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Your Heart Will Be True by Write Sisters	5 Review(s)
Imbecamiel	Reviewed Chapter: 16 on 2/18/2006
Ehm... My apologies for yet again reviewing at the very last minute. I'd meant to review earlier today, but I wound up spending most of the day with a stupid grin on my face, oohing and ahhing over every move my little great-nephew made. LOL, you know, I always thought it was rather ridiculous, the way everyone insists that the baby they're related to is absolutely the most adorable one ever born... but it's true! And the fact that he's the only baby in the family certainly doesn't help matters ;-) Heh, but enough with the boring excuses - on with the review! Oh dear... Now is not the greatest time to have a sleep-walking child. It's dangerous enough normally, but at least normally there would be not only family, but a palace full of guards and servants to keep an eye out for her. Now... And Eowyn doesn't even know that there's a reason to be particularly worried! Ack! You know, I'm really starting to love "your" Eldarion. Clearly still a child, but just starting to show the beginnings of young manhood... He's so sweet, and trying so hard to be brave. I love it! And the little detail of Aragorn having left him a dagger especially stuck out to me. It somehow just seemed so... right :-) laughs Oh, methinks Elenwen has been listening to too many stories of her father's younger years... Or, now that I think of it, perhaps not enough, if the thought that "Legolas will protect him" is enough to encourage her that easily... g Whew... Now there's a disadvantage - against two fighters at least her equals, if not her betters, Eowyn has to defend not only herself, but also two defenseless children, with virtually no forewarning. I think she carried herself off quite well, even if she wasn't totally successful! Whoa - an elf! Now somehow I was not expecting that! Wow... As illogical as it may be, the idea of a dark elf in post-LOTR ME was something of a shock. I've seen plenty before the War of the Ring, but after... Somehow I suppose that, even though I knew there were still some orcs, and evil men and such, I didn't think of the possibility of there being evil elves. But it would make sense - after all, though any other evil creature or person at that time would as likely as not have had some tie to Sauron - and thus have been, if not destroyed, at least quite set back by his defeat - an elf would most likely have not been directly tied to Mordor, even if they had a common foe, and thus would probably not have been much set back in his goals by Sauron's destruction. Huh... Interesting. That certainly does put a whole new twist on things... I look forward to finding out more about Vardnauth, and his history! Yeah! Go Bartho! Talk about everything having a purpose! His falling in love with Arien just then was not only a wonderful, sweet side-story, but if he hadn't he probably not have been at the palace, would certainly not have known to search out her in particular, and not only she, but also Arwen would probably have been killed before other help could arrive. LOL, and now that I think of it, even the state of his nerves played a part in putting him just where he was needed at the perfect time - had he been less nervous, he might have spoken with her and left before the asassins arrived. And had he been any more nervous, he might have arrived just too late to do any good... Good thing he's got such good timing! g pokes Duurben And now would be a REALLY good time for you to continue on in your paranoid vein and SEND HELP! smiles happily as he sends off Anarion Lovely, for once they seem to have decided to actually listen... smile turns to sigh Ah. Of course. Too good to be true. Door's locked. I never thought I'd be saying this, but... WE NEED DWARVES - even more unusual - WE WANT DWARVES! Someone get the dwarves in here! Yeah, that's right Eldarion! You show 'em! He certainly does take after his father(Hehe, and Elenwen even gets in on the action too!) g Heh, unfortunately, he's showing signs of taking after him a bit too much... Eh, yup. He's managed to get hurt... Poor Eldarion. But he certainly did put up a brave show! Hehe, and in the end, it's Pippin to the rescue! Those hobbits certainly do have a way of turning up and saving the day, just in the nick of time, don't they? GAH! Bartho! This is not good, not good, not good... Oh poor, poor guy... As if he hasn't suffered enough already, Vardnauth's going to make him re-live his worst moments... DUURBEN! NOW would be a REALLY good time! Oh, Gilraen... Oh that part's just heart-wrenching. From her dream, to her thoughts about Ada always keeping torches lit, to not understanding what this strange man is talking about or where they're going... Oh... PIPPIN! Hurry up! Excellent chapter, as always! Looking forward to more! Imbecamiel P.S. laughs My thanks for the explanation of the reason for Kori's rabbit-clubbing obsession - and yes, it does make perfect sense. g Heh, my mind just has a tendency to get struck suddenly by the strangest things, and race off on the oddest rabbit-trails... Er... Pun not intended... :-P P.P.S. Heh, yeah, it was nice not to leave me in agony, to get even more attached to the guy before breaking the news that Tantur's a villain. But