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| Interrupted Journeys: Part 1 New Journeys by elliska | 94 Review(s) |
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| Jay of Lasgalen | Reviewed Chapter: Epilogue 2 on 9/18/2004 |
| Mmm ... that was very nice. Very restrained, very chaste, very discreet. Nothing too graphic (though there's nothing wrong with graphic!) or detailed. Thank you, Elliska. Jay Author Reply: Thanks Jay. Glad you liked it. It is discreet because I know I am just not a good enough writer to write a good, tense, graphic scene and because, as silly as it sounds, even if I could write it, I would feel bad describing their wedding night any more graphically than that. It's their wedding night! A little respect, please! :) I do like a good, well written scene of this type and there are some out there. :) Thank you for the reviews! | |
| French Pony | Reviewed Chapter: Epilogue 2 on 9/18/2004 |
| Nicely written, although I must confess that I find sex scenes as a species kind of dull. I think the story would have worked just as well without it as with it. But if there is going to be a sex scene, better that it be tasteful, and this was definitely tasteful. The other problem is that, once you mentioned Thranduil hearing Lindomiel's song inside him, I started to get this paranoid feeling that I would be required to write something about it for my Gender and Music class. But that's entirely due to a lively discussion of a particularly spicy scene in Caccini's Liberation of Ruggiero that we had in class on Friday. At the moment I'm at work and listening to a CD of Custer LaRue singing Anglo ballads, which she does superbly well. It makes a nice soundtrack when one is reading romance. Author Reply: Thank you. Generally speaking, I agree with you. Most of these types of scenes don't interest me because they are graphic and that is all. I certainly intended for the story to stand without this chapter because I know many people would not even consider reading this content and I respect that. I'm glad you thought this was tasteful. I intended for it to be to comply with the guidelines on this site. Enjoy the musical interlude you are having. Sounds like you take some interesting classes. Thanks for the reviews! | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: Epilogue 2 on 9/18/2004 |
| This was lovely. I am so happy to see the newlyweds be rewarded at last. Let them enjoy themselves while they can. Author Reply: Thank you. I find that stuff amazingly hard to write. Exactly--let them enjoy themselves. Life in Mirkwood is a challenge, I think. Thanks so much for the reviews! | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: Epilogue 2 on 9/18/2004 |
| End of part one. To be continued. What an excellent point to conclude. Thranduil and Lindomiel appear to be having a pleasant evening. Let's leave them to go on with getting acquainted! Good story. Looking forward to part two. Author Reply: :) Yes, they seem happy and it is time to give them some privacy :) . Thank you so much for the reviews! Part two will start soon. I hope you like it. | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 24 on 9/18/2004 |
| I have to say my favorite moment came when you told us there was more to come.:-) I've really enjoyed this story. Imho, it's the best of the stories I've seen about Thranduil meeting his wife. You've really developed Lindomiel as a character. Author Reply: Thank you daw. Sincerely. That means a lot to me coming from you. I really admire your OCs. They are phenomenal. I like playing with characterization and I guess since I intended this as part of a longer story from the very beginning, this was the most natural place to do a thorough development of a character that is going to be central to the over all story. Doing a strong introduction of her was extremely important. And I think Thranduil's wife would have to have quite a personality for numerous reasons. In the next story, Aradunnun gets a bit more of a role so we will see him develop. I hope you continue to enjoy. :) | |
| Jay of Lasgalen | Reviewed Chapter: 24 on 9/18/2004 |
| The epilogue would be the wedding night, I take it? Yes please! Thranduil has waited so long for his bride, they deserve their happiness. I wonder what new mischief Marti and Tulus are up to now? Jay Author Reply: Yes, that what the epilogue will be. It is not grossly explicit (it is their wedding night, we have to have some respect :) ) but it is a little steamy so I have sent it to Nilmandra for her to determine if it fits the site guidleines. This my first story here so I don't know the rules too well. But you're right. I wrote it because I do feel like they deserve a little happy ending. :) Marti and Tulus are up to something. We will see. Thank you so much for the reviews! | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 24 on 9/18/2004 |
| What a splendid wedding - full of glorious touches. I loved the spontaneous song-making about Lindomiel and her adventures. Be interesting to hear some of those! And Thranduil's romantic response. Is Aradunnon about to be a main player in the next celebrity wedding? With Amoneth in a starring role? Amglaur still finds references to Oropher hard to take - he'd better try to get over that. It could irritate Thranduil much more now he actually has Lindomiel safely married and doesn't need to placate her adar. I love the married elves clear understanding that their wives have much more successful and subtle methods of male-control available to them that parents. '“Having Lindomiel here will take some of the burden of torturing you off me.' What a typical brotherly remark! True though - and actually one of the reasons that having siblings is a good thing. Nobody can get away with being quite so - honest with you as your brothers and sisters. I am glad that Aradunnon realises that his chief responsibility to the realm is to keep Thranduil's feet on the ground! The whole celebration sounds rather fun - food, drink, dancing, competitions, bawdy songs - a good night had by all - all that is except - (dangerous music) - Marti and Tulus. I'm sorry to hear that there is a young son who is going to be roped into this. Marti and Tulus have been the creators of their own problems, (well, as far as I know as yet), but this elfling is not really going to be responsible for the hatred and desire for revenge he will be fed, so however mean he turns out to be, I think I'm going to be sorry for him. Though that is guessing. Epilogue: Wedding Night? I think we can cope! Don't take too long to move on to the next part. I want to know what happens. Author Reply: That last little conversation made me laugh as I was writing. Brothers are for