth! Watch out for stray fireworks, and I'm eagerly awaiting your next project. -Kevana