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Grains of Wheat  by Eruanna 4 Review(s)
LarnerReviewed Chapter: 6 on 2/15/2006
And is it the Elves or two lost Hobbits who sing this hymn, I find myself wondering.

I'd use "islands" rather than "isles" in the last line, but that's just me.

Author Reply: It could be either, really. Looking back on this, I suppose there is something rather Frodo-like about it, perhaps. :) But really, when is Frodo *not* involved, with me? ;)

Also thanks for the constructive crit! I'll have to think about that one...

Blessings,
Eruanna

ArmarielReviewed Chapter: 6 on 5/30/2005
Good use of Elf-voice here, and of rhyme and meter and imagery without being too predictable. To be truthful, however, I like your poems and stories about hobbits best *g* Just partial to the little folk, I suppose...lol

b&c,
Armariel~~~{~@

Author Reply: Thank you for being truthful, dear! I always appreciate that. And to be honest, I love my hobbits best, too. ;) The Elves are high and beautiful and utterly beyond our reach, but sometimes I feel the need to reach toward that unreachable beauty anyway. And yet, most times when I do, I find it is Frodo who is the living embodiment of that beauty. So it always comes back to hobbits, in the end.

Again, thanks for the kind and constructive comments! And I'll try to have something hobbity for you soon. ;)

Blessings,
Eruanna

Brenda G.Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 5/30/2005
This is lovely, haunting, memorable. I felt very elvish while reading it!

Author Reply: Wow, thank you! :) I'm glad I could get something of the Elvish feeling across, and I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)

Blessings,
Eruanna

NerdanelReviewed Chapter: 6 on 5/30/2005
This is a lovely poem. The rhyme and meter are mostly consistent, and it flows very well. It is a perfect song, one that they would sing to the one who made the stars. Nice Job. It is good poetry.

Author Reply: Thanks so much for the kind review! I did struggle a bit with meter, as it's something I've really had to teach myself, and I'm still learning a lot. But I'm glad you think it came out well. :) Again, thanks for taking the time to review!

Blessings,
Eruanna

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