keeping each other grounded and wives are in charge of the household--that's all there is to it! My husband and I have had this conversation in the past. It is funny how we women can largely get what we want. And I do love Aradunnon. He is a most loyal and loving brother and real troublemaker. He did not have much of a part beyond introduction in this story but he has a much bigger role in the next two stories. :) I actually wrote but cut those songs about Lindomiel. That might have been a mistake. The poetry was horrible (the reason I cut them) but the content was funny. Poetry ain't my bag, baby. Love reading Renaissance poetry. Can't write it. No, no! Tulus is definitely the creator of his own problems and Marti is as well to a very large degree. Glílavan is not in a good place, unfortunately. Epilogue: Yes, wedding night. Not too graphic but steamy enough that I thought I'd better pass it by Nilmandra first since I don't know the rules here too well. If she says its too much, I will tone it down to post it here, I think. But its current version goes up at Open Scrolls tomorrow. It won't be too long until I start posting Journeys Perforce. I just want to read (and reread) some of my favorite stuff that I haven't given enough attention because I've been reading me own stuff. I don't see how you people that have two or three stories going at a time can do it. I find myself reading this thing and making little changes and then I have to look at other parts to make sure what I cut or added doesn't have too big an impact later and ... it's a lot of work. My husband thinks I'm nutz. He may be right but I'm a happy nutjob. | |
| French Pony | Reviewed Chapter: 24 on 9/17/2004 |
| Mazel tov to the happy couple! I think that's the way a wedding should be: party first, ceremony later. It would loosen everyone up, make them see that a wedding is supposed to be fun. And it might even prevent members of the wedding party from fainting under pressure. This was certainly the do of the Age. The only thing missing was the Chair Dance. Just imagine, so many Elves crammed together dancing that the forest can barely hold them all. That must be a sight to see. There are all sorts of little traditional games that people play at weddings to see who will "rule" the marriage. I saw a photo in National Geographic of an Indian couple fishing for a ring in a bowl of water all murked up with turmeric. Whoever got the ring ruled the roost. I have the feeling that if Thranduil and Lindomiel were to go rooting around in a bowl of turmeric water, they'd end up hooking each other's fingers and no one would find the ring. Well, maybe Aradunnon might nick it later. Hey! He's now the Woodland Realm's Most Eligible Bachelor! Bet he's going to have fun. I have yet to meet a married woman who did not have her husband firmly under control. The art is to make that control so light and delicate that the husband has no idea how deeply he's snared. Tulus should get over himself already. But I think he won't. Not if the Black Swan is around to plant ideas in his head. And why do I think that his kid will be around to plague us for stories yet to come? Until next time. . . same Bat-time. . . same Bat-channel. . . Author Reply: Weddings are a great excuse for a fun party, aren't they? :) And yes, I agree--party first and short ceremony after when everyone is relaxed and in a good mood. And don't laugh about fainting under pressure--my dad was dead when I got married and I had the bright idea that no one could take his place walking me up the aisle so I went myself. I was so nervous that I almost did pass out. (Not nervous to be married--I just don't do being the center of attention really well). I dearly wish I had known about the 'who will rule the marriage' games. My mind is just rolling with the possibilities for that ring game and the place it might have had in this story. I really wanted a game in this chapter but I couldn't come up with anything. My friend who reads this stuff before I post it is going to see this review and revolt. No more rewrites after chapters are posted! I can hear it now. Yes, Aradunnon has a much bigger role in the next story. I like that character. I love being a woman. We definitely have all the power in the marriage and the better you are at the art of delicate control the better it is. Poor Thranduil. Lindomiel is pretty good at it as you will see. Marti, Tulus and Glílavan do not go away. It's sad, really. I really like the Black Swan image. That has a lot of potential too. Hmmm. | |
| picara | Reviewed Chapter: 22 on 9/17/2004 |
| It would be strange for the silvan to speak Quenya. This is actually a rather unsubtle clue. Author Reply: Hmmm. True. Let me tell you a story. I have a Masters degree in Computer Forensics. In the program, one of the classes we took was kind of a case study where we each had a fake crime assigned to us that we had to solve throughout the semester. I remember the instructor saying to us (warning us) on the first day of class that he hated crime shows on TV because the all evidence the investigators found was always completely relevant to their case. They never found anything that turned out to be a false lead. My point? The plot line that involves Marti is very complex. The are lots of 'clues' along the way. Some are relevant. Some are not. Some relevant clues are very subtle. Some irrelevant clues are very 'unsubtle.' And vice versa. This one 'clue' about her speaking one line of Quenya? Is it relevant? You will eventually see. This is one area where I will play with you. Sorry. :) | |
| picara | Reviewed Chapter: 23 on 9/17/2004 |
| “I will tell you that I did not answer that question.” “You will tell me that you did not answer that,” he repeated suspiciously. and “I am clearly outmatched at every turn with you, Lindomiel. I think it would be wisest to simply concede defeat.” “That is what you will be doing at tonight’s ceremony, meleth.” I love those sets of lines. Quite funny. Also I like the origin of the crown of flowers. It is sweet that his wife did that in 144 and he's still following the tradition in the Hobbit when there is no longer any sign of the queen. Looking forward to the wedding. Author Reply: Thanks :) I laughed a little myself at those. I think there must be a story behind the crown of flowers. It would be natural for a woodland king but it had to start somewhere. So this is how I fit it into my little world. Thanks for the review. PS. I am intrigued by your screen name. Picaresque literature was my original specialty when I taught lit. Is there a story behind why you chose that particular spanish word as a screen name? Next time you feel like reviewing, if you think of it, let me know. | |