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Interrupted Journeys 10: Finding the sun by elliska	47 Review(s)
Fantasia	Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 6/18/2013
For goodness sake!!!! you are going to kill me!!!! Thranduil's story was very sad, touching and realistic. Civil war ( I see the kinslaying as an equivalent of human civil war) it is the worst war nightmare that can be inflicted to humankind. Families vs families, it is so terrible wrong. My heart goes to Berior, he is such a brave young elf, he will do well, no doubt. Thranduil is right, artistry is needed, even in evil times. Tureden is completely out of place, someone needs to "train" him as a personal royal guard, Gosh, how I miss Tulus! Please, please update soon.... Author Reply: LOL! I'm glad you enjoyed. Thranduil has seen a lot. The older elves all know that. The younger ones have heard that statement, but they don't know the details to make it real. Now Berior has and it definitely made an impact. I laughed when I saw your comment about Tureden needing training. In one version of this, Thranduil reacted to hearing that Tureden re-broke Legolas's ribs by saying essentially the same thing. The rest of your comments, I can't respond to without dropping major spoilers. So I need to shut up. :-) Thanks so much for the reviews! I appreciate them so much!

daw the minstrel	Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 6/18/2013
Man, this had some high tension moments in it. Often flashbacks are flat because we know they're done, but Thranduil's story of the attack on Menegroth had me right there, horrified. And it seems to have helped Berior get some perspective even if he hasn't yet changed his mind. I loved the moment when Thranduil says Berior is frightening him. That surely should have given Berior some sense of how his actions are coming across. It sounds like he'll be busy with his new duties though. I wanted to smack Tureden. He thinks the worst of Legolas with no excuse that I can see. Yet, anyway. And then he fails to pull his hits and smacks Legolas right in the broken ribs. He'll be lucky if no real damage was done. So I hate to admit that he then does a good job guarding Legolas when the bad guy shows up, and he shows faith in Legolas's ability hit the guy in mid-jump. Which he does. Only the guy has another arrow. I liked the speed shooting. That's a great idea for a contest. And I liked the way Galithil is taking his father's place. Thranduil is not going to be happy about any of this. A bad guy so close to the stronghold. Legolas out without a guard. The guard forcing him to spar when he isn't supposed to. And of course, the little matter of an arrow still being pointed at Legolas. Author Reply: I'm glad that Thranduil's story came across. I was worried about it, for exactly the reasons you mention. It went through some major changes, which, though I gave up some stuff I liked, I think I ended up with something that was more in character for everyone. Point is, thanks, daw! :-) I loved the moment when Thranduil says Berior is frightening him. That surely should have given Berior some sense of how his actions are coming across. Thanks again! And we'll hope so, for Berior's sake. Tureden is not Legolas's fav person right now either. Not even a little bit. But, true, he does do what he is supposed to do. Legolas also isn't feeling generous enough at the moment to notice that. I'm glad you liked the speed shooting. I did too because it is a practical skill, especially for elves, and it is simple, requiring no special/elaborate set up or explanation (easy to write and fit in almost any story space). It made me happy to think if it. :-) Galithil is much more mature, generally speaking. That doesn't mean he's forgotten how to cause a little grief for Thranduil :-) And yeah, Thranduil is going to be one very unhappy elf when all this comes to light. Thanks so much for the reviews! I appreciate them so much!

Morn	Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 6/18/2013
Wow. what an intense sad story. I love the thorough history all your elves have. It is good to see how thought out this is and how their actions are affected by this history in this way. And Legolas just can't catch a break at the moment. what cliffhanger you leave us on yet again. Just a small note. By a happy coincidence I'd been rereading some of your story as I'd forgotten some of the details since I'd last read it. I had been reading chapter 3 and one point set alarm bells ringing. you've killed off his naneth's brothers twice! Poor things. ;) Besides that, a great chapter. Thanks for pointing out the lack of death warnings on the last review: I can breathe a sigh of relief. For a small amount of time at least. Author Reply: Oh that's true. I should make that more specific. Sometimes I know what's in my head, but all of it doesn't get on the paper. Thanks so much for catching that! I'm going to go do that in both places and then I'll answer the review more carefully. Author Reply: Ok, that's done. At some point, I changed a few things about who lost what family where, for a variety of reasons (this being one of them). I thought I caught all that in the already posted stuff, so I'm glad you said something. It is terrible to have to die twice, even for an elf. ;-) (When I was editing this part, I originally had the word 'remaining brothers' in this chapter. On re-reading just before posting, I took it out because it sounded odd. Now I remember why I had put it in there). Anyhoo, in another version of this, Legolas was in the room for this little story as well. It was a wrench to move him out when I re-arranged sections, because he's tried to get his father to talk about Menegroth so many times and failed. This was written from his POV, coming to an understanding of why Thranduil never talks about Menegroth. I liked it a lot that way too. Now, hopefully I can still keep in Berior telling Legolas about this little story. That chapter is awfully long and I am eyeing stuff to cut from it... It is a bit of a cliffie, isn't it? I mean, unless this story is going to suddenly take a seriously AU twist, Legolas survives. :-) But who knows what else might come of it. I just posted an answer to another review and it forced me to look at how much of this story (the whole thing, not just this part) I have left to post. I am now considering if I can reliably post more than once a week! Fingers crossed. Thanks so much for the reviews (and careful reading!) I appreciate them so much!

