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Consequences of a Fall  by Dreamflower 10 Review(s)
Indigo BuntingReviewed Chapter: 11 on 7/13/2006
Merry mentioned Ferumbras in this chapter, which reminded me of something I wanted to say about him. Youíve left his character rather ambiguous for the time being, and Iím curious to see how heíll turn out. Itís hard to tell how important Pearlís reputation is to him. I think heís probably telling the truth when he says that he doesnít think sheís blameworthy, but I feel like he ought to be doing more for her. I thought, as some of the characters did, that Pearl skipping the feast would make it look as if she had a guilty conscience, but I hope that Reggie has been able to make a dent in that rumor. You say that nearly all of your hobbits are inherently good people, so Iím hoping for good things from Ferumbras.

Really it was pleasanter here, and the company was undeniably superior. This is a sweet line. You write the affection among the members of Pippinís family very well indeed. Youíll make me a hobbit fan yet! Oh, and I hope that Begonia finds some happiness by the end of the story. She sounds very lonely, the poor thing.

P.S. Forgot to italicize The Lord of the Rings in my last review. Gah! It bugs me when I do things like that.

Author Reply: Yes, well my Ferumbras *is* ambiguous. He's not wicked, like Hyacinth, or my other evil OCs, the Bankses, but he *is* weak and a bit selfish. After a lifetime of being squashed by his mother, he wants some peace and quiet. He doesn't wish Pearl ill--he likes her, and he does think her blameless, but it's far less work for him to delegate "all that stuff" to Reggie. And Ferumbras also has poor people skills--well, look at his mother, I'm sure she didn't really teach him anything about how to be nice, so he just kind of flails around, and often reads people wrong. You are quite right about the feast--but he is just seeing it from the shallow perspective of "out of sight, out of mind". A totally wrong way to handle this.

I like to show affectionate families. I really dislike fic in which one or both of either Pippin's or Merry's parents are unkind or even cruel. That's simply *not* hobbity, sorry. I hope that you *will* be a hobbit fan--so far you've got the characters of our four lads down pat in your own story--especially Sam and Merry--and I think you could easily do justice to other hobbits as well!

I hope you will like how things go for Begonia!

And don't worry--I don't usually even write the title out, I almost always abbreviate, LOL!

PeriantariReviewed Chapter: 11 on 5/18/2006
awww the Pippin and Pearl scenes were written so well-i love portrayials of good hobbit sibling relationships. :) and yummy mushrooms for dinner!

Author Reply: We don't often get to see scenes of those two together. In such a large and busy family, with so much of an age gap, they probably did not have a lot of one-on-one time. I thought it would be nice to give them some.

PIppinfan1988Reviewed Chapter: 11 on 5/13/2006
I always enjoy scenes between Pippin and Pearl, and this one was no exception. The love between those two is very evident. :-)

I see Hyacinth is up to her usual no-good. LOL, and the bit with the trifle is going to be so good--not just *deliciously* good. ;-)

Pippinfan

Author Reply: I don't often get the chance to write Pippin and Pearl scenes, but I just could not resist this one--the oldest and the youngest together. They do love one another very much.

Hyacinth is seldom up to anything good at all.

BodkinReviewed Chapter: 11 on 5/4/2006
Petty-minded and spiteful, that Hyacinth. A desert island with Ted Sandyman. That'd suit the pair of them. Throw in a troll for good measure - or a polar bear - and you might have something.

I think Pearl and Pippin have got the better part of the deal there. If only it weren't for the acid-drop. Merry ought to watch it, though. I suppose he's safer in a way. Hyacinth doesn't really want anything from him.

The medicine taking magic still works. Pippin's family will work that out fairly soon, I should think, although the details might remain secret.

Author Reply: Yes, but would that be fair to the troll or the polar bear? ;-)

Pearl and Pippin managed to have a nice evening together, and I'm sure that was a good thing. With the years between them, and so many other family members, I would be surprised if they get to have a lot of one-on-one time together. This was rather a treat for them in a way, if only Pippin felt a bit better.

No, she doesn't want anything from Merry, though a chance to put a flea in his ear about Amethyst would suit her just fine--she is too cowardly, however to want to do it under the noses of his protectors.

Pippin made a promise--and that is something he takes seriously, as we know. He learned about keeping promises from those who keep promises to him.

LarnerReviewed Chapter: 11 on 5/3/2006
The continued bemusement with how well Pippin now accepts his medicine is wonderful--and Frodo has NO intentions of spilling the beans, has he?

Hyacinth deciding to do her cuttings from beside the door sounds just like her, nasty git that she is. Am glad Pearl chose to stay with her brother--a valid reason indeed, and FAR more pleasant than being stared at by all and sundry.

Read this yesterday, but couldn't respond yesterday. Have I told you I hate computers? But I hate those who write worms, trojans, and viruses even more. They've been driving me crazy for days!



