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A Midsummer Night's Dream  by Jay of Lasgalen 15 Review(s)
MirkwoodmaidenReviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/7/2006
An interest-provoking beginning. I'm always love reading stories about the Twins. They always seem to write themselves!! I shall continue reading!

Author Reply: Thank you - I hope you enjoy the rest of the tale as well. I love the twins too, which is why they feature in so many of my stories.

LindeleaReviewed Chapter: 1 on 2/1/2006
Whoa! Thanks for sending me the link.

It's nearly midnight and I'm way overdue for sleep, but I had to sneak a peek.

I can scarcely tear myself away, but my eyes are closing--and not due to your excellent story.

Great buildup of tension and suspense.

Looking forward to more.

Author Reply: Well, as I already had the stable fire planned, that additional detail was perfectly timed. Thank you! I'm glad you liked it.

I'm looking forward to the next part of Bill's story. Go to bed and get some sleep, so you'll be refreshed for the next bout of writing!

pipinheartReviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/21/2006
Nice work... Poor Elladan... Those visions he has at times can be burdens. Never knowing what will happen and how to prevent it...

Please continue...

Author Reply: Yes, poor Elladan. Elrohir doesn't envy him these visions, though he does wish he could do something to help his brother.

Knowing that something will happen, but not what or when, is hard for them both.

LarnerReviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/17/2006
Having had some prescient dreams myself in my life, I know how the vagueness chafes.

Author Reply: That must be scary, especially when you realise you were right. It's the not knowing that bothers Elladan most.

daw the minstrelReviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/10/2006
I can't imagine what it would be like to have the gift of foresight but have it be so vague that it was usually useless. I like the way you've followed up on this from other stories. So I'm assuming the stable master is going to be a sticking point. And lightning starts the fire?

Author Reply: Most of the time Elladan knows that *something* will happen - but he can never be sure what, or when. The visions he had of Elrohir during The Search only made sense after the event, and in Along Came A Spider he didn't foresee that Elrohir would be affected at all. Sometimes, though, he gets it right ...

You're right, Aradan won't take kindly to Elrohir's suggestions about the lanterns. But perhaps it will be irrelevant?

French PonyReviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/9/2006
Elladan's sudden fits of visions sounds like it must be the (more useful) Elf version of epilepsy. Only he has dreams instead of seizures. And he has the horrible problem of fortunetellers -- getting just little dribs and drabs of events, not anything specific. Just enough to scare him. . . and, fortunately, put him on guard.

Author Reply: Poor Elladan. Yes, these visions come on him without warning, and there's little he can do about them.

Fortunately, he's been right enough times to know that there's truth in what he sees, even if he doesn't know all the details. Let's hope that Elrohir is on his guard as well.

NilmandraReviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/9/2006
Nice use of the visions and the lack of information that they convey - a scene, but no sense of timing and no way of knowing if it would happen at all. Why do I think that Elrohir might be the one in danger?

Author Reply: Why do I think that Elrohir might be the one in danger? Why? Because this is me, probably! Where would my stories be without plenty of twin angst?

Let's just hope that he listened to Elladan's warnings. He trusts his brother, even if he doesn't share or understand the visions.

SilvertreeReviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/9/2006
Wow, Lasgalen! This is turning out pretty good! When's the next chapter?

Author Reply: Thank you! The next chapter will be along as soon as I get chance to write it - at the moment it exists only in my mind. Soon, I promise.


Jay

DotReviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/9/2006
You and your cliffhangers!! Very frustrating :-)

Great opening. Your descriptions of the fire pulled me in as much as it did Elladan. I’m always fascinated by his visions, especially because you do such a good job combining their feeling of reality with a vagueness that must be so maddening for Elladan. And it’s particularly trying for him when it’s something like this, that so clearly involves danger and terror and yet what can he do? I love the idea that Elrohir knows when Elladan has these experiences, even if they are a mere instant and the way his teasing turns to patience and resignation when he realises that Elladan is experiencing a vision now. It must be hard for him too, to try to reassure his twin when they both know how unreliable these visions are.

So a blazing fire and trapped horses and at least one trapped elf? Eek. Not good. So who’s the elf? Are you going to hurt Elrohir again?! And just how close is Elladan that the horses brush past him? Is he actually the one in there? Hmm. And where does this Aradan fit in? Alright, I know you’re not going to tell me anything… But a sense of urgency and a missing twin who was last seen going to the stables is making me feel very uneasy! At least, I presume that’s where he was going to find Aradan, although maybe not if it’s late. Unless the horse has foaled early.

You really do suspense very well. A little too well!


Author Reply: I've often mentioned Elladan's visions, but have rarely concentrated on them as the focus of a story. He knows that what he sees probably will come to pass one day - but he doesn't know when or how. As you say, it's maddening for them both. In a way, it's even worse for Elrohir. All he can do is listen, and offer support and reassurance, and try to keep away from the stables. Oh, wait ... strike that last part.

A sense of urgency and a missing twin who was last seen going to the stables is making me feel very uneasy Yes - and Elladan agrees with you!


MystwingReviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/9/2006
Wow! I'm in such suspense right now! I hope the twins are okay. Of course, a little angst doesn't hurt either. I don't think I would want that abilitly even if I could get all the details. It would be a hard responsibility to deal with, and even more frustrating when you don't get all the info. Nice cliffhanger too.

Author Reply: Ahh - I'd forgotten what it's like to write a cliffhanger. It's been a long time.

Will the twins be OK? You mean both of them? Well, you'll have to wait and see about that. There'll be angst, you can guarantee it!

This is an ability Elladan wishes he really didn't have. He keeps feeling responsible for what happens - even though it's not his fault :(

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