still... Wah! I just knew I'd end up liking at least one of the villains! sighs P.P.P.S. Oh yes, do see the A&E Ivanhoe! It's excellently done - the best I've seen. Heh, and that's saying something, considering I've hunted down every version I've heard of. g LOL! Hannah thought Aragorn was grouchy? Hehe, I can certainly see where that could come from, but still... He's one of the few characters I thought was just completely cool from the first time I "met" him :-) Hehe, of course, the "dramatic" circumstances might have had something to do with that... g P.P.P.P.S. Ooo, those all sound like very interesting story ideas! And ones I'm sure you'd be able to pull off well :-) You know... If you're ever interested in a bit of encouragement/helpful critiquing/ideas in writing, my sister and I have a small writers' forum, that you and/or Hannah would certainly be welcome on. We're a fairly small group (11 members, at the moment), mostly Christian, teenage, homeschooled girls (with a few adults and a couple of non-Christians thrown into the mix). Several of us are writing fantasy books, all are LOTR fans, most are writing fanfiction, and we have a lot of fun talking, giving ideas and discussing each others' stories. We call ourselves the "Society for Nerve-Wracked Computer Ghosts", because of our tendency to "haunt" the computer, waiting to see what people think of our work. g P.P.P.P.P.S. LOL! Spock and Legolas comparing ears... giggles Hehe, nope no Trek dreams yet, just the more "normally" confused ones. Where Jack Sparrow gets off being on a ship with Thorongil and one of my sister's villains I'll never know... scratches head Author Reply: Babies are never boring! Especially cute ones who are related to us. grin As it happens, I am feeling disgustingly sick right now, so (yet again) I too am failing to meet my posting deadline. Come to think on it, I don't think I've posted on schedule since Chapter 2! Golly, that's depressing. It's a funny thing that Gilraen's sleep-walking was initially intended to be nothing more than an example of how difficult it was to get her to settle down: hyper even in sleep, and all that. It was only during a later brainstorm session that Hannah realized the potential of the little quirk! Although, perhaps I shouldn't say 'potential' in such a gleeful way under the circumstances…nervous look 'Our' Eldarion? That is very flattering! I guess the reason it makes sense for Aragorn to leave his son with a knife like that is because Aragorn is the sort to plan ahead for his children. Someday Eldarion will be king in his own right, and long before he is anywhere close he will have proven (to himself, his family, and his people) that he is just as capable of taking the job as his father was. laughs You're right, Elenwen seems to have missed the fact that Legolas attracts trouble as well. Too many stories from her self-deprecating father about his amazing elven friend who saved him from death over and over again, I guess. grins Methinks Eowyn has redefined the term 'baby-sitting'! resists the mighty urge to say something she should not It's a good thing Hannah is here to glare at me when I get the urge to blab later plot points. Suffice it to say we were very pleased by your reaction to Vardnauth, and that you will indeed find out more about Vardnauth's history! Probably more than you ever wanted to know… Ha! That's an excellent point! Someone should tell him that he dawdles very well — it'd be fun to see his reaction. grin Not a big dwarf fan, eh? Ah, well, we are glad you like this particular batch. Congrats on getting Duurben to listen to you! We are genuinely astounded — he hasn't listened to us since the first day he showed up in Thorongil! Witness: he was meant to be a pointless extra. Aragorn will manage one good, long, rant about how crazy his flirting-with-death-and-disaster son is before Arwen steps in and tells him which side of the family Eldarion's been getting those traits from. Methinks Iluvatar got a real kick out of creating hobbits. Dwarves look stolid and grouchy, and they ARE stolid and grouchy. Elves look fair and virtuous, and they ARE fair and virtuous. And hobbits look naive and dozy, and they are… sharp as tacks and exceedingly useful in dangerous situations! Huh. pats Imbecamiel comfortingly Better you like all the characters, including the bad ones, than be one of those bitter, skeptical people who even-handedly dislike everyone! I completely agree! I remember loving the first time Aragorn appeared! I've always had a bit of a thing for characters who don't look at all welcoming, and turn out to be incredibly good. Good characters who look good are nice enough, but they don't seem quite as real, nor as comforting. I liked Gandalf for the same reason, actually. What was that line of Frodo's I enjoyed so much…? "I think servants of the Enemy would look fairer and feel fouler." I love the sound of your forum! You didn't leave a link, so I googled your group name and found a link in your sister's bio on FF.net! Isn't the internet fun? Oh, and I signed up so that I can (hopefully) post once I've got more time on my hands. It's pending, so I thought I'd mention it to you so that you'd know who the heck is trying to sign up. grin Thanks for the spectacular review! It has made me feel not-quite-so yucky; a truly amazing feat!

