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A Yearling Shoot  by Peredhil lover 5 Review(s)
LarnerReviewed Chapter: 4 on 5/28/2009
It would appear Elladan has become aware of Aragorn's fascination and has come to test his mettle. And now he must face his father's concerns as well? Am glad he was able to pull that last stroke! And trust him to find that slight weakness! He has not become the greatest of warriors among men for nothing!

Author Reply: Thank you for commenting, Larner! Yes, it most certainly was a big point in this chapter to show Aragorn’s abilities and his skill with a blade. Too bad, though, that now he has to go face is foster father, and those problems can’t be fixed with a blade! :)

JancyReviewed Chapter: 4 on 4/16/2009
Hello,

great writing! I mean, you have a beautiful touch in writing. I'm sad to see this end, but I look forward to reading more stories from you.

Author Reply: Thanks so much for reviewing, and for your kind words about my writing!

MarethielReviewed Chapter: 4 on 4/14/2009
Absolutely brilliant. You write with great power, and I really like your take on the Perehil twins. While I shamefully admit there are times I get a giggle out of the Weasley-esque takes I read on them, your Elladan and Elrohir get under my skin and command a life of their own.

Thank you so much for updating. I will look forward to "Into the Wild."

~Marethiel

Author Reply: Wow, thanks so much for the compliments. I really appreciate it! Obviously, I love the sons of Elrond, and I’m really starting to feel like I know them very well.

Thanks again,

peredhil lover

Jay of LasgalenReviewed Chapter: 4 on 4/14/2009
I do feel you ended this too abruptly. I'd have liked to see your take on the talk with Elrond, and there needs to be some resolution with Elladan. That said, this chapter was great and the tension in the fight scene with Elladan amazing!

I'd like to see the sequel wherever you post it. Please let me know.


Jay


Author Reply: Jay, it is so nice to hear from you! :)

I agree with you completely—the story ends too abruptly and under different circumstances I would not have chosen to write it this way. But, as I said, the next story will take a sudden, traumatic and unexpected turn (which I know from personal experience can, unfortunately, happen), and so I thought it best to begin the next chapter as a new story with a higher rating and all the appropriate warnings. However, the first chapter of the next story will flow directly from this, as if it was still part of the same story really. We will start by getting a look at Elrond’s thoughts directly after his conversation with Aragorn, and while I will not write about the conversation itself, we will get glimpses of what took place through Elrond’s reflections on it.

Of course, you are very right about needing some resolution with Elladan. But my Elladan has had outstanding issues for a very long time, and that won’t change anytime soon. Poor guy, I’ve grown to love him dearly, but he is a very burdened and conflicted soul. And Elladan and Aragorn have had their unresolved issues brewing since my very first story. Though it may still be a while yet in coming, I promise you that we will get that resolution between the two of them, and I hope, in the end, that the reader will find it most satisfying.

Thanks so much for your kind words and for taking the time to review. I appreciate it. I can email you to know when the first chapter of the next story has been posted if you’d like, but it may be a while at the rate I get things written!

Thanks again,

peredhil lover

LaikwalâssêReviewed Chapter: 4 on 4/14/2009
glad to see an update from you. I enjoyed the fighting scene very much, albeit it was most intense and a bit frightening. What has gotten into Elladan and why is Elrond so angry? Poor Aragorn. I´m looking forward to your other stories. Thank you Lai.

Author Reply: Hi Lai,

I responded to your email, and hopefully I’ve adequately addressed your concerns. The reactions to this chapter have been quite varied, and I don’t expect everyone to be entirely comfortable with it. I think my writing will continue to challenge readers to “think outside the box” a bit, and I suppose I’m asking from them a little faith in my abilities as a writer and a storyteller.

Thanks for reviewing, Lai. I’m glad to know you enjoyed the fight scene, and yes, it was fully intended to be intense. The next story will begin with Elrond’s thoughts after his conversation with Aragorn, so we should get a good look at what’s going on in his mind. And as for Elladan, keep reading, and I hope it will all be made clear in time.

Thanks again,

peredhil lover

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