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inkling-tcbs@sbcglobal.net · 3 August 2005 · Chapter 10: The Inundation

perelleth · 2 August 2005 · Chapter 10: The Inundation

Dammned orc! PArdon, I meant doomed! :-) Berseker suits him and I like to see how all his demeanour has changed in the aftermath of this battle, and how he begins to feel his nature working against himself... I guess that Logi assumes all this as part of his lot, I see him the type who sees guilt as a waste of strength, but i wonder how far will he get before beginning to wonder about the prize. These men are not his equals, either, and I fear that soon not even Freiga will bee enough to quieten his wild nature, and his wild..remorse, or whatever other wild and self destructive emotion subtitutes it... I loved how "coldly" (reasonably, practically,) Canohando appointed his son to that almost hopeless task. Sigh. :-)

Rose Sared · 2 August 2005 · Chapter 10: The Inundation

Damned, damned and thrice damned - will the blood wash off with spit - don't think so. Superb writing, loved "He drew a cloth from his pouch and started rubbing her down, feeling the smooth skin ripple under his hand, warm and alive." the contrast with all that death is so strong. to be capable of love and to give in to hate. Not good at all. Doomed, doomed. Loving it Rose

Rose Sared · 1 August 2005 · Chapter 9: The First Wave

Oh what a shame they missed the little toe rag! Things are going to get worse before they get better methinks - the baddies have inside information. Nice to see the hobbits taking part in thier own defence. You go little guys! great chapter. thanks Rose

Nina the powerwriter · 1 August 2005 · Chapter 9: The First Wave

The battle scene descriptions are wonderful. Reminds me of Tolkien's way of describing battles. This is such an awesome way to see what it probably would be like in Middle-earth so long after the War of the Ring. Sad to see it turn to this, but it's probably how it would of turned out if Tolkien had written about it. Just because the hobbits get run out of the Shire doesn't mean they don't exist anymore. I sure hope the Guardians can hold up. Please keep going with this great, epic story :)

Nina the powerwriter · 1 August 2005 · Chapter 6: The Bride Price

Oh man, I knew that would happen, just not like that! Talk about scary. Orc blood is still alive in M-e! Don't let Logi breed, or is it too late for that?

Nina the powerwriter · 1 August 2005 · Chapter 1: The Throwback

YAY! I'm so glad to see another story of Canahondo!

perelleth · 1 August 2005 · Chapter 9: The First Wave

As I said before, thanks that Osta is still alive, riding wbefore he could walk! that was great! :-) not to mention Canohando. "Death had been part of the bargain from the beginning, but in spite of that they had been happy here Seems as if he knew that the end is coming. I like this part, when Canohando muses about the past, and dwells upon what he sees as his mistakes...is such a sad moment...I honestly don't believe an arranged marriage would have solved things with this untame lad, but poor Canohando must be trying to find a way to lift some fault from his "failed projet" and place it elsewhere, better over his own shoulders.... Now I'm getting ready for the hope and the redention, although I'm sure that things can -and shall-get even darker. Great story again, for all its despair!

perelleth · 22 July 2005 · Chapter 8: Mid-Summer's Eve

Woah! that was great! I liked the uncertainty pulling at everybody's nerves, just waiting for the attack. Certainly, I agree with Canohando. Those men behave much as orcs... and he would know! I'm glad Osta survived, although I'm not very optimistic about the final outcome of them all... the Shire included. This has the twilight light of the end of a world... Not that I'm one for tragedy, mind you, i rather read happy or fun stories, but I love a well written one, and yours has the markings. Doom, necessity, bad choices, no false hopes or forced happy endings to dire situations, and the simple hope that there may be light at the end of the tunnel. I'm hooked.

Calime · 22 July 2005 · Chapter 8: Mid-Summer's Eve

A wonderful action packed chapter; I'm anxious to get on with the battle. I like that the trees are entering the picture, even if it is on both sides. This was a nice bit of characterization: "Canohando tapped his front teeth with the handle of his knife, a habit he had picked up when he no longer had Arwen's Jewel to rub between his fingers." The elbow bit was just as nice.

Inkling · 22 July 2005 · Chapter 8: Mid-Summer's Eve

He had always had sharp elbows. Ha! Never underestimate an Orc…problem is, there’s two of them. Excellent build-up and release of suspense as the battle finally breaks…I hope the nasty Old Forest helps out despite itself. And thank goodness the Mayor is no fool—but then, he’s a descendent of Sam, after all. It may be the end of the Shire but not of Hobbits…

Rose Sared · 22 July 2005 · Chapter 8: Mid-Summer's Eve

Ah yes, you poke with those elbows canni - but you just can't go on killing off those good OC's - sniffle, Osti too? sob. Great tale well told. Rose

perelleth · 21 July 2005 · Chapter 7: A Black Wind in the Morning

My! so poignant! Osta and Canohando facing the loss of their respective favourite children, one betraying the other...how tragic, and their grief was very well portrayed! "May Frodo and Arwen take him by the hand.." I liked that. Wow. Canohando knows how an orc thinks and behaves. Osta does not. BAttle shall not suffice...I'm fearing this shall turn into a greek tragedy! (Don't mind at all, I love them and the sense of impending, unavoidable doom! :-) Great, great job. btw, I loved that sentence in the summary "hope shines brightest when the night is dark" So damned true!

