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| A Journey Of Discovery by Jay of Lasgalen | 57 Review(s) |
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| LOTR lover | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 7/18/2005 |
| I'm glad you updated, Jay. I'm enjoying this story very much, even though I haven't reviewed till now. I'm glad that Elrohir discovered his abilities, even though the poor dog had to suffer. And Garm got an extra benefit from it--poor Elrohir was like a fountain of youth to him! Looks like he wasn't just healing a wound; in his inexperience he was healing the ravages of age as well. No wonder it took so much out of him! It's a good thing that boy knocked him away from the dog, after all. Elrond and Celebrian are certainly wise parents. I both do and don't agree with Elrond's decision not to tell Elrohir about the circumstances of his birth--he should be told, yes, but on top of everything else that's happened, that might well be too much information for him. Better later, but as Celebrian said, not too much later. I like the punishments the Bree-folk gave the boys. Will does get a second chance, and maybe he'll come to be sorry for what he's done. The other one though, Bob, doesn't seem to be very grateful for his new job. Sometimes I wonder which kind of mother is worse--Will's sort or Bob's. Again, I'm glad you updated. I always enjoy reading your work. Author Reply: Thanks for breaking silence - I know there are far more readers than reviewers out there! Elrohir didn't really know what he was doing, and his healing was completely undirected and uncontrolled. It was good for Garm/Draug, but not so good for Elrohir. That's why Elrond wants him to wait, and learn to use this skill properly. Yes, Elrond should have told his sons what happened when they were born. Unfortunately, the twins are going to have a long wait before they find out. I'm glad everyone seems to approve of the boys' punishment. It seemed the most practical solution, and gave them the best chance of turning over a new leaf. | |
| Nilmandra | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 7/18/2005 |
| I like the use of justice in this small town....put the boys to work, get them apprenticed so that an adult is in charge of them, as they need (and want). I think the elves would like this kind of justice. I was just thinking too that Elrond made the twins make a promise they really couldn't promise to keep :/ Author Reply: I didn't think that the elves could really play much part in the dispensing of justice, but they'd approve of this. The boys have mentors now, to set them a good example, and will learn a trade. You think this is another promise destined to be broken?? | |
| Lianna | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 7/18/2005 |
| Great chapter, but... Why do I think that Elrohir's promise not to attempt another healing is going to be broken? And soon! Author Reply: Thranduil once said 'never make promises you cannot keep'. I think Elrond should have considered that too. | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 7/18/2005 |
| The "trial" was interesting. It's hard to know what a society like that would do with such boys and your solution seems a good one to me. I've been reading about life in medieval villages and a lot of crime was punished by fines. Crime was a source of income for the lord, it seems. The dog was charming. Too bad Elrohir couldn't keep him. I'm not sure that keeping the circumstances of Elrohir's birth from the twins is a good idea. Secrets often come back to bite you. Author Reply: It was dificult to think what punishment could be meted out. Locking them up wouldn't achieve anything constructive (and I imagine Bree only has somewhere where a drunk could be kept overnight). A little hard labour, and setting them the right example in behaviour by getting them both away from their unsuitable parents seemed best. I rather wish I hadn't already told the story where Elrond tells Elrohir what happened - this would have been the right time to do it. Although Elrohir can't keep Draug, I've other plans there ... | |
| French Pony | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 7/18/2005 |
| It's ironic that, for all his talk of honor and truth and keeping promises, Elrond can't bring himself to tell the twins what happened when they were born. But people can be weird like that, I guess. Celebrian is right; the twins have a right to be told before they find out on their own, but we don't always get what we have a right to. The people of Bree seem like good folks. They really understand that it takes a village to raise a child, and the village comes to pitch in with these two. But there's still Harry to be dealt with, and he may return to make trouble later. Author Reply: You're right, this would have been a good time to tell the twins what happened when they were born. The only reason Elrond didn't is that I've already written the story where he does finally tell them, around 2000 years later! Don't worry about Harry. He saw the error of his ways for himself, and wasn't involved in the attack on Elrohir anyway. | |
| pipinheart | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 6/28/2005 |
This a very nice story of the twinns in thier younger years.. How Elrohir found his healing powers,and protected the dog that was being mistreated... Love to hear more... update soon... Author Reply: The next chapter is nearly finished, so I'll update in the next few days (I hope!) Glad you're enjoying this. | |
| Ellie | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 4/10/2005 |
