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False Faces  by Alisha B 4 Review(s)
Timmy2222Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 8/3/2004
Again a good chapter to read, but - though I might spoil the mood - there are some things I found strange:

Aragorn had before wandered the lands far and wide, and his knowledge of direction was excellent.

The Orcs were quite inattentive to let their captive sit on the horse and think him to be sleeping! A more powerful approach to his escape - f.e. he pushes the Orc rider off the horse - would have tightened the pace and add to the stregth of Aragorn to gain freedom on his own.

I suppose Orc archers not to be so accurate at aiming that they would have risked to shoot Aragorn's horse. They might as well have hit him. Another solution would have been to let the Orcs overtake Aragorn, or that the horse shies away from a certain obstacle and throws off the rider.

Anyway I enjoy to read it and I hope you won't consider my remarks unfriendly. You can give it back - if you want to - by reviewing my stories (g).

- T.

PattyReviewed Chapter: 3 on 11/2/2003
Exciting as all get-out! You're an excellent author, Alisha. I can't wait to see into whose presence Aragorn has been brought!

Brenda G.Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 9/13/2003
Well, golly gee! Where do you get off, just leaving your readers hanging like that?!? Boy, you've got my attention. I like your style of writing, the flow of action, the mystery. This "master" must want Aragorn in one piece for some reason we don't know. Makes me wonder is this mystery master is aware of Aragorn's true identity, as the heir to the throne of Gondor. Ah, well, guess we'll have to wait for you to post before we find that out. So, what are you waiting for? Post already!

This is a great start to what will undoubtedly become a terrific story. Keep up the good work! Your fans await...

BG

ElvenesseReviewed Chapter: 3 on 9/13/2003
Well, since it helps you update faster, I'm definitely posting. Very good and well written and I'm not left with the urge to skim any of it. Aragorn is nicely in character.

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