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| Fate by Laikwalâssê | 4 Review(s) |
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| Semmley | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 2/3/2013 |
| How powerfully you have drawn the emotions of Thranduil and his sons. Galadhion irrationally blames himself for not being there to save his mother, Saeron irrationally blames his brother for not being there to save his mother. Thranduil is despairing as he no longer feels his wife in his mind, is angry with her for leaving her escort and in his agony of mind is not thinking rationally. Then, as if matters could not get worse, little Legolas falls through the emotional cracks - so true that in every tragedy matters escalate until one believes how could things possibly get worse? I am sure the little Legolas will have hidden himself very securely. This is very well written, and I am looking forward to the next chapter. Thank you! Author Reply: Thank YOU, Semmley. I´m so glad you found the description of the emotions powerful and believable. I tried to solely focus on this matter. I tried to show how this tragedy has influenced every member of the royal family and I´m glad I succeeded. Hopefully you are right that little Legolas is safe - if not this would be the last straw for the King. Thank you so much for your encouraging review. Lai | |
| rikki | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 1/27/2013 |
| How very sad that the Thrandulion family is falling apart at this tragedy. You can tell that the elves are not thinking as noone has asked where the bodies of the Lothlorien elves are. Thranduil will have to make the effort to control himself so he can also bring his older sons under control. Lets hope that Legolas has made an escape and not been captured by the orcs. Author Reply: yes, Thranduil has to come around quickly or all will end in a much greater tragedy but he is not called strong and stubborn for nothing. If Lagolas was able to escape or not will soon be answered. Thank you so much for reviewing. I really appreciate it and I´m glad you are still reading. Lai | |
| Agape4Gondor | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 1/27/2013 |
| I so hated the thought of reading this chapter and knowing I would have to wait before I found out more... You write very well. When it is difficult to sit and read, then you know, as a writer, that you've hit the mark. I can understand Saeron's attack, but poor Galadhion was not to blame. Yet, how do we not blame ourselves even if conditions do not warrant it. How do we not look inside, overwhelmed with grief, and not believe we could have done more, should have been faster in arriving, would have saved her if only we were better. Oh dear. Such anguish that will encompass this family for centuries to come. And that Thranduil would have known that it was his wife who was the cause of it all. That is difficult to comprehend and yet he will blame her, too, for too long. I sorrowed for Thranduil and rejoiced at the Elves he had around him, who loved him and knew what to do for him. He will probably not remember much of these events, but I am glad he was well taken care of. I think Galadhion must be the most wounded of this family. He is doomed, it would seem, to deep scars. I do not blame Thranduil; he is not in his right mind, but I do so wish Galadhion had a friend to help him survive the blows he has been receiving, from his mother's death, to his brother's hatred, to his father's supposed contempt. Again, you have used words so well to convey such senses of horror, grief, and fear. Really well done! It's going to be very difficult to wait for the next chapter. Drat it all! Author Reply: you do not know what your words mean to me. I have always to struggle with the language but to read that my telling is hitting the mark is really a great compliment and it is making my day. Galadhion is really having a rough time. I will make it up for him later. This family will live with this anguish for a long time. Thranduil can count himself really happy for so many helping hands in the background. Elves like Thalan and Thornil are the real hereos even if unnoticed. Thank you so much for your encouraging words. The next chapter is already written...it only depends on my beta...*g*...many thanks to her wonderful work by the way. Lai | |
| Fiondil | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 1/27/2013 |
| A lot of emotions flying around, Lai. Saeron attacking Galadhion... understatandable but not wise. Everyone is in shock and no one is responding to others appropriately. I have a feeling Galadhion is going to do something foolish, thinking he has nothing to lose, having (apparently) lost everything already, especially the love and respect of his father and brother. Guilt is such a terrible thing to hold on to. Author Reply: yes, emotions are flaring high. Thranduil is angry, the brothers confused and no opportunity to release some of this energy. Thranduil has to come around quickly to prevent even more damage to his family. Galadhion is on the verge of doing something stupid and poor Legolas has to be found....but as always it has to get even darker befor it will get better. Thank you so much for reviewing, Fiondil. Lai | |