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| Rainbow Drabbles by Jay of Lasgalen | 25 Review(s) |
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| Baggins Babe | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 8/20/2009 |
| I have often wondered about those poor guards, waiting on lonely mountain tops. I loved this - it was written with such beautiful economy and the repetition at the beginning and end show that this guard is one link in that vital chain. Perfect! Author Reply: I think the beacon guards must have lived very lonely lives. Thank you for mentioning the repetition - it was very deliberate, and seems to have worked! | |
| Larner | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 8/19/2009 |
| I love the further images of flowers and petals within this one, Jay. Beautiful! Author Reply: I was hoping to continue the floral image throughout the series, but it didn't work out. I'm glad you liked this, though! | |
| Cairistiona | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 8/19/2009 |
| Yes! Someone has finally written a piece about those lonely men on the mountaintops between Rohan and Gondor. I've often thought about writing something about the vigil they keep and how it must have felt when at long last the time finally came to light the beacon. Shaking hands indeed! Well done. Author Reply: I've sometimes wondered about the beacon guards - was it an honoured position, handed down from father to son, or was it a punishment duty and a chance of redemption? It must have been strange and terrifying when the time came to act. | |
| Cairistiona | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 8/19/2009 |
| I love how with such a small drabble, you've still managed to paint a very immense cavern. Elladan looking at the distant torches really brings that point home. Also loved that he was more concerned with the smoke from his own torch than with the Dead following. Few would be so calm. Author Reply: The cavern and the passages must have been vast - but in the darkness it would be impossible to see that. The torches were a way of showing that distance. I don't know about calm - Elladan just didn't like the smoke in his eyes! | |
| Independence1776 | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 8/19/2009 |
| Love the repetition at the beginning and the end-- it shows quite well this man is just a link in the chain. But at the same time, he's vital. Loved it. Author Reply: Thanks - yes, the repetition was important to show the chain of beacons continuing. To be a beacon guard must have been a dull, lonely job - all that waiting! | |
| Lindelea | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 8/17/2009 |
| Ooo, very evocative. I can clearly see the scene as you've set it. Author Reply: Thank you - what a dark, eerie journey that was! | |
| Vilwarin | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 8/16/2009 |
| *shivers* you do a great job setting the scene. Author Reply: Thank you - but it was such an eerie place, I didn't need to do much. | |
| Independence1776 | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 8/15/2009 |
| You do a good job of showing the details of walking the Paths of the Dead: the gloom, the composition of the stone, and the light that will bring hope. | |
| Larner | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 8/15/2009 |
| Excellent response to the prompt, and one I find myself responding to! | |
| ellie | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 8/15/2009 |
| Very creepy, and nice use of flames and yellow. Not good reading for late at night. Too eerie! | |