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| A Charge To Keep by French Pony | 89 Review(s) |
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| Jay of Lasgalen | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 4/11/2005 |
| This is very chilling - the descriptions of the slaughtered elves and their injuries. I can't help wondering what the orcs did to Padathir :( We know Legolas will live, but this story explains why it was so long after Gollum's escape that he took the news to Elrond. That has always bothered me. Why not inform him and Aragorn immediately? Jay | |
| perelleth | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 4/8/2005 |
| Mmm, now I fully understand your claim about forensics in the foreword. You got me here!(Again, I should add. I was awed by your explanation of how Fingon had to break and then sever Maedhros' hand! I'm not fond of "gorensics" myself, but I do appreciate a good job when I see one!) I think I'd never before read of a battle so focused on the nasty sounds of broken bones, and rent flesh (is it my imagination or I really heard it?)you do have an eye for forensic detail, truth be told, I simply bow. As I've said before, this is a wonderful gap filler, I'm enjoying it a lot. I'm still haunted by that image in chapter two, of Thranduil sitting in silence and pondering gollum. It struck me, really. | |
| Dot | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 4/5/2005 |
| Such a great chapter. I really like the group of guards and their kindness to Gollum as well as the friendship and banter between themselves. I though it was interesting that you didn’t make Legolas the captain of them. I don’t know why I presumed you would. You painted such a sad, hopeless and extremely ominous picture of the approaching Shadow. It was a very moving moment when Thranduil reached out to Luindil, and I like how willing he is to trust the Dwarves. I really love your Thranduil. He’s so much more open than most people make him, despite the darkness at his door, and still there’s no sense of naïveté about his openness, but a feeling that it stems from wisdom. Nice. Despite knowing what had to happen, my heart was still in my mouth when the guards were starting to become uneasy about Gollum’s silence. Such tension! I was actually quite touched by the fact that one of their first thoughts was that he was injured. Even if they did still decide to leave him in the tree. I thought it was very effective the way the way Menellir and Thranduil were both uneasy about something in the forest. And then the battle! Wow, that was horrible. The sounds in particular had me cringing but it was such a vivid picture, written marvellously. I can’t wait for the next update – I’m just dying to know where you’re taking this! | |
| Karri | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 4/5/2005 |
| A wonderful chapter, FP! This description of what happened is well done and the characters are all beautifully portrayed. | |
| elliska | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 4/5/2005 |
| When did you post this? I swear I didn't see it last night. This is just a scary chapter and you did a good job portraying that. Gollum going stil in the tree, the conversation about the spread of the shadow and the lack of food, Menellir and Thranduil's feeling that all is not right...all add up to a nice spooky tone. And for very good reasons. That battle was just nasty! The sound effects were particularly disgusting. Good job. :) And a good job fleshing out the scene in the tree that canon only gives us one sentence or so about. That was one heck of a place to leave us! I did not imagine Legolas getting injuried in this so that really surprised me. I'm looking forward to seeing how you get him out of the mess he's in. | |
| Lamiel | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 4/4/2005 |
| And then? And then? I know that Legolas has to survive the attack, but that isn't much comfort when you leave us on such a cliff-hanger as this! What if the Orcs take him with them and Gollum? I'd never thought of it before, but it could happen. Oh, and THAT would add a whole new level to the story! I'm having thoughts of Dol Guldor, and the Witchking, and all sorts of delicious levels of Elf torture . . . ahem. I'll try to restrain myself. Loved the way all the Elves were uneasy, especially Thranduil. Ooh, no matter how this comes out, he is NOT going to be a happy Elvenking. Oh, and nice characterization of him regarding the Dwarves, too. Such a relief to see him as the fully fleshed out character he should be, and not a cipher. Good job with this chapter - and there's no telling where you'll go from here. I'm looking forward to more. | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 4/4/2005 |
| Oh wow. That was tense. I like the way you have Legolas as one of the guards, but not in charge. That makes for an interesting dynamic here. I also like how kind and patient the elves are with Gollum. | |
| perelleth | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 4/3/2005 |
| I liked the picture of Thranduil sitting with Gollum and watching him. It seemed very likely to me. He's quite a riddle, and Mithrandir has been nothing but his obscure self. It was nice and good that Gandalf chose to repay them in flour, but one cannot help wondering how that may look afer the orcs attack them and some guards are lost. It was great danger he was placing under their care, with no warning at all. And so fitting they all would devote such lengths of thought and discussion to the well being of their "prisoner" | |
| The Karenator | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 4/1/2005 |
| I really liked the discussion about Bilbo between Thranduil and Gandalf. I like that Thranduil held the little hobbit in such high esteem, despite the whole 'escape' thing that happened. The conversations about Imladris were nice. Little does Legolas know that he'll see this place...soon. Is it canon that Gandalf didn't tell Thranduil the nature of Gollum's importance? I've got to look that up. That's an interesting thought. I also thought it was interesting the way you handled the 'rehabilitation' attempts of Gollum. The kitchen staff taking part is a nice twist. They're trying to see to the creature's needs. Unfortunately, good intentioned actions don't always turn out the way we plan. Karen | |
| perelleth | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/30/2005 |
Great gap-filler you chose here! Loved your detailed descriptions and characterizations. Gandalf is his good old self, cheeky and taking advantage of his old age..( these Maiar did have a sense of humour, I think, to be clad in such powerless and unappealing forms...)Thranduil is great, cautious but not mean, he seems to know how to play along with Gandalf...great job! | |