RS	Reviewed Chapter: 16 on 2/16/2006
OH MY GOSH!! There are too many cliffhangers in this chapter! My poor little heart cannot take it! Aragorn and Legolas need to come back..No wait a minute. They need to get the cure at Lothlorien, fight the traitor, and then come back! Each scene (like watching a Peter Jackson movie!) was torture. You two did a wonderful job getting this reader nervous, panicky, jumpy, anxious--you name it--I'm that! The fight scenes were wonderful! My knuckles are white! I hope Eowyn's baby is ok. Eldarion fought just like his father. He will be proud of him. Elenwen's eyes are brown? Where did she get the brown eyes from? I knew Pippin would be there to save them! An elf? Vardnauth is an elf?! This is going to be more interesting than I thought. I hope Arien is a quick thinker and help Bartho out. Poor Gilraen! A sleep walker, huh? (Poor Arwen and Aragorn) Don't worry, Pippin is coming! I know it will be a long time coming, but I cannot wait for Aragorn to come back and retaliate (and I know he will, with a vengeance!) for what has been done to his family and city! The way you two write, it will be a GOOD ONE! But anyway back to the present! Get the dwarves! I hope they make it on time. You two outdid yourselves again. I know I've said this before but I think this is my favorite chapter! It will probably not be the the last time I say it! GOOD JOB! Author Reply: gives RS some chocolate for resuscitation purposes Now, now! We can't have you dying of cliffie-attack; we'd miss you too much! laughs We think you're right about Aragorn and Legolas' proper sequence of events! Or at least, we hope you are, cuz we're pretty sure that's what they're planning on doing... Any comparison to Peter Jackson is flattering, and any advances we have made in making you nervous, panicky, jumpy, or anxious are even MORE flattering! We thank you ever so! hands over more chocolate Golly, we didn't really consider the affect of all this on the baby... Worry not, though! The baby's pretty small, and this little confrontation did it no harm! Elenwen's eyes? Huh... Well, I guess she got them from her grandmother Gilraen -- that's the only relative we can think of whose eye-color isn't accounted for! Mostly we felt there were too many blue/silver/gray-eyed people wandering around this story. grin Yup, Vardnauth is an elf! Albeit an elf straying rather far from his heritage... More interesting than you thought? How nice! mischievous smiles Gilraen, being based on our siblings, has too much energy to simply sleep in her bed at night. Alas, indeed, for her parents! We hope the climax suits you! It took a long time to write, I'll tell you that... snort hugs RS for the umptieth time Thank you so much for your wonderful review!! We appreciate it more than we can say!

