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Allee's Odds and Ends  by Allee 5 Review(s)
Agape4GondorReviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/30/2007
I love how you began this - almost as if the work was mundane and boring - when it was beyond painful. I don't know how you did it, but the moment was horrid! Especially this line - 'boys too young for such work but who had been recruited out of necessity, nonetheless.'

I think it is revealed in this statement - 'they would have been preferable to the overwhelming stillness of death' - there was an eeriness about the whole scene AND their actions.

As I finished it - and there was the sign of hope - I was too reminded of other RW scenes where hope did not come.

Yikes - sorry - but you write eeriness well.


Author Reply: Hi Agape,

Thanks for the feedback. I'm glad the beginning came off as mundane. I wanted to get across that feeling of numbness and shock that comes when things are too horrific for emotion to be allowed to surface.

LOL--Do I really write eeriness well? I take that as a compliment! *g*

Thanks again,

Allee

Lady BluejayReviewed Chapter: 1 on 7/10/2007
Gruesome but good! LBJ

Author Reply: Thanks! I'm not usually a gruesome writer, but this one sure was. But I always throw in that hopeful ending.

Allee

NessaReviewed Chapter: 1 on 7/10/2007
I love this one. I enjoyed the last one too. Looks like they could become chapters to a longer story.

Author Reply: Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it (and the previous one). When I wrote the first one, Green No Longer, I had absolutely no intention of writing a sequel . . . but here it is nonetheless. So although I don't forsee their becoming chapters in a longer story, who knows?

Allee

harrowcatReviewed Chapter: 1 on 7/10/2007
Wow - what a fantastic piece of writing Allee. Glad it finishes on a hopeful note.

Author Reply: Thanks so much. I tend to finish everything on a hopeful note, no matter how dismal the piece may be overall. It's not intentional, believe it or not; I guess I'm just a sucker for hopeful endings!

Allee

LarnerReviewed Chapter: 1 on 7/10/2007
The small signs of hope are needed, and Aragorn is the healing King as well as the defending and victorious King.

Author Reply: Sometimes, the small signs of hope are all that are to be had, and I certainly think that Aragorn must have been on the lookout for them. Given the circumstances, it would have been too easy to succumb to despair without a willingness to seek out those little signs of hope and life. And the healing King is one of my favorite aspects of Aragorn.

Allee

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