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| False Faces by Alisha B | 2 Review(s) |
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| Lady Wind | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 9/21/2003 |
| I've actually read this story before on fanfiction.net, but I saw your story on this site, so I thought I'd check it out. I love your improvements!! The conversation with Sauruman is great; it makes so much more sense to have him working hard at persuading Aragorn rather than just going straight to drugging him. I think that is a really good way to repost something, rather than just putting it all up verbatum. A few minor notes: throne was misspelt twice in the past chapter; and you may want to make it more clear that Aragorn is partially confused because of the power of Saruman's voice, not just by what he is saying. I like it though! : ) Author Reply: *cough*theyhaven'tdruggedhimyet*cough* whew, sorry, something in my throat there. :-D lol. Hey! Yes, I recognize you!! Thanks for giving this thing a second chance. I really wasn't happy with the first few chapters, and going back over them, I added about 3,000 words. I'm glad you can notice the difference. No no, we don't want Aragorn to be "thrown" anywhere, do we! lol! Thanks for pointing it out. It will be corrected when I post chapter 5! | |
| Elvenesse | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 9/21/2003 |
| It probably is a little AU, but that doesn’t bother me at all, since it's an interesting story. (As long as Aragorn isn't killed, because that wouldn't be an evil AU!) Oooh, naughty Saruman, kidnapping the Isildur's heir, Gandalf won't look kindly on that. I found this story on fanfiction, but I prefer reading it as you post on here, because the editing you're doing makes it read a lot better. | |