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| Nothing of Note by Primsong | 2 Review(s) |
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| Kara's Aunty | Reviewed Chapter: 27 on 10/30/2008 |
| Hello Primsong, I am very much enjoying this. You have a very rich imagination and the descriptions of towns, places and bogs with their many varieties of plants and wildlife is absorbing. Did you have such knowledge prior to writing the story or did you have to research specifically? I did - it took me so long to research even the smallest detail of a paragraph that I thought I'd never finish a chapter let alone a story. So I am very impressed with all the fine descriptions of each new environment Bilbo encounters. It's great to see a bit more of the Gamgees too now that he's arrived back home (I hope there's some Sam coming up, he's my favourite!). Trust Bilbo to get ill on the last leg of his journey! Just one wee thing - there are a few terms that look strange being used in conjunction with Middle Earth: flea market, Finch saying he 'bust' his arm (I think that's an Americanism) and Bilbo: calling himself 'crazy' - these aren't necessarily bad things because they get your point across, but they look a bit odd. Sorry if that sounds picky. I'm a bit of an eejit when it comes to that and I know from personal experience that no matter how hard one tries to keep to a particular vernacular - especially if it's not normally used by oneself - there will always be the odd error or two. These minor things, however, do not detract from my overall enjoyment of this terrific tale. Great work again! Maureen :) Author Reply: Thank you once again, not only for sharing your enjoyment but for being willing to give good constructive feedback as well. I would like to go back over this tale and brush it up here and there, and items like this are exactly the sort of things I would be looking for. | |
| Dreamflower | Reviewed Chapter: 27 on 7/12/2005 |
| Man oh Man! If I had Lobelia on my doorstep when I was sick, I'd try to stay well too, LOL! | |