tnt2b2	Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 6/18/2013
Quick! Send the next chapter!!!! I can't leave this story lingering on a cliff in my mind for a whole week :). Elliska, I truly enjoy your story. I look forward to your updates. Thank you for sharing your gift for my to enjoy. Author Reply: LOL. It just so happens that I am trying to figure out if I can post faster and still be reliable about it. So, there may be hope. I'm glad you are enjoying and I hope you continue to! Thanks so much for the review. I appreciate them so much!

katrina	Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 6/17/2013
So glad you're back and that this series is continuing! I love how specific this series is- writing about Thranduil and then Legolas so closely throughout the ages is something I have really never seen before from fanfic writers. I love the story line about the kinslaying, but I'm also wondering, will we see Legolas grow up a bit more (or will there be a few hundred years jump) in the chapters to come? I ask because I just can't imagine how long it will take to get to Legolas in Valinor, like in the prologue- it has been 10 sections and he still hasn't reached his majority! Not that I'm complaining- I will be reading this till the very end! Great work! Author Reply: Glad to be back. More time in the summer is great! :-) will we see Legolas grow up a bit more (or will there be a few hundred years jump) in the chapters to come? I ask because I just can't imagine how long it will take to get to Legolas in Valinor LOL! You would be amazed how many earlier childhood things I never posted. I had a lazy job back in 2004 that bored me to tears (plus 4 hurricanes that gave me weeks off at a time) and I did a lot of rough writing drafting this story. To get better organized, I went through a while back and pulled out parts that I really wanted to post and they look like this: one or two more stories before Legolas comes of age, two or three when he has just come of age, two just before the Watchful Peace, one during it, one when it ends, five or six between the end of the Watchful Peace to the Hobbit, one for the Hobbit, one after it, one for LotR and one for after it. The Hobbit and LotR ones are long--my guess would be 20-30 chapters each (When I drafted, I didn't divide into chapters--that was a mistake, because doing that now is hard and usually means re-writing to make logical splits). Two of the others are probably 15 chapters. All the rest are 8 chapters or less. So, yes, there are some major jumps in date to follow interesting canon events. :-) There are other bits I could post too, but I won't until the really central parts of this are posted. That's because I do feel I must get Legolas to Valinor as in the prologue and that lazy job is long gone (and interest in LotR fanfic will fade once the Hobbit movie is over--I really want to get all this up before the last movie comes out, so I honestly am focusing on getting a lot of editing done this summer to be able to post more with less gaps in between stories). :-) I'm glad you are enjoying. Thanks so much for the reviews! I really appreciate them!

c_belle_a	Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 6/15/2013
It's so great that you started these new chapters! I known it has only been a few months, but to the eager reader, it has been an eternitiy! As usual, I love these two new chapters. It warmed my hearts that Thranduil was trying to protect Legolas and take Demil's death as blame. And how Legolas refused to have is Adar take that blame. Beior's reaction to his father's death is so sad- it is understandable that he is grieving, but still, sometimes, he made me so mad! I think Legolas and his new guard really need to negotiate/ talk it out. Right now, both are just being stubborn and mean to each other- I feel bad for Legolas, but at the same time, I can understand Tureden. I wondor if Langon is going to remember anything important about Marti's family? Oh, and I really do not like Aewen. I don't know, but it sure seems like she's leading him on. And any girl who isn't faithful to her boyfriend really gets on my nerves. If she still has feelings for Legolas, she should break her courtship with that Palace Guard First Year. Her actions are really not fit for a princess- and unless she drastically changes, I don't think she should/ aspire to become one. Author Reply: It's been an eternity to me too! I'd really planned on getting these up in March. March came very late this year! ;-) I'm glad you are enjoying so far. This is a pretty difficult time for everyone involved. You are definitely right that Legolas and Tureden need to talk. You're right. They both have valid complaints. But if they talked before any trouble came around, where would be the fun in that. ;-) You have Aewen's character perfectly. And it becomes important later. Without giving away too much, that's all I can say about her or Langon right now. :-) Thanks so much for the reviews! I appreciate them so much!

