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Night On A Bare Mountain  by Jay of Lasgalen 9 Review(s)
WinterwitchReviewed Chapter: 6 on 2/23/2013
This is a great story and was a very entertaining read. I love well-done hurt/comfort, and your story has all the parts for it, working together splendidly. Great characterisations and details, too. Thank you for this story!

BlueEyedElfReviewed Chapter: 6 on 5/6/2008
Lazy me. I forgot to review this chapter.

I enjoyed the fitting tribute to Mornaur. I was hoping they wouldn't just leave him there.

I just about cried at Elrohir's confession of his feelings just before he made the decision to go into a trance. The fact that he was more worried about Elladan than about himself was really sweet.

I wonder if Elrond and Celebrian were able to feel anything when Elrohir fell. It would be interesting to know their feelings on the matter.

Finally, I hope Taniquel appreciates the fact that Elrohir almost got himself killed just to visit her. I don't think the two of them realize the magnitude of what is going on between them. I wonder which one of them will wise up first? I also wonder if she felt anything when he fell. If she did, I would think that would certainly indicate something deeper between them.

BodkinReviewed Chapter: 6 on 3/31/2008
Glorfindel - a simple warrior. Yeah, right! I'm with Elladan there. But having a super-parental figure taking charge, tapping his nose and sorting out the problems must have been such a relief.

And once the twins start abusing each other - you just know things are getting back to normal. Thank goodness.



Author Reply: 'Yeah, right!' was Elladan's reaction as well, but I couldn't phrase it quite like that :>) And Glorfindel - I could see him tapping his nose so clearly, but it seemed such an un-elvish thing to do. I had to explain that somehow.

It must be a relief for all concerned when the twins start insulting each other, especially Elladan and Elrohir themselves.

It's good to see you back, Bodkin. You must have been busy.


Jay

pipinheart. Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 2/18/2008
A nice ending. Elrohir and Elladan must only be able to mindspeak in desperate situations. Good thing for Elrohir. Glorfindel sure has good idead's, a bridge. You feel Elrohir's loss on his horse, as the smoke goes up in flame.

A great read..

Author Reply: I decided there had to be a desperate need for the mindspeak to work this time, as the twins have never been able to use it in other tales. It's as well it worked this time!


Agape4GondorReviewed Chapter: 6 on 2/6/2008
I stated after chapter 1 that this was a riveting story and the rest did not disappoint. I missed a few chapters and was very glad to find the final one written and so, since it had been awhile, I printed the entire tale out and re-read it and then finished it. Well worth while! Great tale. Great tension. Great characterizations. Great ending.

Thanks for sharing this, Jay, it was great... Did I already say that? LOL - Truly was a taut, tense, terse read!

Author Reply: Great! :>)

I'm glad you enjoyed it, particularly the characterisations. I love these characters, and work hard to make them seem real and believable. Thanks for reviewing!


Jay

EstelielReviewed Chapter: 6 on 2/5/2008
This is such a beautiful story, I am sad to see it coming to an end. But then again so glad that they are going home and that they're all safe. I am very, very fond of seeing Glorfindel in your tales! I love his interactions with the twins.

Actually... (and I say so with a deep blush on my face) ...in my own tales I have Glorfindel naming the twins 'elfling' too, something I just did and never really knew how I had come up with it. I just knew that I loved it very much. But now that I am reading your stories again (read them early last year, too), I begin to believe that it might have stuck and stayed in my mind from your work.

So all credit to you Jay!

This has been a moving story, funny, exciting, scary, sad, filled with such warm love and care and nurturing. I just can't get enough of your tales! I hope that you will write another one soon!!

Esteliel

p.s.: I am especially fond of "Never forget it, elfling." That just brought the widest grin to my face!!

Author Reply: In a way I'm sorry to see this end too, but at least it means I've only one story still in process.

I'm finding Glorfindel tends to push his way into stories where I don't intend him to be! I can't recall when he began calling the twins 'elflings', but I know I didn't start it. Was it Nilmandra? In any case, he is very fond of the twins, and regards them as the sons he never had.

Thank you for reviewing, and I'm glad you enjoyed the story!


Jay

KittyReviewed Chapter: 6 on 2/5/2008
You finished this! :-)

“Stop fussing, El! I can manage – can’t I, Nindamos?”
Nindamos sighed. “If you say so.”
*grin* Poor Nindamos has not the slightest chance against a stubborn peredhil, hasn’t he?

Anyway, I was glad to see Elrohir up and on the way to recovery, and even more important, not alone and helpless any longer.

Interesting that the mindspeaking didn’t work this time, while it worked well and over such a great distance before. It seems there has truly to be a dire need for them to manage it.

The epilogue left me tearing up a bit, but it was beautiful. I can understand so *very* well that Elrohir loved Mornaur so much that he couldn’t bear the thought to leave his horse to the wolves and vultures. You gave the poor beast a dignified end.

Thanks for another lovely story!

Author Reply: Thank you for reviewing, and for picking out the parts you liked. Poor Nindamos is always a little wary around Elrohir (for reasons that go a long way back!)

As I've never written the twins as being able to mindspeak at any other time, this had to be a one-off occurance, driven by desperate need. Most of the time they don't need to mindspeak; they know each other so well they just understand the other's moods.

Finally, I'm glad you liked Mornaur's farewell. I just couldn't leave him on the bare mountain!


Jay

daw the minstrelReviewed Chapter: 6 on 2/5/2008
I love the relationship the twins have with Glorfindel. They're lucky to have him and his affection for them shines through, though he clearly is putting up with no nonsense.

A good ending, Jay.

Author Reply: I've always written Glorfindel as a friend and confidante to the twins, and a strict, stern captain when they were young warriors. There's a lot of love and respect on both sides.


CesReviewed Chapter: 6 on 2/5/2008
A teasing mention of Taniquel!

I loved the ending, knowing that Elrohir gave his final respects to Mornaur.

Lovely story!

Ces

Author Reply: I must write more with Elrohir and Taniquel soon - she's my favourite OC! I'm glad you liked the ending with Mornaur - I knew I couldn't just leave him there, and this seemed a fitting farewell.

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