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| StarFire by Lindelea | 256 Review(s) |
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| Lyta Padfoot | Reviewed Chapter: 15 on 5/7/2004 |
| So like Ferdi to be unable to kill the pony. | |
| Lyta Padfoot | Reviewed Chapter: 14 on 5/7/2004 |
| I hope the reprieve won't come too late, StarFire doesn't appear in your later works. | |
| Lyta Padfoot | Reviewed Chapter: 13 on 5/7/2004 |
| Hmm... this chapter echoes events in 'Runaway' - with regard to his children being in danger, Pippin looses the ability to think clearly. | |
| Lyta Padfoot | Reviewed Chapter: 12 on 5/7/2004 |
| I bet Eglantine referred to Pippin as 'your son' in conversations with Paladin when he annoyed her as as 'my son' when she was pleased with him. My folks do that - attributing positive traits to their side of the family and less desirable traits to the other. The description of Pippin as a 'young Paladin' was not a positive one - Pippin is being as insensitive to Ferdi as his father was. | |
| Lyta Padfoot | Reviewed Chapter: 11 on 5/7/2004 |
| Adorable chapter, especially the last bit. | |
| FantasyFan | Reviewed Chapter: 15 on 5/6/2004 |
| I forgot to mention in my review for chapter 14 that Pippin, asking his mother what he did wrong, sounds just like Pippin, asking Diamond what he did wrong in the other story. That made me giggle, but it didn't make the final draft of the review. I am curious to have you tell me exactly how you changed the story after my review (I have some vanity, you know). I am guessing that it was the comment about Ferdi destroying the horse himself that was the trigger - and it does work wonderfully here. Ferdi knows what he must do, bound to obey the orders of the Thain. But he also knows that it is wrong, and he can't do it. The best of bad choices is to let the pony go. But something in Ferdi is going to break from the strain. This scene has tremendous drama - you had me holding my breath about whether he would kill the pony or not. I have deliberately not gone and looked in stories set in later timeperiods for word of Starfire, so I don't know what the ultimate fate of the pony is. Ferdi's anguish about his own lost honor is heartbreaking - especially as he is the most honorable hobbit I have ever seen. But his fault is similar in a way to Pippin's - his pride makes him a perfectionist, and at this point he has not overcome the pain that keeps him aloof, so he tends to beat himself up too much. All the time however, I find myself wondering about Pippin. How will he react in the morning, having to face Tom and Ferdi having changed his mind too late? Ferdi will be honest about what he has done, when he finally arrives. There's a chance for mutual growth and forgiveness, but there's also plenty of opportunity for misunderstanding. You have sucked me in with another story, my dear. I do so enjoy your writing! Author Reply: You were right. Ferdi in the original draft was going to take the pony out for a last ride and decide to let him go. The revision has a great deal more drama. It will do you no good to look for Starfire in future stories. He's not there. I am still trying to figure out how, believably, to save him from being written out of this story. Suggestions are welcome. Thanks for the review! I am glad you are sucked in. I do so enjoy your reviews! | |
| Sulriel | Reviewed Chapter: 14 on 5/5/2004 |
| I just love Eglantine, she has that solid hobbit sense. -but what a cliffhange for the end. I'll be looking forward to the next chapter! Author Reply: Here's the next chapter! | |
| FantasyFan | Reviewed Chapter: 14 on 5/5/2004 |
| There's so much I love Pippin's interactions with his mother. ‘Peregrin Took,’ she said softly. Pippin jumped. ‘What did I do now?’ he asked, immediately reduced to a lad caught in the midst of mischief. He He! Moms are the same no matter who you are, eh? Don't think she isn't going to bring up slipping the escort, too. It doesn't matter if he's the Thain, his mom is going to call him on his actions. But done with love, and in confidence that he is a good Thain, and will be a great one. I love the part where she makes him think about his actions, and I especially love how whe thinks his father would be proud of him. Paladin did love his son, for all he couldn't understand him sometimes. Regi doesn't say he's heard the pony has been killed, only that the pen is empty. I'm holding out some hope that Tom's long ride is just to buy time, but it's a small hope. Has Ferdi gone too? Have they taken Starfire somewhere until the morning? Poor Tom. Poor Ferdi. Author Reply: The next chapter is up, and has been shaped somewhat by one of your reviews. I was originally going to have Ferdi... but wait. If you haven't read the chapter yet, I don't want to spoil it for you. I'll continue this comment after you've read the next chapter. Your comments about Eglantine and Paladin are spot on. Thanks for reviewing! | |
| FantasyFan | Reviewed Chapter: 13 on 5/4/2004 |
| Woah, things really happen in a hurry here! Tom may hope that Pip can be reasonable, but the way to find out is surely not to threaten the safety of his wife and child. It's interesting the way Pip is compared to his father in both this chapter and the one before it. Farmer Banks sees the steel, and Tom is hoping to see flexibility. They both may be surprised in the end. But I do feel sorry for Ferdi here. He's used his skills to stop the attack, staring down the horse. But in the mood he's already in after Pippin's disappearance at the wedding, he's likely to take the task of destroying the horse immediately on himself, beat himself up about his disappointment, and bury a bit more resentment towards the one who keeps making things like this happen. Not a good omen for their future relationship (good thing we know it works out, after many trials). Did you mean to have a stable-hobbit take Sock's reins from Pip and lead him away, and then take them again in the next paragraph? It reads a little funny, like an edit was missed - or perhaps I'm missing something else. Author Reply: Thanks for that catch! My editor usually gives chapters the once-over when I post them, but she's busy this week with Real Life, and I'm not so good at catching as she is! | |
| FantasyFan | Reviewed Chapter: 12 on 5/4/2004 |
| Ferdi is certainly berating himself for Pippin's perceived misdeed. He's harder on himself than anyone else would be, including Pip. There really isn't a great deal of trust yet, is there? I wonder what he'll think when he finds out exactly why Pip was gone, and that it wasn't some sort of lark. Eglantine's observations are straight to the point. She doesn't miss much, and I wish we'd see more of her strength. I also liked the thought of Farmer Banks that the son could be as hard as the father. It's a true observation, but he has no idea how hard Pippin really can be, nor does anyone else in the Shire, really, at this point. But they will learn, though they may never understand exactly how he got that way. Author Reply: Have I told you lately how helpful your reviews are? As a matter of fact, in one of your recent reviews (the one after this one, I think), a comment you made has caused me to revise an upcoming chapter slightly, to good effect, IMO. Anyhow, I do appreciate your taking the time to post your insights. In short: Thanks! | |