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| Trust to Fate by Kitt Otter | 13 Review(s) |
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| cutiebee | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 4/18/2008 |
| Goodwill and persistence are indeed vital in the strife for a victory. Author Reply: Thank you for commenting! The wonderful qualities of the Three Hunters; one cannot help but love them for it. -Kitt :) | |
| TithenFeredir | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 4/16/2008 |
| This is a neat story idea. I wish it was longer. There's a lot of story that could be covered. ~~But I'm not at all qualified to complain about a story being short since all of mine are short too. I like it that things did not go perfectly -- Aragorn and the hobbits ended up separated from Legolas and Gimli and the rescue was not easy for anyone-- but it did end well and as an AU vignette you fit it nicely into the original tale. Very good! ~TF Author Reply: To make this longer had been my original intention… but it never got anywhere, since I would basically have to rewrite the Two Towers. Thinking of that I lost all urge to write it; the only way to finish was to make it short and leave the rest to the readers’ imagination. I hoped the rescue was not too easy, and I guess it might have been harder, but I felt too sorry for them. : ) Thanks for reading and reviewing! -Kitt | |
| Larner | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 4/15/2008 |
| Aha! Aragorn was in time to aid as he could, and the Hobbits went on with their needful trip into Fangorn, and the Ents were roused. But we still know not why the ill will of Saruman was lifted from them--still a question that needs to be answered. Author Reply: Thanks for reading. As to breaking Saruman’s will… oh, many headaches… I hoped to imply Gandalf had something to do with it, but I thought maybe to leave it to the reader to decide between 1) a Vala poke, 2) I swung a shovel, 3) Sauron, or, well, so on. (Ah, I guess I am lazy!) I will think on this before I go to bed and add something in. Thanks again, Kitt | |
| Larner | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 4/15/2008 |
| Now, for Legolas to win free as he's allowed the Hobbits to do. Author Reply: Ah, yes, I hope so! -kitt | |
| TithenFeredir | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 4/14/2008 |
| Most of my specific comments have already been made by others. ~~Except for the typos. Either they were already corrected by the time I got here or the story had me so engaged that I didn't notice them. This is a very enjoyable story! ~TF Author Reply: Whew, I’m glad the typos seem to be satiated for the moment. Thanks! -Kitt :) | |
| ziggy | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 4/13/2008 |
| Ooh- this is good! There is so little good new stuff around that it was a real pleasure to read this. Thank you. I love the use of Gandalf's trick with the voices- always loved that bit in the Hobbit, and it works. If you have got Lamiel reviewing, I knew it'd be worth reading this and it was. Some really good details that make it real. No flowery purple prose thank goodness, just good action and enough details to imagine without overloading your reader. I am looking forward to the next bit- worried about Legolas of course, and where are Aragorn and Gimli? (It should be 'taut' by the way - a bowstring will be taut, meaning pulled tight, it's an adjective rather than the verb, taught as to teach- sorry to be pedantic but you did ask) Author Reply: I am so glad to be getting all this grammar feedback. I might have started growing a fat-head and believing I was a spelling-queen or something. (How could I get dressed in the morning?) And thank-you for being so kind in your reviewing. I am working on giving the Three Hunters a happy ending, umm, but it is messy at the moment... Thanks again. : ) Kitt | |
| Lamiel | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 4/13/2008 |
| This is a lovely story. I have often wondered what might have happened had the Three Hunters been successful in their race (that is my favorite part in the books), and now you are showing us in this delightful tale! I use the word "showing" deliberately, because that is what you are doing -- showing through the characters' words and actions how they feel, what they are thinking, planning, fearing, hoping -- you do not simply tell the reader, you show it all. That is the mark of a great writer. There are a couple of minor points for improvement, since you asked -- there is a typo in the second paragraph of chapter 2 in which it says "Morder-orc" rather than 'Mordor'. And when Merry knocks out the orc that was creeping up -- a great touch, by the way, and wonderful for our hobbit hero to have a moment to shine -- it looks like the sentence was re-written but not quite polished yet. "Merry’s his arm was raised" -- obviously you mean to say "Merry's arm was raised." But those are just little things. The scope, plot, characterization and writing itself is just wonderful. This is absolutely perfect for Tolkien's world (even as it is AU), and a pleasure to read. Author Reply: Thanks for so many kind comments! I am very glad that you to take the time to point out these things to me. I am speechless for so lovely a review… just thanks! :) -kitt | |
| Agape4Gondor | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 4/12/2008 |
| refused to exhort any more effort - I think you mean, refused to exert any more effort???? I like how you (in ch. 1) had the block that kept The Three Hunters from going full speed, released... And now you have the enemy kept back. Very nice juxtaposition of the 'norm.' I'm wondering who has caused this..... This is a very interesting tale and leaves me wondering how the Hobbits reach Fangorn and 'make' the Ents attack Saruman... Very interesting! Author Reply: Thank-you for all of your comments! I am glad you caught that error! All those questions I am trying to resolve for the conclusion. (I wonder over them myself). Thanks again. -Kitt | |
| Agape4Gondor | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 4/12/2008 |
| Very interesting beginning. I liked the 'bent' heads of Aragorn and Gimli. The desperate situation is well written. Can't even believe the Rohirrim will come now... Yikes! | |
| Larner | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 4/12/2008 |
| Aha! A bit of ventroliquism, then, and arguments as to how they will cook these captives? And will we learn what has broken the will of Saruman, I wonder? Interesting. Author Reply: Ventriloquism definitely! I am not yet sure what broke Saruman’s will… me and my hammer? :) Thanks! -kitt | |