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| All Those Who Wander by daw the minstrel | 19 Review(s) |
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| endorearwen | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 7/31/2013 |
| I really enjoyed this story! We were taken away from the palace and got a glimpse of the unique spirit that is Legolas - surviving the crisis of a forgotten blankie and maintaining his composure sufficiently to wait calmly for help when he was lost - quite something for someone who is only 4 years of age (in human reckoning!) It was wonderful to see him 'reason' out the trust he has that his family would never let anything bad happen to him. I also enjoyed learning more about Eilian's troubles and seeing he and Thranduil reconnecting, if only in a small way. You did a great job of moving back and forth between time periods! :-) My favourite scene is Legolas' confrontation with Maltanaur as he is recovering at home - that was quite a 'high horse' for someone so tiny! Absolutely endearing! Author Reply: It's so odd watching you read these elfling stories all at once when I wrote them years apart. Don't they seem repetitious? If not, I'm glad. That scene with Legolas telling off Maltanaur was my favorite too. Then he politely says he had a lovely time. I cracked myself up writing that. But he wants to be sure Eilian is well looked after. daw | |
| 6336 | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 11/26/2008 |
| P.T.S.D. Middle Earth style! Lynda Author Reply: Good analogy! Tolkien's use of the Shadow makes a good metaphor for the evil that people run into in RL. | |
| autumn fallaise | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 5/12/2008 |
| Hey Daw! I have really enjoyed all the stories I've read so far! All the characters are convincingly drawn and interstingly different from each other, and I quite like your OC creations. Your plotlines are nicely interwoven and interesting! I'm addicted. Constructive criticism: Hmmm.... The only thing I can think of is: You mentioned some Sindar/Silvan culture clashes in 'Woodelves' - about Thranduil in Lorinand. Does his sons experience any, and how does it inform their thinking/upbringing? Do they ever have trouble with defining themselves as they have a mixed cultural heritage? Or is the area around the Stronghold thoroughly Sindarised by the time of Ithinduil, Eilian and Legolas? I guess part of Eilian's problem with Celuwen is a clash between Sindar/Silvan views on how to deal with Shadow? On the other hand, I think I remember one of the brothers identifying himself as a 'woodelf'. How does their father, who remembers Doriath, feel about that? Hmmm...didn't think about that before. now I'm wondering! Before I forget, you asked whether all the time jumps were clear, and they are, except for the last chapter of this story. I'm not sure where it's supposed to fit in. Maybe it's because I'm not that familiar with your storeis? I'll go back to reading now! Author Reply: Hi, AF! Oh man. I attached that last added scene to the wrong story, which is why you can't make sense of it. No one could! It belongs with "My Brother's Keeper." Interesting questions about Sindar/Silvan clashes. In LOTR, Legolas identifies himself as a wood elf, and I think by the late Third Age, the cultures must have been pretty mixed. I think even Thranduil would have seen himself as wood elf by that time, though he'd have remnants of his Sindar heritage too. Given the length of Elves' lives, I suspect there was more mixing as time went on, and the clashes were rarer than fanfic sometimes shows. That's my take anyway. I'm glad you're enjoying the stories. I'm very fond of these characters myself. daw | |
| elliska | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 8/3/2007 |
| This is very powerful and captures the relationship between Eilian and Maltanaur so well. Especially the ending. Poor Eilian, he is so light-hearted that it is easy to forget that he is also driven, maybe even more than either of his other brothers, to protect his home at any cost. As I said, very powerful daw! Author Reply: Thanks, Elliska. I screwed up when I attached this scene. It really belongs with "My Brother's Keeper," since it's the bout of Shadow Sickness that sent Eilian home there, and Maltanaur thinks about this scene at the end. I'm finding when I just think about a scene and not a whole story it's easier to bring out the emotion because I'm not trying to do as much at once. | |
| sofia | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 8/2/2007 |
| ooh... I don't like reading about Eilian crying- its so sad. Maltanaur is having such a 'nana' moment, I love it. Keep it coming please! Author Reply: Thank you, Sofia. As it turns out, I screwed up posting this! It should be a missing scene attached to "My Brother's Keeper," the story where Eilian comes home with Shadow Sickness and plays drug cop. He really was luck to Maltanaur. Eru only knows if anyone else could have made him go home. | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 8/2/2007 |
| Maltanaur is brilliant. He's just the rock Eilian needs. And Eilian would never have survived long enough to grow up and have Flower Face without his keeper - he'd have cracked for sure. Thranduil should be very, very grateful to his old friend. (Not least for preventing the royal insanity his son might have driven him to without his steady reassuring presence.) So many delicious characters - all three dimensional and much loved. Author Reply: Thranduil showed his wisdom when he picked both his sons' keepers. Maltanaur is such a good match for Eilian. He tolerates Eilian's foolishness because he sees Eilian's strengths and goodness. And he saves Eilian from himself and all the evils that lie around him. Thanks, Bodkin. | |
