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| The Journal of Alatáriel, Missionary by Clodia | 28 Review(s) |
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| Larner | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 1/30/2010 |
| To see Galadriel portrayed as an overzealous, bigheaded bigot like this is rather funny! Poor Galadriel--she must have been both amused and appalled to see such things written in her name! Author Reply: To be honest, I think Galadriel was absolutely furious. But that's another story. :D I'm so glad you're amused by this! and as ever, thank you for reading! | |
| Redheredh | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 1/29/2010 |
| So, the Darkness has come. I have a feeling this tale isn't going to be so fluffy anymore, and the criticism a little more precise then dismissive. So, it takes only 6 months (or what ever short block of time represented)to build a Swan ship? Really? Naw, that has to be the author just getting it wrong again. And not worth another note or the quibble. Why, the trip to Tol Eressea from Alqualonde apparently takes only 1 day. But wow, Alatriel is so confident and trusting in Teleporno. Who would have known that? When he speaks, she is calmed. Fears allayed. That we all could be so... Victorian. Although, I personally would not like to be as distant from my grandfather as she appears to be. Or possessed of the worst romantic paradox about 'simple' folk. However, that is the style for this story, and I love how you are using it! Author Reply: Yes, things should definitely get a little messier in the next chapter. And you're probably right re: building of ship plus sailing to Tol Eressea -- and absolutely right that such errors are attributable to the anonymous author, who (whatever else s/he may be) has never seen Valinor and in any case has a rather different set of priorities. Western geography isn't really E&M's strong point either. ;) Obviously Teleporno/Celeborn is a very reassuring person. :D I'm borrowing from Mrs Jeffreys again, really, although only because that particular pattern happened to suit me anyway. And it's great to hear you like how the style's playing out! Thank you for reading, as ever, and for such detailed comments! | |
| perelleth | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 1/29/2010 |
| The author manages to convey the dread of that moment with some intensity here! Now they wail instead, and the sound is like the keening of the gulls. This was wonderfully evoking! As for the rest, I bet this book's been for ong in celeborn's list of most hatred books of the age, why with all that insistent, almost mocking Teleporno! I agree with Erestor and mElinna in doubting that Glaadriel would have let pass the chance to remark upon the superiority of her talents at weaving, while acknowledging that there was a skill she had not mastered even beofre she went down to enlighten her poor rleatives and grace them with her presence! :-) I really like to see that variation of the tale, that celeborn and galadriel sailed on theri own because they had already decided to do so, brought to life. This is so much fun! Author Reply: I'm very glad you think I got the moment across -- it's surprisingly tricky to do atmosphere using other people's writing styles! Hopefully the slightly nastier scenes in the following chapter will work out as well. And, ahaha, good to see you agree Celeborn's indignation at the tale is justified! :D It is really *very* entertaining to write a story that keeps faithfully to every letter of the perfect!Galadriel UT versions, while at the same time subverting that UT spirit in as many ways as possible. And it's really wonderful to hear that you're enjoying it! Thank you, as ever. :D | |
| curiouswombat | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 1/28/2010 |
| This is wonderful - so like so many books to be found in our own reality... But so wonderfully explained and clarified for us by E&A. :~) Author Reply: I'm so glad you think so! The journal entries are modelled on Mrs Jeffreys' journal -- the link in the prologue should be working now, if you want to compare and contrast :D -- and the critical notes are totally based on the sort of stuff I have to read all the time in RL. It's fun to be writing this stuff for a change, instead of just reading and analysing it. Thank you so much for indulging me by reading! | |
| perelleth | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 1/25/2010 |
| LOLOL I am not sure what I find more delightful: The author's naive tone or the deliciously snarky notes of the editors! The author delights me in her sufficiency: I'm reading the original ( thank you thank you) and LMAO, and the tone here is perfectly pitched. But the notes! 3 and 4 had me howling, and wondering if Erestor and Melinna were ever allowed to set foot on Lorien after this...:-) BUt, since they were merciful enough to let pass this I wished therefore to carry this selfsame cup abroad to far-flung lands that had not benefited from such teachings, that I might among such poor and ignorant people, in humble and self-effacing mood, share the rich vintage of my own unsurpassable wisdom. without comment, I think maybe that saved them. In humble and self effacing mode! LOLOL! Priceless, I tell you. I'm loving this, Clodia, congratulations! Author Reply: I have to admit, I think Galadriel probably refused to speak to Erestor and Melinna for several decades after this -- if not centuries. But I'm sure they wandered back into Lorien every now and then anyway, if only to share their gossip with Celeborn. :'D It's great that the tone matches the original! I'm not being as precise with the mimicry here as in the Beleriand Treasury pastiches, mostly because there's just so much more of the Journal that absolute precision would take *forever* and also would probably be a bit excessive; I was aiming to capture the flavour, though, so I'm glad you think that works. And that you're enjoying the original -- I do think it's full of rather fascinating stuff, all Signs of the Time aside. (So very glad also that you picked out that sentence; I hesitated for a moment between 'unsurpassed' and 'unsurpassable', and went with the latter just to be absolutely sure. Merciful? Perhaps. But to be truthful, I couldn't think of any comment that wouldn't just have been rubbing it in. Poor Galadriel, so grossly misrepresented! :'D) | |
| Virtuella | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 1/25/2010 |
| I think you deserve a medal just for thinking of this project, never mind excuting it so well. It is most delightfully whimsical and charmingly ridiculous. Author Reply: Credit where it's due, the idea did spring from a conversation with Randy and Aislynn, quite a long time ago now. 'Whimsical and ridiculous' -- precisely what I was aiming for, really! (Considering that 'Blood and Fire' was the last major Silm project I wrote, I thought I was due frivolity this time round. :'D) And it is rather peculiar, so I'm so glad you like it! | |
| Erulisse | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 1/24/2010 |
| Anachronism upon anachronism - and so, piled onto a shaky pile of "veracity". I have no doubt that Lord Celeborn remembers his courtship differently, indeed I suspect that historian also view history differently. Thank goodness for the editors and their dedication to ferreting out the truths and untruths from this formal missive of tale-telling :-) You're doing a wonderful job here, Clodia. Author Reply: It means a lot to me that you think that. This is fun to write, although the extensive mimicry of Mrs Jeffreys' journal makes it more time-consuming than it would otherwise be; I'm so glad you're enjoying it! | |
| Redheredh | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 1/24/2010 |
| LOL! Well done! You've even gotten me pondering what a fourth-age deconstructionist might make of these contemporaries' critical notes. :D Author Reply: Ahahah, now that would be pretty hilarious. What a wonderful suggestion! :'D | |
| Larner | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 1/24/2010 |
| This is quite funny in many ways, looking at the possibilities and the comparisons between versions. Heh! And I'm certain Celeborn had a quite different view of the courtship between himself and his beloved wife! Heh! Author Reply: I'm so glad you think so! It amuses me to write it, but I know I don't have much of a sense of humour. ;) As ever, thanks so much for reading and commenting! | |
| Larner | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/24/2010 |
| Not precisely a polite view of the Silvan folk, is it? Most interesting! No, I cannot see Galadriel being this dishonest or unflattering to her own people's former leaders. Author Reply: Wonderful! That's precisely the reaction I wanted. :D | |