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| Aleglain by Redheredh | 6 Review(s) |
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| BeeGee | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 12/25/2009 |
| Let me begin by saying that I'm one of those old-timers who, as a fan of Marnie's Celeborn, does remember the idea behind the story. I'm really enjoying not only this "continuation" but your notations and extra info. Your characterizations are excellent! Even though I did enjoy the movies of LOTR, the PJ depiction of Elves as skipping merrily through the clover tossing rose petals, or dancing and singing all day really don't compare with Tolkien's information. The underlying tension and political climate in your story are much closer to canon. Author Reply: That is wonderful to hear. You understand how a really good writer can illumniate a character and be a hero to this fan of a character who in the past was never duly appreciated. Thank you very much for mentioning the notes etc. :) I do work on those to get the right background, before taking off on my own. Because I am at heart a canon geek, who loves a good rationalization as much as a good gap-filler. As well, I like romance and an occassional hurt/comfort scenario, but reality is made up of other kinds of conflict besides emotional. There is ethical and cultural drama, besides spiritual. History contains it all, and to me that is how Tolkien looked at his stories. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I really do appreciate it. | |
| Kitt Otter | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 7/19/2008 |
| Hey! I’ve been wanting to read this for a while. No disappoint here: terribly exciting! Horribly traumatic! (Just what I need right now: ^_^). This line especially moved me: “The crew was baling, desperately baling.” No, Ossë cannot be trusted; I always thought that his deviousness would a fun to play with in a story. What research you need do to add the details! I have a mental block when it comes to ships. True feeling of the crew’s despair, loss of their elation, was in every line, I cannot begin to say how well done it was. Most impressive! Now this is quite a way to end a chapter… but I’m worried for all the crew. Wait, so Telpe is Celeborn? Then I need not worry for him dying, right? Nor his brother. I had not heard that Varda had moved the stars back for the sun. What is the reference to that? Things are crazy now, but I do hope to read more again soon. Kitt : ) Author Reply: I am glad the chapter did not disappoint. :) But goodness, who needs more drama in their life? ;) Hmm, I really do not think of Osse as devious, but rather a self-centered fellow. He is capable of good deeds as Ulmo commands, but he does serve his own interests while doing so. He is quite open about that, and someone who could easily become a bully. *g* As you know I try to build a solid stage on which to perform, so I do take the time to verify a story's background. But, in doing so, I am always hoping for inspiration to write the story. You are very kind with the compliments. Thank you. And yes, the brothers are indeed better known by other names when they live in Beleriand. A lot of people do not realize that Varda did not create all the stars. Some were "ancient and far", already existent. Besides creating brigher ones, "many other of the ancient stars she gathered together". She did this to provide better light for the awakening of the elves. Twilght, not night. She set the sun and moon to "traverse the lower regions of Ilmen". imho, Tilion's behavior as not being illogical or erratic or wild or arbitrary. He was placed first with purpose, not just because Telperion was eldest Tree. It was the Noldor that called him wayward, never the other kindreds who better understood his actions. I could go on by comparing Tilion and Arien to Celeborn and Galadriel. But, I...will...not... *resisting with visible effort* A review is always welcome and appreciated! Thank you again! | |
| Agape4Gondor | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 6/6/2008 |
| Very good chapter. I particularly loved the scene of the boat hitting the reef. I've lived on boats a long time ago, and the impact of anything against a boat is quite 'spectacular' - you caught that moment very, very well. Author Reply: Thank you! I am glad you like this chapter. | |
| perelleth | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 2/9/2008 |
| Wow! I do love the premise, and that old story that was never finished, was it? How was it called? ANd boy, do I love your writing? Without dialogue you set the pace of a thrilling adventure and the roller coaster and danger of the trip. Confident from ignorance and arrogant from pride I did love this sentence. I hthink it very muc describes anyone who sets sail form the comfortable familiar environment into an unknown he never had the chance of picturing in his wildest dreams. And then the greatness lies in how they adapt and change and learn... if htey survive. I'm thrilled by this new story! Author Reply: Why thank you! The previous tale is no longer available, which suits the perpetrators, since I will be making adjustments to past events. Not the plot, though. :) Oh, we really don't have to worry about the brothers too much. *g* We know Nimloth has yet to be even a twinkle in her father's eye. And a certain prince has yet to to be wedded to the wisest of elven-women. It is the rest of the crew that needs your prayers... Thank you so much for the review! Always much appreciated, and now I am off to read the new chapter of "Stewards". Woohoo! | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 2/4/2008 |
| My goodness. That is a voyage and three-quarters. I don't know how the Valar ever thought to keep the elves confined - they are far too adventurous for their own good. Especially those who don't know from first-hand experience what danger means. These brothers ... and their poor crew ... have certainly learned. Leaving the indomitable Nerwen behind might prove to be one of their more dangerous moves, too. Exciting stuff. Author Reply: Adventurous, yes. Youth is suppose to be like that, isn't it? :D But, too adventurous for their own good? Hmm, sounds rather like something a Vala would say... or a parent, for that matter. Actually, Nerwen informing the various parents of their true mission will prove helpful. And 'indomitable'? :) Isil exercised his seniority over her - and a defiant Telpe - rather well. I hope I can keep things exciting enough. Thanks, I appreciate the review! | |
| merimas | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/28/2008 |
| Glad to see this tale has been taken up again, as I felt we were all left hanging after a promising start for 'Unforsaken'. It's interesting to think of Celeborn as an Amanyar Teleri, and how events would have played out differently has this been the case. My one question, since you seem (unless I misread something) to have moved Celeborn and Galathil into Olwe's line, is how the story will play out now that Celeborn and Galadriel are first cousins. This was the main problem with Tolkien's conception of an Amanyar Celeborn: Elves didn't marry kin that close.Of course, this opens up a whole mess of possible (AU) storylines that I'm fairly sure have never been considered. I'm anxious to see were you go with this. Cheers,Merimas Author Reply: Ah, so you remember that story? :) Yes, it was left an unfinished tale, at that. Well, I have decided to try my hand at telling what might happened. Galathil did call his uncle Grandfather Olwe. You have not misread. However, you might not have read the Prologue where it is explained that Galadhon, Elmo's son and the brothers' father, was Olwe's foster-son. Naturally, they see the king more as a grandfather. This was a major plot point in the past story, and I have not changed it - or any other. Thank you for your question! I am sure you are not the only reader who wanted that cleared up a bit. And thank you very much for reading and reviewing! | |