Morn	Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 6/12/2013
Perhaps not the ideal way for everyone to find out, but it was bound to get out eventually. At least people will stop putting him in awkward situations discussing what happened. Tureden needs to get a grip. I don't know what he thinks his role is with Legolas, but he's certainly not right. Imagine having someone watching you in those kind of circumstances with Aewen, I would be horrified! No wonder she was so put off. And what is she playing at if she's courting someone else? I do not like the sound of Dolgallion going south, nor the Queen going to Dale. Got a feeling at least one of them isn't going to end well. Author Reply: I don't know what he thinks his role is with Legolas You've got that right. Yeah, I mean honestly (and Thranduil is going to say this, eventually)--how do you think you are going to treat someone in the House of Oropher like this and expect it will turn out well? Tureden has some learning to do. To be fair, so does Legolas. And what is she playing at if she's courting someone else? Good question. Says a lot about her character, doesn't it? Talk about someone with something to learn. I do not like the sound of Dolgallion going south, nor the Queen going to Dale. Got a feeling at least one of them isn't going to end well. At least there are no warnings for OC deaths. In this story. Oh, am I mean! ;-) Thanks so much for the reviews! I really appreciate them!

picara	Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 6/12/2013
Wow, Tureden is a jerk, but that is obvious. Seen enough of these characters to know to expect at least some explanation for that, so I'll wait and see. What else I noticed was how mature Legolas is in many parts of this--he makes good observations in the meeting, he has the courage to tell the truth to the Dragon and, frankly, his understanding of how Tureden should be handled is way better than Tureden's understanding of how to behave in public. That contrasts in an interesting way with the glimpses of still 'immature' Legolas that we see (rolling his eyes and his general shortness/snarkiness with Tureden and laughing at New Foolish Tulus, for example). I guess I'm just saying that I thought Legolas was pretty realistic here. Almost an adult. And that's what he's supposed to be. I predict he's going to be in a lot of trouble for using that door. Looking forward to the next one. Author Reply: I'm glad Legolas came across that way. That is what I was going for. Generally speaking, he is very mature, especially for his age, but that is sort of expected given his position and responsibilities. But he still has his moments. He's having one with Tureden right now. Your prediction is right in many ways. Thanks so much for the reviews. I really appreciate them!

CandissD	Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 6/11/2013
Poor Legolas with Tureden! Can't wait to see how that works out :) Loved the entire chapter and as usual, cannot wait for more :) Author Reply: Glad you are still enjoying! Poor Legolas indeed. Talk about being at the end of your rope! Thanks so much for the reviews! I really appreciate them!

Rikwen	Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 6/11/2013
Was happy to see this chapter pop up tonight. I really liked the scene with the Dragon in his office. Langon turns to be the one person who really understands, besides Thranduil, what Legolas went through. "If he attacked you with a sword, he intended to kill you and you had the right to defend yourself. If he attacked the king's son, he is guilty of treason to this realm and you had the responsibility to kill him. The king would have done so on the spot if you had left him alive. You did the right thing, Legolas." He understands why Legolas hesitates to pick up a weapon to fight again. It is going to take time, but I like the way you have a him counsel Legolas to find joy to overcome the darkness. He may be a hard ass on the training field, but I was cheering him on when he talked to Legolas and when he released him from sword training. Now, on the other hand, I think someone should take Tureden and drop him into a cave with a bunch of orcs and turn the lights out. I haven't figured out if he thinks that Legolas is some child he can intimidate or if he thinks that Legolas is a warrior under his command. But whatever, he definitely needs to be reamed on that action to keep Legolas inside for the night. What a dunce, this is only going to make Legolas totally uncontrollable and cause problems between Legolas and his adar. That trip to Dale is going to be going down the tubes when the king finds out what Legolas is about to do. I hope Legolas gets a new guard before he decides to kill this one. Author Reply: Langon is a tough guy to like. Until something like this happens. And then he's the guy you want on your side for lots of reasons. He didn't get to be as stern as he is by knitting for the last three ages of the world. He knows. And that means he can help. Legolas would like to say that he is currently in a mood to approve of your suggestion to throw Tureden in a cave with orcs, lock the door and turn out the lights. He'd like for you to go ahead and execute that plan, thank you. ;-) You are right that this situation is going to become uncontrollable fast. I will restrain myself from saying any more. :-) Thanks so much for the review! I appreciate it so much!

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