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Makalaurë  by Eruanneth_Luin 4 Review(s)
orlandochick05Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 10/4/2005
Excellent, as usual. I love the way you talk about the elves and sleep and dreaming and all that. You make it seem really normal. And it's all true too!! Please update soon!

Author Reply: To the elves, too, it would be normal. It makes one realize just how truly different we are one from the other, Elves and Men. Tolkien imagined Elves as what Men could be, but were not since many had turned from the reverence of Ilúvatar (the One) and listened to and believed the lies of Morgoth (the Deceiver).

Thank you for your review, orlandochick.

BodkinReviewed Chapter: 7 on 10/4/2005
I can understand why Linwe is angry, but it's not helping really. He is making things much harder for Veryandil. And Oloriel. He needs to talk to his wife. I'm glad he softens up at the end - but how can he not, when Makalaure has brought Veryandil back and managed to return his fea, which could so easily have been lost.

And it's just what Makalaure needs. As is Oloriel's clear sight into his pain. And knowing that Veryandil is so willing to risk himself will hold Makalaure to the present, despite his worries, I think.

The atmosphere of drifting mists and loss are just great. Wonderful stuff.

Author Reply: For a young scholar, his dream-healer wife and their very young child all born and raised in the Blessed Realm, the current situation is far from normal. Therefore they were not prepared for the entrance of a Kinslayer in their midst. Frequently we, as well, are not ready for the unexpected in our own lives and our reactions may dismay and startle us. Linwë has his own set of guilt-feelings to deal with before he can begin to have compassion for Maglor’s grief.

Veryandil may be one of the most loyal friends Maglor has ever had through his long life. Uncomplicated love, and yet with a child’s peculiar boldness may enter voluntarily opened doors that would resist all stronger force.

Alassiel again created a wonderful vision for us, an image of an event that cannot be contained in mere words.

Thank you for your review, Bodkin.

AglarendisReviewed Chapter: 7 on 10/3/2005
Bravo! Another well-written chapter! Whew, I was afraid there for a bit. Makalaurë can be so stubborn, but thankfully, so can Vriandil. I am glad it was he who found his friend. I was afraid we wouldn't see Makalaurë at all in this chapter. And at least he's back in a physical form again.

Just one tiny suggestion. You might want to explain what you mean by osamwe. There are some who will not know what you mean when you talk about this.

Isn't it time to put chapter 8 up yet? (very big grin)

Author Reply: Veryandil is the non-censuring, uncompromising friend that Maglor needs to face and release his relentless guilt over a past he cannot change. As with most of us, flight and denial are two powerful forces to be reckoned with in the pursuit of healing of mind and spirit. Veryandil will not accept either on Maglor’s behalf.

Sorry about the unexplained words. We shall attempt to do better.

As for chapter 8… it is simmering nicely and should be up soon.

Thank you for your review, Aglarendis

lwarrenReviewed Chapter: 7 on 10/3/2005
This was a chapter just full of emotions, ranging from Veryandil's desparate search for Makalaure, to his mother's fear, and his father's anger, and the resoluteness of Maglor in his effort to return the child to his hroa. I was fascinated with Veryandil's search - he's such an intelligent youngster. He thought to try and track the stag on the path of dreams, which he knew had been Nyello before; he even thought to try to bring him back by playing his harp. Then he loses himself in that awful misty nothingness - I was really concerned he would not find a way to return. But he's aided by one of Namo's own, and Makalaure cannot turn away...he must help his little friend if it's within his power to do so. I loved the use of light and color throughout - it's very effective, especially where Nyello is concerned. And the characters of Oloriel and Linwe are so well-drawn...I could feel their fear and even understand Linwe's anger, although I'm glad he finally put the rage aside and accepted Makalaure's help. The ending between the relieved nana and atto was so sweet and tender - they do need some quality time together to strengthen themselves through their own relationship. Wonderful, beautiful writing (both of you!)

linda

Author Reply: We are so pleased you are enjoying our tale. It is quite an adventure for us as well. The family of elves first appeared to Alassiel and we have both marveled at their involvement and impact on the life of the deeply hurting Maglor and his reaction to them. Elves by their very nature have a deep love for children and the open, freely-given gift of trust and love from Veryandil to Maglor has breached the fortress walls of his self-imposed exile from most others.

You are quite correct that Linwë and Oloriel need to together-time. This has likely been the most distressing time in their brief marriage, and certainly not because of a commonplace event experienced by elves living in Aman.

Thank you for your review, lwarren.

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