| obsidianj | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 8/1/2007 |
| I always love to hear more of Eilian. This scene throws some more light on the shadow thickness and how it affects Eilian. It makes this sickness and its effects more real to me. Eilian is so lucky that he has Maltanaur to be his minder. Author Reply: Thanks, Obsidianj. I've been gradually feeling my way to a better picture of Shadow Sickness. It's not pretty. Eilian goes home and then we get the story told in "My Brother's Keeper." Legolas is an adolescent there and he idolizes Eilian. This scene with Maltanaur is one he never hears about. Eilian wouldn't want him to know, not just because it would be humiliating, but because he wants to shelter Legolas from some of the horror in the woods. | |
| meckinock | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 7/31/2007 |
| God, I love Maltanaur. Too bad we can't all have someone to tell us we fought the good fight and go home and everything will be all right. Where was I? Eilian's despair and exhaustion really come through here, as well as Maltanaur's caring. A nice addition to the story - either one! Author Reply: I still can't believe I attached this to the wrong story. You remember at the end of "My Brother's Keeper" when Maltanaur sits with the guy who's addicted to dangwath? And he holds him while he weeps and thinks he did it for Eilian when the shadow overcame him? That's what this is supposed to be about. Thanks for the review, Meckinock. | |
| Dot | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 7/31/2007 |
| Aren’t you full of surprises?! It’s always good to see something new from you (I’m a little confused as to where this fits in with this story because I would have assumed it was much later but that could be because I haven’t had pleasurable rereading time for far too long.) This is excellent. The language in it – wow! I hadn’t realised I was holding my breath until I got to the part where Sórion comes up to Eilian and I was sure the fight was over. Great job with Eilian. His irritability really comes through. And I like how he seems aware of it and yet can’t seem to remedy it – that rings so true. There’s such a sense of hopelessness and weariness too in his thoughts about how more orcs will keep coming no matter how many they get rid of. I also thought it was well done how we begin to realise what’s wrong – Eilian’s despair and self-loathing, Maltanaur’s calm handling of him, the fact that the rest of the patrol seem to be looking more towards Sórion than Eilian. his thoughts spun in tight little repetitious circles. I love that description. I’m so glad Eilian has Maltanaur. Even Gelmir seems a little at a loss. Though maybe he knows Maltanaur is the best person to speak to Eilian right now too. I suppose as scary as it is for the person who’s suffering, it must be frightening for everyone around them too. Physical injuries are so much easier to deal with. I feel bad too for Sórion – he’s in a tough position because he has to work with Eilian and yet he’s being snapped at for trying to do his job. That can’t be easy even when you suspect what’s wrong with the person. Plus, I’ve always had the impression that those two were never great friends. I do love how you show Eilian trying, though – he knows that he’s being short-tempered and tries to stop himself when he can. You can still see what a good captain he is beneath this sickness. "You are going home if I have to tie you up and drag you." Go Maltanaur! He’s about the only person who could make Eilian do what’s best for him. Unless Thranduil or Ithilden happened to ride into camp. I’d say you heard my sigh all the way over there when he thought about his father’s disapproval. Thranduil will be only too happy that Maltanaur dragged his son out of there to come home and get help. That was a very tense scene between the two of them. I knew Maltanaur would win but Eilian just has to fight it all the way until there’s no other way out. It was quite a moving moment when relief then all but knocks him over. The ending too was very touching. I was so glad to see Eilian give in and open himself up to some comfort and the reassurance that if he just holds on it will be ok, even if it doesn’t seem possible to him yet. It was a rather unsettling glimpse too of how insidious this shadow is. Maltanaur really is a rock. Great piece, daw. Author Reply: I'm not surprised you couldn't see how this fit with "All Those Who Wander" because as it turns out, I attached it to the wrong story. I belongs with "My Brother's Keeper." :-) Oh well. Just a little mistake there! I tried to keep this tight to Eilian's perceptions and you're so right when you say he's misjudged his father. Eilian is deep in Shadow Sickness. He sees no hope at all from any direction. Poor thing. He's lucky to have Maltanaur to insist he go home. Eveyone else just has to tiptoe around him, though they can see far more clearly than Eilian does exactly what's wrong. It's interesting that Tolkien saw Sauron working through despair and fear as much as through physical force. Thanks for the review. Lovely as always. | |
| pipinheart | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 7/31/2007 |
| Very nice! This is a very nice scene between Eilian and Maltanaur. Everyone is worried about Eilain, but as always Eilain wants to push himself further. Maltanaur is a very fierce protector and will protect him from himself if he has to... They waited for the dawn, very nice. Love it!!! Please continue Author Reply: Eilian is probably his own worst enemy, and in Mirkwood, that's saying something. But Maltanaur isn't putting up with any nonsense. I'm glad you liked this. | |