| Good job! I like the way you handled this chapter and that they didn't get in trouble (yay). Looking forward to the next chapter as usual. Author Reply: Thanks! It wouldn't be fair if the twins had got into trouble for what happened - it was clear to Elrond and Celebrian that they did the right thing in the circumstances. Next chapter will be along ASAP! | |
| Dot | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 4/8/2005 |
| Whew. Everyone’s o.k. Poor Elrohir didn’t seem to know what to make of events. It must be hard for him to comprehend the fact that these boys didn’t need a reason to hurt him. I loved the little moment when he realises that whatever is about to happen, at least Elladan must be safe. He made a marvellous effort to defend himself, especially considering how tired and weak he still was. But yay for Draug! He’s clearly decided that Elrohir is his friend now. And I felt such relief when Eilenach & co. arrived – it was getting far too tense there! What a shock it must have been for Elladan and Elrond when Elrohir collapsed like that. I had to laugh at his wounded dignity, though, when Elrohir realises that he fainted!! I hadn’t thought about the fact that Elrond might feel a little suspicious at Elladan’s tale when he sees the supposedly wounded dog so full of life and energy! But I must say, I really liked the way he calmly and respectfully listens to Elrohir’s story about healing him. I suppose he probably suspected that at least one of them would have the gift of healing. And of course, you had to make us see that Will is also a victim in many ways and has reasons for being the way he is! It wouldn’t do for us to be too angry with him ;-) Brindley was very amusing as he tries to be discreet about Will’s family circumstances in front of the twins. I was glad to see that Elladan has realised that they should never have run off on Eilenach. But it would seem that Elrond will have to explain about the importance of keeping promises, while still managing to show his sons that sometimes promises can be broken. In the meantime both he and Celebrían have done a good job in making their sons feel safe and loved. There’ll be plenty of time for lessons to be explained and learned in the morning! :-) Author Reply: The twins aren't used to that sort of viciousness, fortunately. Elrohir did his best but it was a good thing that Draug decided to repay his help. I decided that it would be reasonable for poor Elrohir to faint after all that - a first time, major healing; a beating by two thugs; the fear that something *else* was going to happen - then the relief as his father arrives. Elrond half suspected that one day Elrohir would turn out to be a healer after what happened when he was born - but it turned out to be sooner rather than later. There will be much to learn from all this. | |
| elliska | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 4/8/2005 |
| Ok, you want to know how pitiful I am? I am actually thoroughly relieved that you posted this chapter because I was worrying about poor Elrohir and the dog. Good dog! I liked seeing him bite the nasty boys' behinds. Glad you wrote it that way! The fight scene was tense but I'm glad Elrohir got a few good licks in even though the rotten brats fought so unfairly. Stupidly too if they thought they could take on an elf. And poor Elrond. I liked his fury when he realized one of the boys had hit Elrohir (they should be glad they didn't get caught). And I liked how he handled the rest of it. Butterbur and the 'she's a wh...' line made me chuckle--that would have been a heck of a thing for Elrond to have to explain! :) I really am relieved the worst of this is over. I hope we see the nasty boys get a little more justice. Author Reply: I'm glad you were worried about Draug! I told you he had an important role to play. The cruelty, sadly, was vital to the story - but he did his bit! The two louts did fight dirty - but I doubt they knew E2 were (mostly)elves or what it meant. They're lucky they didn't have to face a furious father! Will's mother is partly why he's like that - but he's still a lout. They'll be dealt with in the next chapter. | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 4/8/2005 |
| I wish Elrond and Celebrian were my parents. (Not that I'm saying anything against my mother, mind. It's just that they are simply perfect.) And, if anyone can make a pair of adolescents understand that some promises have to be broken - but that doesn't mean that you can just ignore them when you fancy it - then E and C are the ones to do it. I'll bet they're justing bursting with pride to see their sons turning into the kind of elves who will risk themselves to help the helpless. Not to mention Elrohir developing into a pretty ace healer. (By the way, when Elflings 6 comes along - it's already been written for ages, promise. It's been waiting for me to do Elflings 5.) I can't help but feel sorry for Will, though. His mother's a wh... and he doesn't know his father - can't be easy in a small town like Bree. I can see he would grow up ready to kick rather than be kicked. But I hope he gets Taken in Hand. Most enjoyable. More soon? (Note the hopeful intonation.) Author Reply: I'm glad you spotted the central issue of this story - promises are important, but sometimes they have to be broken. It's a sign of E2's growing maturity that they're beginning to recognise this. I don't like one-dimensional villains who are just evil because they are. Will has had a hard life. (But others with an equally hard life still know right from wrong!) The concluding chapter will deal with what happens to these louts. | |