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| On Border Patrol by Manderly | 5 Review(s) |
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| elliska | Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 7/16/2005 |
| That was a really interesting POV in the opening paragraphs--the orcs' coming through the forest. Evil elves--well, everything is relative to a person's POV isn't it?! Good battle sequence. I think Bainion is going to seriously regret ignoring Feren's orders when Feren finds out. Arrogant little thing for doing that. And not smart--both for disobeying and for letting the orcs go. He is definitely trouble. Poor Legolas--his first big battle and Men again all in one day. Great chapter! :-) Author Reply: I guess the concept of multiculturism is non-existent between elves and orcs. I thought it would be rather fun to show the orcs' POV for a change as to how they feel about the elves. Like you said, it's all a matter of POV. Bainion has allowed his personal feelings get in the way of being a prudent officer. I agree that it will be unpleasant for him when Feren finds out. I haven't quite decided yet whether I will include a scene where Feren tears a strip off this wayward lieutenant. Legolas is probably having second thoughts about being a warrior in a border patrol right about now. Thanks for reviewing! | |
| thechevin | Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 7/15/2005 |
| The section when Legolas and Hesin first saqw the Orc was very telling especially when Legolas offered the tree comfort and the Orc noticed that they had stopped moving, he seems to have inherited quite a bit of his father's power. The fight itself was very tense and realistic and the stress it placed on the young warrior was plain, made all the worse by Bainion's horrible attitude towards him, that elf has major problems and I do not think Thranduil or Ferin will be in the least bit pleased if and when they find out their orders were countermanded by him! Perhaps Ferin could come on an inspection and catch him out I would like to see that!!! Making Legolas help to burn the bodies was another unnecessary cruelty, yes he has to become accustomed to such things but Beinion seems intent on making his life miserable WHich worries me greatly now that the captain is gone and Beinion is in charge any sign of weakness will be pounced on and exploited and Legolas's reactions to the humans in the camp will be sure to be noticed oh dear! Another super chapter thanks Author Reply: Legolas is his father's son in many ways, though he certainly has a long way to go yet. Bainion is certainly not going to get himself a fan club soon. He's nasty, but Legolas probably needs to deal with some nasty people in his life. He's been cocooned for too long (with a few exceptions, of course), but you are right. Neither the King nor big brother will be pleased with how Legolas has been treated by Bainion. Though Bainion might be totally unpleasant, he's going to be rather instrumental in helping Legolas in realizing a thing or two later on. As always, your kind comments are greatly appreciated! | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 7/15/2005 |
| Bainion is going to be trouble! One way or another he is going to get our hero into peril. Those missing orcs don't seem a good thing. Bainion in charge doesn't seem too brilliant either. And the captain swanning off to see Feren seems a bit lackadaisical. Captains are supposed to - well - captain. Men in camp! That's a prejudice Legolas is going to have to overcome! (Dunedain Ranger-types are good, Legolas! And small children are generally harmless.) Good thing Hesin is there at his shoulder - when he's allowed to be. Young warriors must be very vulnerable until they've had the chance to learn the difference between theory and practice. And calming trees down is probably not wise until after the orcs have passed. Make a note! Good chapter. Author Reply: I think Feren will probably have to a do a major overhaul of things in this patrol when he finds out what has been happening. Both captain and lieutenant are certainly not behaving as model officers. You are right about the men in camp. I figured it's something that Legolas should deal with before he scampers off with the Fellowship. Legolas' inexperience is showing here, which is how I want him portrayed. Thanks for your review! | |
| French Pony | Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 7/14/2005 |
| I really liked the look at Elves from an Orc's point of view. They stink, and they're evil. Of course, that's just how an Orc would think! I think it gives them a little personality, and it reminds me of the tiny glimpses we get of them communicating among themselves about orders and whatnot in Return of the King. Bainion sounds like he's suffering a serious case of testosterone poisoning. He's all swagger and "I Know Best," even to the point of flying in the face of Feren's orders regarding Hesin and Legolas. Lucky for him that the battle went as well as it did. I wonder what happened to Legolas with Men before. Is that in one of your other stories, or will we find out about it in this one? Author Reply: I decided I had to get in the bit about elves being smelly and evil. So much of the same had been said of orcs in these stories that I thought I'd go the other way for a bit. Got a reaction out of Legolas anyway. People like Bainion are rampant in the workplace and I guess even the elves must be blessed with a few like him in their midst. I don't think Feren will be pleased when he finds out, if he finds out. Legolas and Men - the story behind that is in my second story, An Act of Betrayal. Poor Legolas had quite a time in that one. Thanks for reviewing! | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 7/14/2005 |
| Somehow, I think those escaped orcs are going to cause further problems and Lieutenant B is going to rue the day he let them go. Legolas acquitted himself well, and even follow orders well. But he's having trouble now. Sort of post stress stuff plus the men. I'm interested to see what they're going there. Author Reply: Escaped orcs are never a good thing. Lieutenant B definitely made a wrong move there. Things are happening a little too quickly for Legolas here, first a major battle and then humans in the camp - brings back some pretty nasty memories for him. But I think it's too early on in his career to apply for stress leave. Thanks for reviewing! | |