Vilwarin	Reviewed Chapter: 16 on 2/16/2006
Oh my gosh!! Oh my gosh!! You fantastic masters of torture! I liked Éowyn very much in her fighting scene, protecting the children at all costs. What a shock for the two little ones, what is Eldarion about to do (with the dagger?). Poor Elenwen, I surely would have sreamed as well. Oh, Bartho is of course the he say (or night). Not many can stand a chance against an elf. The situation must be very frustrating for Duurben, will he be too late or just in time, uh oh. The dwarves? That is a very smart idea, Duurben. If someone is master with doors, than it's the dwarves. Yes, never underestimate a Dúnadan with a fair amount of elven blood, even if he is only seven years. He has found his courage (and with it his recklessness), but two to one is just not fair. The scene that met his eyes was one to haunt him for the rest of his life Yes indeed, poor Pippin. I think he has learned a lot over the years of service, has he not? A second later the man dropped to the floor, Aragorn's dagger sticking from his back. Good throw. I knew the dagger would find good use, on never mentions a dagger and does nothing with it lol. "I'm fi-fine," Eldarion nodded shakily, trying not to look at the two dead men in his room. Of course he is nodds sarcastically. Oh my, Gilraen, we all know how dangerous sleep-walking is. What a horror to wake up and see...? Oh no, Bartho is about to be confronted with what he wants to keep buried deep. What a horrible tactic. ~Vil Author Reply: Us? Masters of torture? both gals blush Aw, shucks... I think 'babysitting' has been forever re-defined for Eowyn... grin Stay-tuned for Eldarion's dagger adventures! Bartho's chances aren't lookin' too good, are they? Elven bad guys are really kind of a pain in that respect. Yes, we fear we laid it on poor Duurben pretty thick in this story. When folks asked us to please bring him back for the next story, I don't think this is what they had in mind... Still, part of the reason we pick on him is because we know he can stand it! looks at Eldarion's odds Yeek! Well, as you say, Dunadan blood will tell! Pippin's a long way removed from the hapless and naive hobbit-lad he used to be, alright. He's a lot more fun to write when you can not only laugh over him, you can depend on him. Very perceptive of you on the dagger! Now let us return to Bartho and Gilraen and see how they are doing... Thank you for the excellent review!

Lady Saruman	Reviewed Chapter: 16 on 2/16/2006
oh no! i don't know what happened to my review below! why is there that iK thing when i have ..., and that double 'S' sign when i have astericks? my review is ruined. groan...

Lady Saruman	Reviewed Chapter: 16 on 2/16/2006
Oh, the violence of it all! So much fighting occurring at the same time. Eldarion and Elenwen are lucky to have Eowyn with them, since she is a shieldmaiden and she has been trained in the art of swords. She has an incredible instinct, and that is what enables her to be alert of any danger. But, one WOMAN is no match for TWO MEN. First of all, people consider (and still do) men being the physically stronger one, but these days, not anymore. But probably back then, it may have been different. In this story it was totally different because they were servants of Vardnauth, and of course, we always expect evil people to enhance their warriors¡¦ strength¡Xthat just always reminds me that these ¡§evil dictators¡¨ are cowardly. Way to go with Arien and Bartho! I think it¡¦s finally love come at last¡K haha LOL/ JK. It¡¦s surprising that Vardnauth wasn¡¦t able to defeat them yet, because he is an elf, and those two are humans. It makes me angry that elves would become evil, because they are of so fair a race, and it just doesn¡¦t seem right for them to be anything except good and noble. Someday, Vardnauth is going to pay¡K if you don¡¦t make the characters make him pay, then I WILL make him pay. Heheh¡Kyou¡¦ll see how¡K ƒº gasps in shock OMG, how¡¦d I do that? I just randomly pressed something, and that smiley face thing above just appeared! WICKED¡K Eldarion was pretty cool, he managed to keep the attackers off his sister and Eowyn. That¡¦s pretty good for a young guy who has just been taught the basics of the sword by his parents. But in the end, the real hero was Pippin. I liked how you made him imitate Gandalf¡¦s exclamation for him: ¡§Fool of a Took!