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Missing  by TopazTook 4 Review(s)
LarnerReviewed Chapter: 5 on 4/25/2007
Swaying dark? Someone has found him, then, and is carrying him away, perhaps in a wagon or cart? Very interesting!

Author Reply: Hmm, good guesses. We shall see. :)

Grey WondererReviewed Chapter: 5 on 4/24/2007
First I have to thank you for this line:

(he whipped the blankets back to reveal a large stuffed sheep,) I laughed out loud in the middle of all of the distress and the search when I realized that a sheep had slipped into the lovely story.

Poor Pippin! I do hope he is found soon. I also hope Merry isn't feeling too guilty. He was trying to help Frodo and he certainly has his hands full there. I liked the way you aluded to the RING in this part with Frodo glancing over at his trousers as he mentioned how Bilbo had never married. Nicely done as the RING just begins to take hold.


Author Reply: Those Sheep: they’re wily.

Thanks for noticiing the Ring connection -- there are begining to be some foreshadowings of darkness, even in the Shire. Plus, that has a lot to do with the title of this chapter.

I don’t think Merry is going to take this lightly: he feels responsible for *both* cousins.

DreamflowerReviewed Chapter: 5 on 4/24/2007
Oh dear! Where *is* poor hurt little Pippin? Everyone's frantic now--you showed that so well.

I did like the interplay between Frodo and Merry at the beginning. I loved that Merry needed reassurance that Frodo *did* have fun after all. But he should not have pushed things.

And the way Merry was at first merely puzzled at Pippin's absence from his bed was so realistic--we never do think a child's *really* missing, do we? We always assume they are with someone else...

Author Reply: Thank you; yes, I do think Merry needs to hear reassurance (a la Sally Field -- you liked it? you really liked it?). And it would have just seemed so “off” after a pleasant hobbit party to think that something could really go wrong and Pippin be missing.

Garnet TookReviewed Chapter: 5 on 4/24/2007
For some reason, I thought I'd been reviewing this story. I've been reading, but I haven't left a review.

This is really good. I know Merry would be quick to blame himself for Pippin's disapearance. He wasn't being as attentive to him as usual, but he was rightfully concerned with Frodo.

Hope you update soon.

Author Reply: Thankyou. Yes, Merry is feeling responsible for both Pippin and Frodo here -- although I think there’s a little more guilt associated with his feelings for Pippin, since he is younger.

I hope I can update soon, too. We shall have to see how my life goes.

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