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| Just A Cold by Aelaer | 69 Review(s) |
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| Estelcontar | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 5/2/2008 |
| For someone who can't write fight scenes, you've just written a very exciting one. I liked the way you cut back and forth between the kitchen and the tavern room. It was great to see the fight from the eyes of the observers. So, now he is sick because he's been fighting. LOL Stubbornness Thy Name Is Aragorn. "I found myself with some spare time, and went out for a stroll." This had me laughing out loud. It's got to be the understatement of the year. And I like your Randir. He is a most wise-hearted person. Can't wait for the conclusion. | |
| Agape4Gondor | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 5/2/2008 |
| Wow - what a great chapter. So easygoing and descriptive yet fun. I really liked the bar scene and the patrons. Glad they 'kept a civil tongue' especially about Lord Denethor. Good to see that Aragorn is able to listen and perhaps do something for them. Especially since they are old soldiers of Gondor. I like that he would look after them! Author Reply: Considering that Gondor is very much a hierachial monarchy, I also like to think that Aragorn would think of those at the bottom- and old soldiers would certainly be there. | |
| Agape4Gondor | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 5/2/2008 |
| Great start. I enjoyed his time with Faramir - and was grateful for the mercy shown the guards. As for the note in the beginning regarding the bells - it's something good to know. I've always had trouble with Tolkien's blasted bells! Author Reply: Tolkien's bells *are* really difficult. It took me a couple hours to finally figure out how the bells worked. | |
| Tigger | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 5/2/2008 |
| I had a feeling at the end of it all, someone would recognize Aragorn. The second worst person too, being in the form of the son of the Captain of his Personal Guard!! Dare I say our stubborn, dear Ranger King is in for more than just one scolding over this and not only from Arwen? The good thing about this happening is that Aragorn did get to hear what the common people think of things and defended his people in a very physical manner. That tale will spread like wildfire and will only be for the good. Especially the part of Aragorn insisting on paying for the drink and the company. I can't see Denethor paying for anything when he went out to dine. *If* he went out to dine that is. I don't think Denethor would insist on paying for the repair of the Inn and replacement of any furniture beyond repair either. Yes, Aragorn's going to end up paying for this in a big way because he didn't listen to the signs his body was telling him. OTOH...Things may end up being far better in the long term due to his little "jaunt". Looking forward to the next chapter and seeing what happens to the Ruffians. Author Reply: There are very few people who can get away with scolding the King of the Reunited Kingdom. And I gave most of them a good reason to go after him. Ah, I love being the All-Powerful Author. I am honestly not sure about Denethor. I personally believe it would depend on what stage of his life he was in. Before the death of Finduilas I think he would be just enough. While I do not see him to be one to dine in some common tavern, I think he'd pay for his food if he did go out. After her death and his deterioration due to the Palantir, though, I think he became a completely different man. So I do have to give him some credit, pre-Palantir. I never really thought about all the rumors that would spread about him being in the city. Can you even imagine how much they would be escalated in a couple days? "I heard he took on twenty men unarmed!" "And they were armed to the teeth!" "And he went out without a scratch!" Ah, rumors. What fun. | |
| Andrea | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 5/2/2008 |
| Great story so far! I have very much enjoyed reading it. To be revealed by one of his own guards was surely not what Aragorn had expected. But that way he could use his authority to get those ruffians imprisoned and to make sure that the boy who fetched the guards reached his home safely. He's the best king one could wish for :) But what will his dear wife say when he comes home? I fear there's trouble ahead ;-) Author Reply: Thank you! I hope you enjoy the last chapter of the story :) | |
| Kitt Otter | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 5/2/2008 |
| The fighting scene was clearly written. I liked that you switched from Aragorn to the narration in the kitchen and back. That cut it into agreeable pieces. Silly comment: I was so happy to see the word "sheath". I had forgotten how it was spelled and it was making me crazy. I had a mighty chuckle when Aragorn was revealed. Well, at least he is out and getting a grip on his... condition. *sighs with delight* The way he handles people; he is such a wonderful king! -Kitt : ) Author Reply: Well, thank you! I am very, very happy that you thought it was good. I am still not particularly pleased with my action writing, but practice makes perfect, right? :) Yes. Aragorn is a wonderful king. *nod* *swoons* Thanks for reviewing! | |
| Kitty | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 5/2/2008 |
| Aragorn did a great job, all things considered, but I was certainly glad when the guards arrived. And even if it lifted his incognito, it was good they recognised him. I'm not sure I want to imagine what would happen if they had arrested him! *grin* But I have to object to his offer to pay for the damage. The ruffians should have to pay for it - they were the ones to start the fight, after all! Give them a heavy fine that not only pays for the damage, but covers the shock and everything for Aearhil and his family and employees, too! Now I look forward to find out if Aragorn survives his return to Arwen ;-) Author Reply: LOL! I actually once read a story when Aragorn, as king, was arrested in Minas Tirith. It was rather hilarious. I'm half-tempted to write it, myself, though coming up with a plotline that was plausible would be difficult. But there goes another plot bunny! And your review, just like Sarah's, inspired some additions to chapter five :) Thank you! | |
| Kitty | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 5/2/2008 |
| Ouch. Aragorn may feel not well already, but when Arwen is through with him, he will feel decidedly worse. As for Aragorn's little outing, it was only to be expected that something would go wrong. Incidents like this one had to happen sometimes in inns, and of course Aragorn would be one of these to intervene and protect the ones not trained to fight. Well, at least he had the presence of mind to send the boy for the guard ... but that doesn't bode well. Four to one, and this one is ill ... *runs off to next chapter* (being late in reading and reviewing has its advantages - particularly as far as cliffhangers go) Author Reply: *snort* Strong wives are truly the most fearful things to men ;) And naturally something had to go wrong. I love throwing Murphy's Law onto Aragorn. I am such a mean author to my characters. And I very much agree with that last statement! Cliffhangers can be awful to wait on. | |
| Kitty | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 5/2/2008 |
| It is easy to see why Aragorn sometimes wants to walk around incognito, simply watching his people, enjoying it not to have to be King. The restrictions of this office have to be rather tiring sometimes. And it is very interesting, what he gets to hear in this inn. Why do I have the feeling there will be something changing about these public audiences very soon? As for Captain Thorongil - I wonder if Corudir and his fellows will find out just *what* became of him? Author Reply: I would imagine so. There is certainly a reason why I would never want to be insanely recognisable. Thanks again for reviewing, it was lovely to see reviews for all the chapters :) | |
| Kitty | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 5/2/2008 |
| Oh well, I don't know who's worse - these stubborn ones like Aragorn who refuse to acknowledge that they're not well until it has gotten really bad - or the ones who go to bed and decide they're dying because of a simple headache or a slight cold. Anyway, as a healer, Aragorn certainly should know better! (And accept that the sickbed is *not* as bad as a cell - though that one had me laughing aloud!) Love Faramir here, with his concern for Aragorn - and his 'Elrondian Eyebrow' ;-) The same goes for their relationship and the way Faramir in the end helped Aragorn to escape without the guard noticing him. Author Reply: Oh, certainly the latter! They are usually the lazy type, while the former are the hard workers. I actually was inspired by Aragorn's 'I am well no matter what you say' attitude not only by fanon (which has, admittedly, influenced me) but also my mother. She is a ridiculously hard worker and will never slow down until she collapses. She was, ironically, also a nurse once upon a time! I now associate hard workers with slight negligence to health, and Aragorn is certainly no slacker :) Oh, the sickbed can be certainly awful, though! ;) Thanks for the lovely review. | |