¡¨ Way to go Pippin! (thought I thought I¡¦d never say this because Pippin was a character that I¡¦d never paid much attention to.) sigh In the end, Vardnauth won over Arien and Bartho, and know he¡¦s about to make Bartho remember his worst fears¡K. And Gilraen¡K I wonder who that person who is about to horrify her is? OK, I finally found out where I am on the roller coaster. I¡¦m stuck on an ummmmm¡K.ummmmm¡K.hmmmmm¡Kwhat was it again? I just had it in my head 3 seconds ago¡K oh yeah! I am now stuck at a part where your chest has to lean into the shoulder harness and it causes an uncomfortable feeling inside your chest because you can¡¦t breathe, and you want to throw up. So, basically, the coaster is at a descending point but it won¡¦t move albeit the force of gravity is working, and so I am now wheezing and congested because my chest is strained against the shoulder harness and I can¡¦t breathe. Miscellaneous: do you wanna know what we¡¦re doing in the real history class now? Square dancing. Yuck. At first the first several steps weren¡¦t that bad¡Xthey were things like swinging your partner (that¡¦s when you hook onto the crook of your partner¡¦s elbow and vice versa and then you spin in a circle, then reverse arms), then we have the do-se-do, which is putting your arms on your chest and circling your partner to the right. I forgot to mention ONE important thing: WE ALSO HAVE A CORNER PARTNER. That means that we have TWO partners. Ewwwwwww!!! Ok, and then the third step is that we grip our partner¡¦s right arm, then you walk past him on their left side, then move to the next guy, get his left arm, and walk past him on his right side, and you keep on doing that until you reach your partner. Then there¡¦s the bridge. The ¡§head couple¡¨, which is the couple facing the mountains, makes a bridge by placing the palms of their hands against each other, then the second pair goes under the bridge¡Xgirl, boy, girl, boy, and so on. Now, in each group there are four couples, and the last couple (which happens to be me and some guy) goes under the original bridge and makes a second one next to the first bridge. Then the head couple goes under our bridge and walk to their original spots, then we walk back. Finally, there¡¦s the most horrible thing of all. It¡¦s called something¡Xit starts with a ¡¥p¡¦¡Xand what happens is that a girl has to turn to the right. She raises up her left arm, and her partner takes her hand with his left, and puts his right arm AROUND A GIRL¡¦S WAIST and walks around with her around the circle. That was so disgusting and humiliating!!! Most of all, this was because this was during 1st period, and there were two PE classes, and they all gathered together to watch us dance. Waaahhhhhh!!! So with my partner, I snarled to him ¡§DON¡¦T YOU DARE TOUCH ME!¡¨ and he agreed, but there were actually some guys who actually DID PUT THEIR ARM AROUND A GIRL¡¦S WAIST! PERVERTS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Ok, sorry if I got you bored there. But I just had to tell somebody or else I¡¦ll explode. Yay, I¡¦m the first one to review again!!!!!!!! Pretend today is February 14. nudge, nudge, wink, wink HAPPY VALENTINE¡¦S DAY!!!!!!! Hershey¡¦s kisses/hugs, Lady Saruman ^_~ P.S. You really deserve a hug for all your hard work, just as long as you don¡¦t keep me in my latest roller coaster condition. (that chest thingy) -Lady Saruman ^_^ Author Reply: Eowyn has proven herself a fine baby-sitter, alright! grin Funny, that job-description never before included sword-fighting, I don't think... Glad you liked Arien and Bartho! Nothing unites like a common enemy -- maybe in this case they'll go even farther in their partnership... grin Don't worry about Vardnauth -- he's not walking out of this story unscathed! Eldarion won points, did he? That's great! We were hoping that his parentage would explain his brave tendencies adequately, even though he's still quite young. And we are thrilled that you're enjoying Pippin so much!! To be honest, we were more Sam/Frodo fans than Merry/Pippin fans, so we were actually just as surprised at how much fun it was to write Pippin as you were over how fun it was to read about him! Gilraen's attacker is just an ordinary henchman, but that's more than enough considering she doesn't have her brother's fighting skills... hands Lady Saruman a soda and an ice-pack Hoping this will make the harness more bearable... Wow! Well, I'm sorry you're not a fan of square-dancing! Lots of people aren't, and it's a bummer when you're given a required class that you don't enjoy. Still, don't give up too soon! We go square-dancing and line-dancing a lot at our community center, and we have a lot of fun with it! It's a little nerve-wracking dancing with a guy you don't know, but once you get over that part (I'm afraid it's pretty much impossible to do the dances without having your waist touched), and once the steps become more familiar and you're less inclined to crash into people (oh, my goodness, we've had some spectacular crashes, let me tell you!), it's really quite a cool activity! Thanks for the the review and the hug -- they are much appreciated!! grin

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