Author Reply: No, Frodo and Merry do not intend to inform Pippin's parents of just how ill he had been. They are both very glad Pippin's learned that lesson, but it was a fright they don't much like to think about.

"Nasy git". My goodness, Hyacinth is getting called all sorts of appropriate names!!

Hyacinth is just being petty now that her teeth are pulled. She will rue it sooner or later.

Pippin's company was a good deal more pleasant, I should think!

Oh, I know! I am living in dread of a virus right now, as my Norton has expired and it will be a couple of weeks before I can afford to renew it. 8-(
Hope all your computer woes are soon over!

Baggins BabeReviewed Chapter: 11 on 5/3/2006
What a lovely chapter! So sweet to see Pippin and Pearl together and to see the affection between them, and between Merry and his father and Merry and Frodo. Nice to see Frodo in an impish mood.

Cam't wait to see Hyacinth get her come-uppance. I was very tickled to learn that she had been on the receiving end of one of Frodo's icy glares. :-))




Author Reply: I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

Frodo in an impish mood is always fun.

Well, of course Hyacinth has a way to go before come-uppance time...

AndreaReviewed Chapter: 11 on 5/3/2006
Merry looked at his cousinís blue eyes, twinkling with mischief. "But it would be so satisfying to do just that."

"True. But as you canít do it to *everyone* who deserves it, it would be unfair to favor only one person so."


LOL! Now, that I call a persuasive argument!

I loved the sweet scene between Pippin and Pearl.
And I'm not the least bit surprised that Hyacinth received one of Frodo's famous icy glares. He should give her another, just in case ;-)


Author Reply: *grin* Well, Merry bought it, for a while, anyway, LOL!

I'm glad you thought Pippin and Pearl were sweet together. I think he really enjoyed having her full attention for a little while.

Yes, she deserves as many glares as possible!

GamgeeFestReviewed Chapter: 11 on 5/2/2006
So, Hyacinth is afraid of Frodo's icy glare too? There doesn't seem to be anyone who comes away from that look unscathed. :) A sweet little moment between Pippin and Pearl. Pip's such a good little brother, it's clear he adores his sisters. I enjoyed the moment between Merry and Sara too. I'm glad Sara didn't try to sugarcoat it and admitted that everyone is, indeed, being two-faced about Lalia's death.

Author Reply: I think Frodo had The Look down to perfection, LOL! *I* wouldn't want to be on the receiving end of it!

I enjoyed Pippin and Pearl. I don't often get to write moments just between Pippin and one of his sisters like that. Yes, he does adore them, just as they adore him.

Saradoc is a wise hobbit, clear-sighted and practical. He knows very well that platitudes about not speaking ill of the dead will not cut any ice with his very perceptive and intelligent son. But he also was able to point out the sound reasons for tact and diplomacy.

Queen GaladrielReviewed Chapter: 11 on 5/2/2006
Awww, what a sweet chapter! I like Merry's reluctance to admit he doesn't much care for the Thain-though I have to agree he seems a bit weak to me-and Frodo's way of calming Merry. His mischievous streak is so rarely seen that it's a treat when it comes out. I was actually fooled, the first time I read Fellowship, when he was pretending to complain about his pack being too heavy. :)

And Pearl is such a wonderful sister! But something tells me that the more time passes, the harder it's going to be to keep Pippin still and in bed.

Poor Begonia, I wonder what will become of her. It's good that *she* knows Pearl isn't responsible, though. My guess is that the brake on the chair broke, and really that was Lalia's own fault for acting like a child and getting into a temper.

That Hyacinth is just determined to be as nasty as she possibly can, and to get into as much trouble as she can, isn't she? Even her punishment hasn't quelled her! She might try to play innocent when it's discovered she ruined the garden, but it won't work, I guarantee.
God bless,
Galadriel

Author Reply: You are quite right: Ferumbras is weak--he is not a bad hobbit, but he was never strong enough to stand up to his mother and he's learned to mostly take the easy way out, and to let other people do the hard work.

I like to show Frodo's mischievous side from time to time, as well as his sense of humor.

Pearl's a good sister, indeed. And you are quite right about Pippin--he is going to be very hard to keep down now that he's not feeling quite so bad.

Hyacinth remains just as selfish and spiteful as she has ever been.

Pearl TookReviewed Chapter: 11 on 5/2/2006
I love Merry still wanting to do something to show his feelings towards those who keep saying things against his cousin, and I love Frodo's advice to him :)

Hyacinth is a b . . . .

I adore Pippin telling Pearl he loves her when he says goodnight, and her returning the sentiment :)

Wonderful :) :)

Author Reply: Well, Merry is Merry, and he's not one to let insults to his loved ones pass; but Frodo's advice is sound, and the humor is enough to distract Merry.

Yes. Well. Yes.

Pippin and his sisters are very fond of one another. I don't care much for fics in which one or more of his sisters dislike him, or are estranged from him. I think that he was probably the adored baby of the family, and he adored them right back.

Of course, it didn't stop him from teasing them and playing jokes sometimes...

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