perelleth · 21 July 2005 · Chapter 6: The Bride Price

Uh! I'm sorry that it took me so long to read this, I've been out of own for some time.. Man! I'm impresed. Of course I'm still shocked by how Logi confronted the situation with Haldar. I'm sure that, above any other thing, this shall eat up at him for as long as he lives and wherever their souls go after death. His reasoning, though was cool and he was compassionate in the end, killing him with the sword, but, such a horrible death for poor, kind and loyal Shinning One. I hope he'll find it in him to understand and forgive Logi! You managed to portray a very believable "cul-de-sac" for Logi, even if it was of his own making in the very beginning... Logi's rendition of frodo's quest was very interseting at many levels. I guess that canohando tried to do his best to tie him short, but the fact that he had not learnt to understand the deepest meaning of it all, and what Frodo had meant for his grandfther and his people must have been crucial. In the end, not even the oath in the river seemed to restrain him and he was ready to betray and fight his own people if that was what he had to do to obtain the girl... I suppose this is going to be a terribly doomed "hero" to say something, but, let me tell you, I kind understand him, and even pity him, in a way I neer felt towards Turin Turambar, for instance. This poor oc is actually doomed deep in his own nature and wahtever grace and hope comes out of this story shall be greater because of wh and what he is, I think.. Such a good job jo, and doubly beause I'm treated to a double chapter!! :-) Thanks!

Rose Sared · 21 July 2005 · Chapter 7: A Black Wind in the Morning

Indeed, enemies all around the little prat. What makes me think that nothing is going to be so easy as just topping him in battle? Knowledge of your twisty authorial mind, I hope. Thanks for the ride, and keep writing, I'm dying to see how you are going to work all this out. Rose

Rose Sared · 21 July 2005 · Chapter 6: The Bride Price

Umm, yes well that was both inevitable, I think, and quite the most horrific thing I have read for a day or so. Well done. So hard to write the hard stuff. Much tragedy and war will follow that rending, I hie me to the next chapter with the hope of some resolution. Takes a deep breath Rose

Inkling · 19 July 2005 · Chapter 6: The Bride Price

And so darkness falls…how horrible and tragic, and yet inevitable. This will haunt Logi till the end of his days. And what will his bride think of him now that he has killed the Shining One? On a lighter note, I did think Logi’s summary of Frodo’s quest was pretty funny…

Calime · 18 July 2005 · Chapter 7: A Black Wind in the Morning

I like Osta and his restraining influence on Canohando and Malawen. Of course he still wants Logi dead, but his reaction is probably the norm for any society. My favorite part though was Canohando's benediction: May Frodo and Arwen take him by the hand, wherever he is, and lead him into peace. After so long a time to still measure blessing by his long lost friends. I'm very interested in seeing where you take this. Excellent work!

Calime · 18 July 2005 · Chapter 6: The Bride Price

How terrible and ignoble you have made Logi. Will we ever be able to forgive him? Somehow I'm sure there will be redemption, but what a price. I'm sure too that the story is safe in your skilled hands. :-) Calime

Calime · 12 July 2005 · Chapter 5: My Enemy, My Love

Trouble for certain, and I can't help feeling worried for Haldar. Eagerly awaiting the next!

Calime · 12 July 2005 · Chapter 4: Temptation

Things sound so dire for the future of the Guardians and for the Shire itself, but Logi is in the most danger. Very nice build up of tension. It's so readable that it is hard to think of the details of how it is put together. Excellent writing.

Calime · 12 July 2005 · Chapter 3: Where There's Smoke...

A very exciting and fast moving chapter, so onward I go!

Calime · 12 July 2005 · Chapter 2: Taming Logi

Oh, you've got the hairs standing up already. It's not hard to imagine how Logi will find trouble, unless of course it finds him first. I have never mentioned how much I like the detail you add in your footnotes. You capture a bit of realism through them that is very satisfying. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Inkling · 10 July 2005 · Chapter 5: My Enemy, My Love

OK, I really shouldn’t be reading this…for one thing, I haven’t read “The Queen’s Orc” yet. But, well, I sort of peeked at it, and now here I am at Chapter 5. Very engrossing and beautifully written…no surprise there! Middle Earth 3,000 years after the Ring War…what an intriguing concept! Sad, yes, but no more so than LOTR, really. Not too dark yet, but this part seems to be the calm before the storm. I have a weird theory about the barbarians…but don’t want to say what it is yet. If I’m right, I don’t want to spoil the surprise. And if I’m wrong, well, I’ll tell you later what it was! :)

perelleth · 9 July 2005 · Chapter 5: My Enemy, My Love

Oh! I'm impressed! I read the story of Canohando in a discontinous way some months ago. I found it.. way too poignant at times, and too Au for my taste, even if it is very very well conceived and written. I didn't review, then.. those were my lurking times... ;-) But this one, years after those well known events, is great!!! The dwindling of the shire is so full of melancholy in its unavoidability, the fierce , loyal Canohando and his descendants fighting to avoid it, and this wild Logi, an Orc in a time that doesn't know about them! It simply got me. NO doubt your smooth style, the easy way you manage to describe events without stacking the chapter of dialogue helped too, as that kind of distant, enchanted pov to events that aren't mthycal but that did not happen yesterday... well, i'm hooked by this. Only a suggestion. Even if I can guess what your summary points at... I think it is not the most accurate summary for engaging readers, and, come what may, I think that once you've come to know LOgi and his particularities, every darkness, as you say, will be counteracted by some ray of hope, some glimpse of grace! At least I, for one, have signed for e-mail alert!