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Doomed to Live  by fliewatuet 7 Review(s)
Reviewed Chapter: 9 on 10/5/2006
Hi. I really enjoy your story. It's nice how you parallel the book. Did notice one typo. In the last sentence of the fifth paragraph from the bottom, you typed "waver" instead of "wafer".

Author Reply: Thanks for catching that typo. And thanks for taking the time to review :-)

Doomed to Live is undergoing some major rewriting at the moment, so I'll fix it when I post the revised version.

Reviewed Chapter: 9 on 1/22/2005
More, please; and soon!

Author Reply: I am working on it :-)

Timmy2222Reviewed Chapter: 9 on 11/13/2004
Really, a wonderful chapter. I could feel the tension rise the moment Aragorn felt himself pressed betwen two enemies... and not knowing the outcome. I'm glad you don't make a superman out of the ranger.

Merry and Pippin are enjoyable too, and I hope they will escape. It does not look like Aragorn will after all. Or maybe the Riders from Rohan appear at last? They announced themselves for quite a long time!

Keep on the good work!

- T.



Author Reply: Thanks for the review! I always love to hear that people agree with my version of Aragorn. Yes, he is not superman, though he has some superhuman skills. But he is very determined and has much experience in getting off his butt even if the whole world is standing up against him.

grumpyReviewed Chapter: 9 on 11/13/2004
Great chapter, I like how you have written all the characters. I liked how in the middle of their escape they almost a discussion about knives. Glad they got away, well hopefully the hobbits did. Things did not look good for Strider.

Author Reply: Thanks for the praise. I am glad that you like the interlude with the knife. Pippin decided to be just Pippin in this scene. And I agree, things don't look good for Strider. But saying more would give away too much, and I love leaving my readers dangling off cliff-faces *eg*

fliewatuet

Golden ElfReviewed Chapter: 9 on 11/12/2004
I'm really enjoying this story. It has great description of the trials of everyone, not just our favorite Ranger and Elf. You are doing an amazing job projecting their pain and burning desire to save the hobbits.

I can't wait for the next installment. Thanks for such a great read!

Author Reply: Thanks for the lovely review, Golden Elf. I hope I'll get another chapter up before christmas, but I won't make any promises. Real Life can be a hazzle at times.

fliewatuet

AMReviewed Chapter: 9 on 11/12/2004
Still doing happy dance!
Read this chapter twice as I am absolutely enthralled by your writing.

Only found two things to improve:
* " ... numbed his entire right side and robbed his breath, and as his world tilted and began to spin. He did not notice that Merry severed the bonds about his legs ... " -> " ... numbed his entire right side and robbed his breath. As his world tilted and began to spin he did not notice that Merry severed the bonds about his legs ... "
* " ... for he did not take care to conceal his tracks, on the contrary. He made sure to leave footprints ... " -> " ... for he did not take care to conceal his tracks. On the contrary he made sure to leave footprints ... "

Please update soon. If you don't, my fingers will give out and I'll plummet from this cliffie.


Author Reply: Hi, AM. Thanks for the lovely review, and the suggestions.

Hmm ... (visualises AM hanging on the side of a cliff) ... I think I should try to hurry up a bit ... or do you think I could get away with simply admitting to being EVIL and leave it at that? *ducks flying objects*

Hang on,

fliewatuet (cackling manically)

meckinockReviewed Chapter: 9 on 11/12/2004
I'm so glad you updated. I really love your characterizations. Aragorn is so stalwart and determined, and the hobbits are so brave. I really like how the orcs each have their own individual motivations and personalities and conflicts. Orcs can so easily turn into one-dimensional all-purpose baddies, but yours really come to life. I hope you update again very soon. I wish I didn't have to wait two chapters to find out what happened to Aragorn or how he, Merry, and Pippin fare in the upcoming battle.

Author Reply: Thanks, for the lovely review, meckinock. I am glad that you like my Orcs. Not that I intended to write that much about them in the first place, but Tolkien made it quite clear that they do have their own agenda and are not just some nameless evil minions, so I tried to stick to that. And I must admit that I often spend more time pondering about the motivation of the bad guys than the motivation of the good guys ;-)

And I, too, hope to update very soon, but I fear RL has other plans for me ...


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