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Changing the Past  by Misty 3 Review(s)
Calenlass GreenleafReviewed Chapter: 1 on 6/10/2006
Well written---I find it difficult sometimes to write AU.
Hope you update soon---I am enjoying the story immensely.

FireReviewed Chapter: 1 on 6/9/2006
This is a very nice piece of work. I love how you put what we know and your idea's together. The scene with Glorfindel in the library was funny, now how could they forget the first rule: check your suroundings.

I love this: "Elrohir closed his eyes in dismay as he recognized the voice. He opened his eyes again and shifted his glance toward his brother. "I don't suppose you checked to be sure the room was empty before you pushed me in here?" Elladan's expression was a bit sheepish. "I didn't think to check."

You also described the twins "new" fighting style Glorfindel watched very well:
"His breath caught in his throat as he caught sight of the twins. They stood back to back and moved as if they were one being, each knowing where the other was and exactly what move he would make. They were a glorious, and yet horrible sight to see. Their faces were fearsome to behold, as they cut down every orc who ventured too close. The rage and pain in their faces and movements stood out clearly to distinguish them from the elves he knew. Glorfindel had trained them as young elves, and he had seen them in battle on numerous patrols, but he had never seen them like this. Their story of Dehlfalhen and Glamferaen rang true in his head at this moment."

Keep up the good work and keep the updates coming. :)

Author Reply: I did certainly enjoy writing the scenes with Glorfindel. I have a feeling he's going to be an integral part of the story. And the twins definitely should have checked the room before they started talking. ;-)

I'm certainly glad you're enjoying this, and I do appreciate the reviews. Next chapter will be up next week.


Jay of LasgalenReviewed Chapter: 1 on 6/9/2006
Hmm. The twins have more-or-less successfully deluded everyone into thinking there's nothing odd, and have saved Celebrķan. The patrol has killed the orcs, and no-one is hurt. So why do I feel that something ominous is looming? What effect will changing the past have?

Without the need to become deadly orc-killers, the twins will be different. Perhaps not the seasoned warriors Aragorn needs. Perhaps orcs will multiply more than before.

Hmm ... I'm glad I've never tried to write a changing-the-past story!


Jay

Author Reply: Well, things cannot help but develop differently with the twins not being the 'deadly orc-killers' that they were the first time around. I'm still working out a lot of the details for the changes that will happen. I think that's the trickiest part of all this, figuring out how one change will affect everything else. As for something ominous...well, we've all been warned about changing the past, right? ;-)




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